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16 Amazing Personal Statement Examples (2024 Update)

Admissions officer reviewed by Ben Bousquet, M.Ed Former Vanderbilt University

Written by Kylie Kistner, MA Former Willamette University Admissions

Key Takeaway

What’s that old saying? “The best way to learn is by doing.” Well, we believe that, in personal statements and in life, cliches like this should be avoided. That's why we recommend reading some example essays before you start writing your own.

Now, before we get into our examples, we should quickly talk about what admissions officers look for in personal statements in the first place.

What does an admissions officer look for in a personal statement?

Before we get to the essays, let’s briefly walk through what goes through an admissions officer’s head when they open an application.

Admissions officers (AOs) read hundreds to thousands of applications in a single year. Different institutions require admissions officers to use different criteria when evaluating applications, so the specifics will vary by school. Your entire application should cohere to form a seamless narrative . You'll be crafting that narrative across the following categories:

• Transcripts and course rigor : AOs look at the classes you’ve taken to assess how much you’ve challenged yourself based on the classes your school offers. They’re also looking at how well you've done in these classes each term.
• Extracurricular activities : When reading through your activities list, AOs look at the activities you’ve done, how many years you’ve participated in them, and how many hours a week you devote to them. They’re assessing your activities for the levels of magnitude, impact, and reach that they demonstrate. (Want to know more about these terms? Check out our extracurricular impact post .)
• Background information : This background information briefly tells admissions officers about demographic and family information, your school context, and any honors or awards you’ve received.
• Letters of recommendation : Letters of recommendation give AOs insight into who you are in the classroom.
• Essays : And, finally, the essays. Whether you’re writing a personal statement or a supplemental essay , essays are the main place AOs get to hear your voice and learn more about you. Your personal statement in particular is the place where you get to lay out your overall application narrative and say something meaningful about your personal strengths.

So, with all that in mind, what does an admissions officer actually look for when reading your personal statement?

A few traits tend to surface across the best personal statements, no matter the topic or format. There are four primary areas you should focus on as you craft your personal statement.

• Strengths : AOs want to know about your strengths. That doesn’t mean bragging about your accomplishments, but it does mean writing about a topic that lets you showcase something positive about yourself.
• Personal meaning : Personal statements shouldn’t be fluff. They shouldn’t be history essays. They should be personal essays that ooze meaning. The topic you choose should show something significant about yourself that the admissions officers won’t get from any other part of your application.
• Authenticity and vulnerability : These characteristics can be the most difficult to achieve. Being “vulnerable” doesn’t mean airing all your dirty laundry. It means revealing something authentic and meaningful about who you are. To be vulnerable means to go beyond the surface level to put yourself out there, even to admissions officers who you’ve never met.
• Clear organization and writing : And lastly, admissions officers also want your essay to be organized clearly so it’s easy to follow along. Remember that admissions officers are reading lots of applications, even in one sitting. So you want to make your reader’s job as easy as possible. Thoughtful and skillful writing can also help take your personal statement to the next level.

If you want to know more about how to incorporate these traits into your own essay, we have a whole guide about how to write the perfect personal statement .

But for now, let’s get into the examples.

We’ve broken up the example personal statements into three categories: best personal statement examples, good personal statement examples, and “bad” personal statement examples. These categories show you that there is a spectrum of what personal statements can look like. The best examples are the gold standard. They meet or exceed all four of the main criteria admissions officers are looking for. The good examples are just that: good. They’re solid examples that may be lacking in a specific area but are still effective personal statements. The “bad” examples are those that don’t yet stack up to the expectations of a personal statement. They’re not objectively bad, but they need some specific improvements to align with what admissions officers are looking for.

Here we go!

The Best Personal Statement Examples

Writing an exceptional personal statement takes a lot of time and effort. Even the best writers can find the genre challenging. But when you strike the perfect chord and get it right, it’s almost like magic. Your essay jumps off the page and captures an admissions officer’s attention. They feel like you’re right there with them, telling them everything they need to know to vote “yes” on your admission.

The following essays are some of our favorites. They cover a range of topics, styles, and student backgrounds. But they all tell meaningful stories about the writers’ lives. They are well-organized, use vivid language, and speak to the writers’ strengths.

For each essay, our team of former admissions officers have offered comments about what makes the essay exceptional. Take a look through the annotations and feedback to see what lessons you can apply to your own personal statement.

Personal Statement Example #1: Reinvention

For our first example, which we’ve titled “Reinvention,” we’re going to watch Alex break the essay down paragraph by paragraph. This one’s really good. Let’s take a look.

As Alex explains, this essay takes a couple of (very beautiful!) paragraphs to get to its central message: reinvention. Once we reach that turning point, the writer seamlessly introduces us to their engineering interests, then returns again to their mother’s influence. The metaphor of “watermelon rinds” ties everything together. The writer comes across as a clever, thoughtful person—one we would surely want on our campus.

(Want to see more video examples and get personalized application and essay help? Let’s work together. )

Personal Statement Example #2: Thankful

My family has always been broke. Saturday mornings and Thursday evenings, always the same drill: the kids (my brothers and me) would be loaded in the car with my parents and off we’d all go to the food pantry. New clothes were few and far between, and going on vacation was something that we could only dream of. Despite our financial struggles, one year, my parents decided to surprise us with a trip to Disney Land. It was a complete shock to me and my siblings. We were over the moon. In fact, the screams of excitement that emanated from my younger brother’s mouth still ring in my ears.

But as the trip drew close, my excitement tempered and I began to worry. Being poor when you’re young doesn’t just affect you materially. It also affects how you see the world and loads you up with a whole range of anxieties that, in an ideal world, no child should have to face. How were my parents going to afford this, I wondered? Would an expense like this push us over the brink?(( The beginning of this essay, and especially this sentence, show the writer’s empathy. They are not selfish; they understand their broader family context and take that into consideration.)) I didn't want to ruin the surprise by asking, but I couldn't shake the feeling of dread building inside of me.

The day of our trip arrived and we set off for the airport. In the car, my dad made an off-the-cuff comment about a new video game that he’d wanted to play but didn’t buy, and everything clicked—my parents had made the trip possible by saving for months, cutting back on expenses and sacrificing their own comforts to make the trip happen.

As we boarded the plane, I was filled with a mix of emotions. I was grateful beyond words for my parents' sacrifice, but I was also overwhelmed by the guilt of knowing that they had given up so much for us. I didn't know how to express my gratitude; when we deplaned in LAX, I gave my mom and dad a rib-crushing hug.

The trip itself was everything that I had dreamed of and more. We spent four magical days at Disney Land(( Nice use of vivid details here. The reader can picture the sights and smells of Disney—and the ensuing hunger when passing a churro stand.)) , speed running the roller coasters and campy boat rides from the 70s. Sure, we packed our own food and walked right by the churro stands with a hungry look in our eyes. But I will never forget the feeling of unmitigated joy that my family shared on that trip, the smiles that painted my parents’ faces.

But the trip itself was nothing compared to the gratitude I felt for my parents(( Here, the writer transitions to reintroducing the theme of gratitude.)) . They had given us the gift of a lifetime, and I knew that I would never be able to repay them for their sacrifice.

In the years since that trip, I have carried that feeling of gratitude with me. It has motivated me to work hard and to always strive to be the best person that I can be. I want to make my parents proud and to show them that their sacrifice was worth it(( Finally, the writer sums things up with an eye to the future. It’s helpful for an admission officer to picture what the essay’s lessons might mean for the student as a future community member.)) .

I will never be able to fully express my gratitude for what my parents did for us, but I will always remember their selflessness and their willingness to put their own needs aside for the sake of our happiness. It was a truly surprising and incredible act of love, and one that I will always be thankful for.

AO Notes on Thankful

This essay accomplishes a few things even though it essentially tells one story and offers a quick reflection. It gives some important context regarding the challenges of being from a lower-income family. It does that in a way that is authentic, rather than problem-focused. It also shows that the writer is empathetic, family-oriented, and reflective.

Why this essay stands out:

• Vulnerability : This essay is upfront about a challenging topic: financial insecurity. While you don’t have to tell your most difficult challenge in an essay, this writer chose to write about a circumstance that gives additional context that may be helpful as admissions considers their application.
• Personal : The writer gets into some family dynamics and paints a picture of how their family treats and takes care of each other.
• Values: We clearly see some values the writer has and that they don’t take their parents’ sacrifices for granted. As an admission officer, I can picture this student using their education to give back—to their family or to others.

Personal Statement Example #3: Pickleball

I’ve always been one to have a good attitude no matter the circumstances. Except when it comes to exercise. From dodgeball in PE class to family Turkey Trots, I’m always the first one out and the last one across the finish line. These realities aren’t from a lack of skill—I’m actually quite coordinated and fast. They are from a lack of effort(( This is a quick hit of… either humor or vulnerability. I chuckled at the blunt honesty, and am intrigued to learn more.)) . Despite my best intentions, I can never get myself to care about sports or competitions. So when my dad first asked me to be his pickleball partner last summer, I did nothing but laugh.

But soon, I realized that he was serious. My dad started playing pickleball two years ago as a fun way to exercise. He’d become a star in our city’s recreation league, and I always enjoyed cheering him on from the sidelines. When his doubles partner got relocated for work, my dad decided that the disruption was a good opportunity for us bond through pickleball. Even though I was mortified by the thought of running back and forth to hit a bouncing ball, I reluctantly agreed.

The next Saturday morning, we went to the court for our first practice. I was wearing sweatpants, an old sweatshirt, and a grimace. My dad showed me how to hold the paddle, serve, and return the ball to our opponents. He told me about staying out of the kitchen—an endearing pickleball term that references the “kitchen,” or the middle part of the court—trying to make me laugh. Instead, I sighed impatiently and walked to my end of the court, ready to get it over with.

My dad remained patient in spite of my bad attitude. He gently served me the ball, and I gave a lackluster attempt to return it. The ball bounced into the net. I hadn’t even made it to his side of the court. Trying his best to encourage me, my dad gave me the ball so I could serve it to him instead. I tossed the ball up and hit it underhand toward my dad. It hit the net again. I tried again and again, each attempt with less care than the last. I grew frustrated and threw my paddle down in anger(( Okay, this paragraph gives a good dose of openness to the emotions of the writer. They’ve served up an opportunity to learn a lesson soon…)) .

After seeing my mini-meltdown, my dad crossed the kitchen to talk to me. During our conversation, I began to ask myself why I got so frustrated when I wasn’t trying very hard in the first place. I thought pickleball was a miserable sport, but I realized that it wasn’t pickleball that I cared about. I cared about my dad. I wanted to make him proud(( Ah, and there it is! A realization. As the admission officer I’m thinking, “Go on…”)) . Playing pickleball with him was the least I could do to thank him for everything he’d done for me. I dusted off my bad attitude alongside my paddle, and I got up to try another serve.

That serve hit the net again. But more determined now, I kept trying until my serves went over the net and through my dad’s weak side. I couldn’t believe it. My attitude adjustment helped me see the game for what it was: a game. It wasn’t supposed to be agonizing or cruel. It was supposed to be fun.

I learned that my attitude towards sports was unacceptable. This experience taught me that it’s okay to have preferences about what you enjoy, but it’s important to always maintain a positive attitude(( And the lesson learned! )) . You may just enjoy it after all.

Now my dad and I are both stars in our recreation league. Soon, we will make our way to our league’s semi-finals. We’ve worked our way through the bracket and are close to the championship. What I appreciate more about this experience, however, is how close it’s brought my dad and I together. His patience, positivity, and persistence have and will always inspire me. I want to be more like him every day, especially on the pickleball court.

AO Notes on Pickleball

This is a strong “attitude adjustment” essay, a bit of a remix of a challenge essay. The challenge, in this case, was a fixed mindset about sports that needed to be adjusted. The writer takes us on a witty journey through their own attitude towards organized athletic activities and their father.

• Self-aware : Similar to the vulnerability of other essays, this writer is willing to criticize themselves by recognizing that they need an attitude adjustment. Even before they changed their attitude, we get the sense that they are at least aware of their own lack of effort.
• Strong conclusion : We see a nice lesson at the end that relates both to having an open mind and caring for others. They even make a point about simply enjoying things because they are fun.
• Life lesson : Beyond the stated lesson, as an admission officer with a few more years on this Earth than the writer, I can tell this lesson will apply beyond sports. In fact, I can easily picture this student trying a new class, club, or group of friends in college because they are now more open to novel experiences.

Personal Statement Example #4: The Bird Watcher

I’m an avid walker and bird watcher(( Okay, the writer gets right into it! I think this simple introduction of the topic works well because they are writing about a less common hobby among teenagers. If they had said “I am an avid baseball player”, I would have been less eager to learn more.)) . Growing up, I’d clear my head by walking along the trail in the woods behind my house. By the time I was immersed in the chaos of high school, these walks became an afternoon routine. Now, every day at three o’clock, I don my jacket and hiking shoes and set off. As I walk, I note the flora and fauna around me. The wind whispering through the trees, the quiet rustling of a chipmunk underfoot, and the high-pitched call of robins perched atop branches, all of it brings me back to life after a difficult day.

And recently, the days have been more difficult than not. My grandparents passing, parents divorcing, and doctor diagnosing me with ADHD have presented me with more challenges than I’ve ever experienced before. But no matter what’s going on in my life, the wildlife on my walks brings me peace. As an aspiring ornithologist, the birds are my favorite(( This paragraph accomplishes a lot: a montage of difficult circumstances, context for their application, and declares their future career.)) .

I became interested in ornithology during long childhood afternoons spent at my grandparents’ house. They would watch me while my parents finished up work. I’d listen to the old bird clock that hung on the wall in the kitchen. Each number on the clock corresponded with a different bird. Every hour, the clock would chirp rather than chime. When the cardinal sang, I knew my parents would be arriving soon. Those chirps are all seared into my memory.

Twelve o’clock: robin. The short, fast, almost laugh-like sound of the robin always makes me hungry. All those Saturday afternoons filled with laughter and good food have resulted in a Pavlovian response. I’d cook meatballs with my grandma, splashing sauce on her floral wall paper. We’d laugh and laugh and enjoy the meal together at her plastic-covered kitchen table. This wasn’t my home, but I felt at home just the same.

Three o’clock: blue jay. It’d chime as soon as we walked in the door after school. The blue jay was my grandpa’s favorite. It was also mine. Why he loved it, I’m not completely sure. But it was my favorite because it marked the beginning of the best parts of my day. Symbolizing strength and confidence, blue jays always remind me of my grandpa.

Six o’clock: cardinal. The sharp whistle and staccato of the cardinal indicated that it was almost time for me to leave. Like the whistle of a closing shift, I’d hear it and start to pack my things. The cardinal has always been my least favorite.

Nine o’clock: house finch. The high, sweet, almost inquisitive call of the house finch was the one my grandma loved most. It was also the one I rarely heard. Either too early or too late in the day, the house finch was reserved for the occasional weekends when I’d spend the night at their house. My grandma would explain that finches symbolize harmony and peace. They are petite but mighty, just like she was(( This is a clever and sweet way of describing summer days with grandparents, while sprinkling in some vivid details to bring the story to life.)) .

This past weekend was the anniversary of my grandpa’s passing. Longing for my grandparents, I went for a walk. Winter is approaching, so the sky was darkening quickly. I walked slowly. As the sun set, I heard the tell-tale squawk of a blue jay, loud and piercing through the chill of the wind. I looked around and saw it sitting on an old stump, a small house finch behind it. I extracted my binoculars from my backpack, hoping to get a better glimpse through the dark. I turned the dial to focus the lenses, just as the birds flew away together. I took a deep breath, binoculars in hand, and continued on, spotting a robin in the distance(( The ending stylistically wraps the essay up without tying a bow on it. It’s a more artful way of concluding, and it works well here.)) .

AO Notes on Birdwatcher

This first two paragraphs are well-written and fairly to-the-point in their language. They do a nice job of setting the scene, but the third paragraph transitions into the writer’s distinctive voice. They detail the birds on the clock to chronicle the hours of their summer days and end, not without concluding, but leaving the reader wanting to read more of their stories.

• Voice: The writer transitions to writing in their own distinct voice, which comes to a crescendo in the final paragraph.
• Interesting approach: Sometimes students use an approach to tell a story that feels overly forced or cliche. This one feels organic and relates nicely to the writer, their family, and the story as a whole.
• Career path : This is far from a “What I want to be when I grow up” essay, but it clearly shows an academic interest grounded in family and childhood memories. This is an artistic and beautiful approach to showing admissions how the writer may use their college education.

Personal Statement Example #5: Chekov’s Wig

At the age of six, I starred in an at-home, one-woman production of Annie. My family watched as I switched between a wig I’d fashioned from maroon yarn, a dog’s tail leftover from Halloween, and a tie I’d stolen from my dad.

When the reveal came that Annie’s parents had actually passed away, I took a creative liberty: they had left Annie a small unicorn farm. The rest of the play proceeded as normal. When the curtain closed, I bowed to the sound of my family’s applause. But one set of hands was missing: my grandmother’s. Instead she sat, arms raised, and jokingly exclaimed, “But what about the unicorns?”(( Wow, an interesting intro! We see creativity and a silly side to the writer. As the admission officer, I’m eager to see where this leads.))

My grandma, an avid thespian, taught me a lot about life. But one of the most important lessons followed this production of Annie . After we laughed about her remark, she introduced me to the concept of Chekov’s gun. For Anton Chekov, brilliant playwright, the theory goes something like this: a writer shouldn’t write about a loaded gun if it’s not going to be fired. In other words, writers shouldn’t include details about something if it won’t serve a purpose in the story later. My unicorn farm had committed this writing faux pas egregiously.

I’m not a natural writer, and I have no goal to become one, but I’ve taken this concept of Chekov’s gun to heart—it forms the foundation of my life philosophy. I don’t believe that everything was meant to be(( This philosophical reflection is a nice introduction to the paragraphs that follow. )) . In fact, I think that sometimes bad things just happen. But I believe that these details will always play a part in our larger story.

The first test of my Chekov’s gun philosophy occurred shortly after Annie when my grandma, my biggest supporter, passed away. My family tried to console me saying that “it was her time to go,” but I disagreed. I couldn’t see how a death could be destined. Instead, I found comfort knowing that her presence, her support, and her death wasn’t for nothing. Like Chekov’s gun, I wasn’t quite sure how or why, but I knew that she would return for me.

As I grew older, my philosophy was tested time and again. Most recently, I fell back on Chekov’s gun as I coped with my parents’ divorce and my subsequent move to a new town. Both events shattered my world. My happy family theatre productions turned into custody hearings and overnight bags. The community I’d found at my old school became a sea of unfamiliar faces at my new one. None of this was meant to be. But as the writer of my own life, I won’t let the details become inconsequential.

I’ve used these events as plot points in my high school experience. Dealing with my parents’ divorce has taught me how to make the best of what’s given to me. I got the chance to decorate two bedrooms, live in both the suburbs and the city, and even have twice the amount of pets. And without the inciting incident of the divorce and move(( We see that the writer is able to make lemonade out of lemons here.)) , I never would have joined a new drama club or landed leading roles in Mama Mia and Twelfth Night. The divorce and move, like Chekov’s gun, have been crucial details in getting me where I’m at today.

I know that Chekov’s gun is more about the details in a story, but this philosophy empowers me to take what happens, the good and the bad, as part of my personal character development. Nothing would be happening if it weren’t important.

This summer, as we cleaned our garage in preparation for yet another move, I found my old Annie wig, yarn tangled from the box. Next to the wig was a note, handwritten in a script I’d recognize anywhere. My darling star, it read. You are going to go on to do great things. Love, Grandma ((And a sweet, or bittersweet, conclusion.)) .

AO Notes on Chekov’s Wig

This essay tells a beautiful story about a foundational philosophy in this young writer’s life. As their admission officer, I can see how grounded and positive they are. I can also imagine them taking this lesson to college: really paying attention to life, reflecting on the past, and understanding the value of even the smallest instances. There is an inherent maturity in this essay.

• Creativity: From the first few sentences, we can see that this student is now, and was as a child, creative. An original thinker.
• Reflective: When challenged by their grandmother, the writer didn’t insist that their way was correct. They took the criticism in stride and absorbed it as a salient life lesson. This shows open-mindedness and an uncommon level of maturity.
• Silver linings: It’s clear that this young writer has had some familial challenges that are likely familiar to some of you. They don’t gloss over them, but instead they learn from them. From having more pets to starring in the school musicals, there are lessons to glean from even life’s more difficult challenges.

Personal Statement Example #6: An Afternoon with Grandmother

The Buddhist temple on the hillside above my home has always possessed a deep power for me. With its towering spires and intricate carvings thousands of years old, it is a place of peace and serenity(( This writer opens with some wonderful imagery. I like how the imagery mirrors the meaning.)) —somewhere I can go to escape the chaos of the world and connect with myself and with my sense of spirituality. When my grandmother called me one January to let me know that she would be coming to visit, I smiled, my mind darting immediately to the temple and to the visit of it we would take together.

My relationship with my grandmother is a special one. After my parents passed away, she and my grandfather raised me for three years before I moved in with my father’s sister. In that time, she was my sole companion; she shared her recipes with me, told me stories, and most importantly, she taught me everything I know about spirituality. We spent countless nights staying up past bed-time, talking about the teachings of the Buddha, and she encouraged me gently to explore my own path to enlightenment(( This topic is accomplishing a lot: we see the writer’s relationship with their grandmother, their personal values, and their ideas about who they want to be in the future.)) .

When my grandmother finally arrived, I felt bathed in a warm glow. After catching up and preparing her favorite meal—red rice with miso soup and hot green tea—I told her about the plans I had for us to visit my special place.

Later that afternoon, as we entered the temple, I felt the calmness and tranquility wash over me. I took my grandmother's hand and led her to the main hall, where we knelt before the altar and began to recite the prayers and mantras that I had learned from her years before.

As we prayed, our voices joined together, echoing throughout the temple. A gentle rain began to fall outside and, as the cold crept around where we knelt, I was engulfed by a deep sense of connection with my grandmother and with the universe. It was as if the barriers between us were falling away, and we were becoming one—with each other, and with our shared connection to the divine.

We finished our prayers and sat in silence, lingering in the serenity of the temple. I could feel my grandmother's hand in mine, and I was filled with a sense of gratitude and love(( A great example of weaving vivid language with explicit reflection!)) .

Spirituality has been essential in my life. It gives me a sense of grounding and purpose, and it teaches me the value of compassion. My spirituality has also given me a way to connect with my grandmother on a deeper level—like a private language that only we speak together. In a world that can often feel chaotic and disconnected, faith and spirituality provide a sense of stability and connection.

As we left the temple, I held my grandmother's hand and felt suffused by a sense of peace and contentment. Too often people who are disconnected from spirituality misunderstand the role it plays in billions of people’s lives. They see it as a way to “check out” from the issues the world faces, ignoring their responsibilities to others. This may be true for others, but not me. Quite the opposite. My spirituality helps me empathize with others(( Wonderful reflection.)) ; it helps me focus on the obligations we each have to every other person and creature on this planet. For me, it is the ultimate way to “check in” to the needs of the world and my community in a way that grounds me emotionally.

Spirituality offers a way to find meaning and purpose in life, and to connect with something greater than ourselves. For that, and for my grandmother, I am truly grateful.

AO Notes on An Afternoon with Grandmother

In this deeply reflective essay, the writer uses spirituality and their relationship with their grandmother to reveal a very personal part of themselves. The writer isn’t afraid to be vulnerable, and they clearly showcase strengths of wisdom and compassion.

• Vivid language: This author is a talented writer who has included a bunch of vivid language. But it’s not over the top. They include just enough to hold a reader’s attention and add some interest.
• Reflection: The reflection throughout this essay is excellent. Notice how it’s not just at the beginning or the end. It’s woven throughout. The writer follows up each major detail with an explanation of why it’s personally meaningful.
• Conclusion: The conclusion combines vivid language and reflection perfectly. By the end of the essay, we know exactly what the writer wants us to take away: spirituality is personally meaningful to them because it helps them connect with the people around them. And I especially like how the writer chose to end on a note of gratitude—always a good value to have in a personal statement.

Personal Statement Example #7: Rosie’s

While most people find their lowest point at rock bottom, I found mine in an Amerikooler DW081677F-8(( We’re definitely off to an odd start. I’m curious where this is headed!)) . With drops rolling down my back and my cheeks, I snuck into the walk-in freezer for a moment of chill.

At that point, I had worked at Rosie's for nearly a year. The job was a good one: it fit with my school schedule, paid well, and introduced me to close friends. But as a workplace, Rosie’s was pure chaos. The original owners passed on a host of problems the new owners were working hard to fix. But the problems ran deep. From an inefficient kitchen organization to a malfunctioning scheduling software, we never knew what to do or when.

The day I found myself in the Amerikooler was the day everything caught up with us(( This is a good transitional phrase that helps readers navigate this fairly complex narrative.)) . An error in our scheduling software led to us operating with only 30% of our typical team. As the only waitress on duty, I ran between the kitchen and the guests, stopping mid-delivery to put new vegetables in the steamers. The kitchen staff were barely getting through each dish before customers lost patience.

Then, in all the commotion, I dropped a plate of macaroni and cheese all over a customer. I apologized over and over again. I was embarrassed and ashamed. I couldn’t believe what I had done. I always tried to be one step ahead to give my customers the best service, so my mistake felt like an utter failure. After helping them clean up, I ran immediately to the freezer. I realized that something had to change.

In the Amerikooler, a pea and corn mix cool on my back, I considered my options. The easiest option was to quit. I could find another job, one that didn’t cause me so much stress. But quitting wouldn’t just mean giving up. It would mean accepting my failure. It would also mean abandoning the coworkers I had grown close to. Leaving them would only burden them more. While I knew it wasn’t my job to fix the restaurant, I knew that leaving wasn’t the answer either. Instead, I decided to focus on solutions(( I like the focus on solutions and action steps here!)) . I stood up from the cold, dirty freezer floor, dusted off my work pants, washed my hands, and got back to work.

Despite being the newest and youngest member of the Rosie’s staff, I recognized that I brought a new perspective to the workplace. Having spent the previous three summers scheduling volunteers for my local food drive, I used my organizing experience to devise a new scheduling system, one that didn’t rely on our outdated technology. I brought up the system at our weekly meeting, and after initial pushback, everyone agreed to give it a try. Three months later, my system keeps everyone happy and our kitchen and floor staffed.

But it wasn’t just the staffing problem that was the issue. Our workflows were inefficient, and we didn’t know how to communicate or collaborate effectively. I know that identifying an issue is always the first step to a solution, so I raised the question at our most recent staff meeting. Having earned my coworkers’ and bosses’ trust(( And here we see some good growth and leadership.)) , I led us in outlining a few new processes to streamline our productivity. In stark contrast to the failure I felt after spilling the macaroni and cheese, developing a new workflow with my coworkers made me proud. I hadn’t given in to the chaos, but I had worked thoughtfully and collaboratively to create new solutions.

I’m sure that won’t be my last time working in a disorganized environment or spilling macaroni and cheese. But I know that I’ll be ready to address whatever comes my way.

AO Notes on Rosie’s

If you’ve ever worked in a food establishment, then something in this essay will probably resonate with you. But I appreciate how the writer doesn’t get pulled into the negativity they experience. Instead, they focused their efforts (and their essay) on how they could make things better for everyone. That’s the kind of student admissions officers want to see on their campuses.

• Organization: The writer has to narrate and backtrack a bit at the beginning of the essay to make the introduction work. But it’s not confusing for a reader because they have very solid transitions. I also like how the action steps and reflection are organized in the narrative.
• Positive outlook: As an admissions officer, I would admire this student for their problem-solving skills. Working in that environment was surely tough, but they didn’t give up. They got to work and helped everyone out in the process.
• Humor: From the introduction to the conclusion, the writer incorporates subtle humor throughout. Because of it, we actually feel like we know the writer by the conclusion. Too much humor can overwhelm a personal essay, but just enough can help readers see who the writer really is.

Personal Statement Example #8: Gone Fishing

I pulled the line with my left hand and snapped the rod back with my right. The line split through the air above me like a knife through cake. I rigidly waved my right arm up and down to dry off my fly, which had started sinking from the weight of the water. Ready to cast, I loosened the grip on my left hand to release a few more feet of line, pulled my right arm back in a grandiose motion, and hammered it back down. I expected my line to fly out in front of me, gracefully floating back onto the surface of the water. Instead, I was met with a startling resistance. My fly had lodged itself into the bush behind me(( This opening paragraph has great vivid description. Here, we end on a moment of suspense that has left me intrigued about what will happen next.)) .

Annoyed, I waded through the tall, thick grass, rod under my arm and mosquitoes buzzing in my ears. This was the reality of fly fishing. In my short time as a fisherman, I’d caught far more trees, bushes, and riverweed than I had fish. What seems so elegant in movies like A River Runs Through It is actually a grueling process of trial and error. I took up flyfishing a year ago to conquer my fear of the outdoors(( Ah ha—we learn that this essay isn’t really about fly fishing. It’s about conquering a fear. And with that, we see that the stakes are high.)) . I could have (and probably should have) chosen a more mild activity like hiking or kayaking, but I’ve always been one to take on a challenge.

I had been afraid of the outdoors since childhood. Coming from a family that prefers libraries to parks and bed and breakfasts to tents, I never learned how to appreciate nature. I limited my time outside as much as I could. I feared the bugs, the sun, and the unknown.

I decided to try flyfishing when I realized I didn’t want to be controlled by my fear any longer(( As an AO, I would applaud this student’s bravery.)) . All the birthday parties I’d turned down, the memories that were made without me, I had missed out on so much. Being outside was an integral part of the human experience—or, at least, that’s what I’d been told. Without being willing to enjoy nature, I was missing out on what it meant to be myself.

Soon after this realization, I found an old rod in my grandpa’s garage and took it as a sign from the universe. On my first time out, my Honda Civic lurched over a ditch on the gravel road Google Maps had directed me to. I’d spent hours watching YouTube videos of proper technique. Stepping out of my car, I felt my skin crack under the dry heat, and I wanted to leave. But I continued on, walking through branches and over logs to the riverbank. I was doing it( More vivid detail that really gives us a sense of the writer’s discomfort—yet they’re persisting.)) .

I pushed myself to continue, no matter how uncomfortable I got. I went back, Saturday after Saturday, each time noticing improvements in my abilities. Along the way, I learned to push myself to do things that make me uncomfortable. I saw myself in a new light. I wasn’t Charlie, afraid of the outdoors. I was Charlie, fisherman.

The first time I caught a fish, I could hardly believe it. Thinking I had caught another piece of riverweed, I tugged on my line and rolled my eyes. But suddenly, it started tugging back. It was a sensation I’d never experienced before, one of haste, pride, and panic. I instantly collected myself, bracing against the bank as I secured the line with my finger and slowly pulled the fish ashore. Delicately removing my hook from its mouth, I admired its beauty. Whereas I had once feared creatures like this trout, I now respected it. Its holographic scales glistened in the sunlight. I thanked it for helping me grow, and I placed it back in the water. It swam away. I wiped the slime off my hands and picked up my rod, left hand tugging at the line, right hand snapping back again((This conclusion is quite long, but I really like this poetic ending. It shows so much growth, and there’s a subtle nod to the fact that the writer is continuing to fish.)) .

AO Notes on Gone Fishing

From all this imagery, I really felt like I was fishing alongside them. What’s better, I feel like I really get where this student is coming from because of their vulnerability. They show immense growth and open-mindedness, which is exactly what admissions officers are looking for.

• Imagery: This writer definitely likes creative writing. From the introduction, we can envision ourselves going on this journey with the writer. There is some excellent “show, don’t tell” here.
• Deep personal meaning: Biggest fears are hard to overcome, especially with such a good attitude. It’s clear that this topic is a meaningful one to the writer. Even the act of fly fishing, which they didn’t seem to like much at first, becomes a meaningful act.
• Narrative arc: We have a classic “going on a journey” essay, where the writer transforms on a journey from point A (being afraid of the outdoors) to point B (catching a fish). The writer’s implementation of this structure is excellent, which makes the essay easy to follow.

Good Personal Statement Examples

Even if your essay isn’t worthy of The New Yorker , you can still make your mark on admissions officers. Writing an essay that fulfills all the goals of a personal statement, whether or not it meets every single criterion an admissions officer is looking for, can still get you into a great college.

Most personal statements are good personal statements, so don’t worry if you’re feeling overwhelmed by the amazing essay examples you see online. The key to writing a good personal statement is writing your personal statement. Focus on finding a topic that lets you communicate your own meaning and voice, and you’ll be set.

The following examples are awesome personal statements. There may be a little room for improvement in places, but the essays do exactly what they need to do. And they say a lot about their writers. Let’s see what the writers and admissions officers have to say.

Personal Statement Example #9: Beekeeper’s Club

As I lift the heavy lid of the hive, the hum of thousands of bees fills my ears. I carefully smoke the entrance to calm the bees, and I begin to inspect the frames. The bees are busy at work, collecting nectar and pollen, and tending to their young. I am in awe of their organization.

I never would have thought that I, a high school student, would become a beekeeper(( An interesting hobby for a high school student! I’m intrigued to see where this is going.)) . But now it’s something I can’t imagine my life without.

It all started when I found a beekeeping suit at a garage sale two summers ago. At a mere five dollars, it was yellowing and musty, but it appeared to be fully intact and without any holes. I’ve lived many lives as a hobbyist, always willing to try new things. I’ve been a sailor, a gardener, a basketball player, a harpist, a rock climber, and more. The problem is that I can never manage to see these hobbies through(( I see. Here we get a sense of what’s at stake in this new venture. The problem is that writer can’t seem to hold down a hobby. Will beekeeping solve that problem? Let’s find out .)) . As a perpetual novice, I always lose interest or become overwhelmed by all the information. But that’s never stopped me from taking up a new hobby, so I brought the beekeeping suit to the make-shift register and handed the seller a five-dollar bill.

To embark on my new hobby, I first went to the library and read everything I could find about beekeeping. Research is always my first step when starting something new. I like to know what I’m in for. As I read, I became fascinated by the fact that such small creatures can serve such a critical role on our planet. I learned about the importance of bees for pollinating crops, and I read that their populations have been declining in recent years. I was determined to do my part to help. This wasn’t just a hobby anymore— it was a mission(( And the stakes just got higher.)) .

But like the bees I’d been reading about, I knew I couldn't do it alone. My years of abandoning hobbies had taught me that this time, I needed guidance from someone with experience. I knew the first place to look. At the farmer’s market that Saturday, I went straight to the honey stand and introduced myself. The vendor’s name was Jeremy, and he was excited to see someone so young taking up beekeeping. I asked if I could come see his hives sometime, and he agreed.

I showed up the next weekend with my used beekeeping suit in hand. Jeremy gave me a tour. I was astounded by the simultaneous simplicity and complexity. As the months went by, Jeremy became my mentor. He taught me the importance of monitoring the health of the hive, how to properly harvest honey, and even the ins and outs of the farmer’s market business.

I was grateful for his guidance and friendship. I found myself becoming more and more passionate about bees and the art of beekeeping.

After months of tending to my hive, I finally had it up and running. These bees were in my care(( The writer has shown us that they’ve learned a big lesson from their past failures: they need support and guidance. I’m impressed that this time they are making an intentional change.)) —this was one hobby I couldn’t abandon. With that knowledge and Jeremy’s support, one hive grew to five. I’m not in it for the money or even the honey. I’m in it for the bees, for the millimeter of difference I’m making in their lives and in the life of the earth.

Through beekeeping, I have found a community of people who share my love for bees. Jeremy, the bees, and the entire beekeeping community have taught me not to quit. We support each other, share tips and advice, and work together to help protect these important insects. And in the process, I have learned that I can take up any new hobby I want and stick with it if I just put in enough effort(( Yep—the writer has come out of this journey on the other side, having learned that their effort does pay off.)) .

AO Notes on Beekeeper’s Club

As an admissions officer, it’s always fun to read about students’ eccentric hobbies. I’d count this as one of them. But what’s better than learning about the hobby is seeing a student’s personal growth.

What makes this essay good:

• Personal journey: Most good personal statements show some kind of personal growth. In this case, we see that the writer has grown mature and aware enough to hold down a hobby. We see that it wasn’t an easy road, but they got there.
• Strengths: There are lots of strengths in this personal statement. We see self-awareness, initiative, teamwork, and care for the bees and the planet.
• Reflection: Part of what makes this personal journey so good is that the writer takes us on the journey with them through reflection. At each stage of the journey, we know exactly what the writer is thinking and feeling. By the end, we’re celebrating their success with them.

What the writer could do to level up:

• Personal meaning: Yep, “personal journey” and “personal meaning” can be two separate things. Although the writer goes on a great personal journey, the personal meaning seems to be lacking a bit. It’s clear that this is an important topic to the writer, but it doesn’t exactly come across as an especially vulnerable one. The writer could make it more vulnerable by incorporating more personal meaning into their reflection: what would it have meant if they had quit beekeeping too? What’s the problem with dropping hobbies in the first place? Why is it personally important to learn to stick with things?

Personal Statement Example #10: Ann

Pushing her blonde curls from her forehead, she pursed her lips in focus(( This vivid, detailed description really draws me in.)) . She sat with legs crossed across the kitchen chair. This was it: the moment she’d been preparing for. Her tiny hand gripped the pencil as if it were a stick of dynamite and twitched her fingers up, down, and back again. She looked up at me and smiled, teeth too big for her growing mouth. “Ann,” the paper read. As I glowed back at my mini-me, I saw in her my whole heart(( And here the focus switches from Ann to the writer—an important transition.)) .

My sister was technically an accident, born when I was eleven years old. But I know that, in the grand scheme of things, Ann’s existence was destined by the cosmos. Watching her write was like looking in a mirror. My hair has long since turned brown, but she and I deal with the same unmanageable curls. Her toothy grin developed over five years of mutual laughter. And she got that unwavering focus from watching me do my own homework each night. At the same time I’ve taught her the ways of the world, she’s taught me joy, patience, and persistence(( Lessons learned! This sentence really draws attention to the main theme. It could be a little more specific because “joy, patience, and persistence” are almost cliche.)) .

I had been an only child for my first decade of life. I remember being lonely and without purpose. With Ann came the opportunity to make a real impact on someone, even as a child myself. The night she was born, I vowed to protect her. I had never seen anyone so small and fragile, and I begged my parents to let me hold her. Next to mine, her hand looked like a doll’s. It was purple and pink from the ordeal of birth. Her eyes barely opened, but I couldn’t keep mine off her.

Many older siblings find their younger siblings to be nuisances. But Ann has always been my best friend. Her first two years of life, she struggled with health issues that scared us all. I felt helpless and afraid, but I knew I had to fight alongside her. I did everything I could: I grabbed diapers and bottles for my parents, I talked to her for hours on end, and, when she was old enough, I spoon fed her and encouraged her to eat. As Ann grew bigger and stronger, I grew stronger, too(( It sounds like this was a really difficult challenge for the writer and their family. I appreciate this picture we get of the writer in relation to Ann.)) .

Each year has gotten better than the previous. I was there to catch Ann when she took her first steps, teach her her first words, and get her dressed every day. She tagged behind me as I took photos before my first dance, got my learner’s permit, and went on my college tours. While being a teen with a toddler sibling wasn’t always perfect, Ann’s mere presence makes those around her feel loved and appreciated. She’s exactly who I aspire to be.

Watching her write her name at the kitchen table, I became overwhelmed with the thought of leaving her to head off to college. She still has so much to learn, so many ways to grow. But just as the thought entered my mind, she spoke in her high-pitched and innocent voice. “When you go to college,” she asked, “will you tell me about your classes?” I blinked away the tears gathering in my eyes, smoothed her curls with my hand, and pulled her in close.

Going to college won’t mean leaving Ann. It will mean opening her world—and mine—to endless new knowledge and possibilities. She’ll grow and change, and so will I. When we reunite, we’ll smile our toothy smiles and embrace each other, our curly hair intertwining. We’ll sit at the kitchen table, focused and laughing, like nothing has changed(( I like how the siblings are continuing to grow together, but at the end of the day, they still have their amazing relationship.)) .

AO Notes on Ann

I always find sibling essays like this one so sweet. It’s amazing how clearly we can understand someone solely through their interactions with a loved one. As an admissions officer, I would see that this student would be a great community member (and roommate!).

• Deeply meaningful: Especially with the family context, it’s apparent that this topic is deeply meaningful to the writer. Because it’s so meaningful a topic, the writer is able to show an immense amount of care for Ann without even trying. AOs love seeing traits like care, maturity, and the ability to grow.
• Clear message: Personal statements should have themes that encompass the main message the writer wants to convey. This essay’s message is clear as day: the writer is a better, happier, more generous person because of Ann. They are an awesome sibling.
• More about the self: This one’s tricky because we get an implicit sense of who the writer is now through the overall tone and meaning. But a lot of the personal examples the writer chose are old examples from childhood and early adolescence. Some of those are important to provide family context, but I still would have liked to get a more recent picture of the writer.

Personal Statement Example #11: Running through My Neighborhood

My mind and eyes began to wander as I turned the corner on my fourth mile. I’ve always been a runner. It's a way for me to relax and challenge myself. Running makes me feel like I’m one with the world around me. As I run, I can't help but be struck by the beauty of the buildings and people that make up my city. Each is a work of art—a carefully-crafted expression of my community. With every step, I feel a deep connection to the life around me(( This introduction covers a lot, so this last sentence could be a bit more specific.)) .

On my run, I find myself drawn to the intricate details of the buildings. I admire the way the light catches on centuries-old bricks, casting shadows that dance across the pavement below. I look up at the skyscraper windows that nearly touch the sky, frightened at the sight of window washers. Old and new, the buildings all carry stories.

In the same way, I admire the neighbors around me. I see them feeding pigeons, smiling at me as I pass by. They’re walking dogs and babies, talking on a park bench, and playing hopscotch. I run by them, fast but steady, and breathe it all in. I’m on this beautiful city block, surrounded by people whose whole lives are familiar yet mysterious, and I’m running.

But it's not just the aesthetic beauty of the buildings that grabs my attention. As I run, I find myself thinking about the stories and histories behind each one. I wonder about the people who built them, the families they had at home, the lives they led. I think about the people who have lived and worked in these buildings and the memories that have been made within their walls.

Take the local bakery, for instance. I’ve run by there a thousand times in my life, each time soaking up the smell of freshly-baked bread and pastries. The building seems unassuming at first, with a simple glass door and brick façade. But once you step foot inside, you’re immediately hit with the warmth of the staff and patrons. The old photos on the wall and cozy furniture that has been there since the bakery’s opening back in the 1950s—it feels like home(( These are great vivid details.)) . The bakery is everything I value about my neighborhood. It completely represents what kind of neighbor I want to be. Plus, it’s not a bad place for a post-run snack.

Through my runs, I’ve also made connections with those who frequent the sidewalks alongside me. One of the people I see regularly on my runs is Mrs. Carter, an elderly woman who always has a kind word and a smile for everyone she meets. Her white hair is carefully curled, and her face is dimpled with laugh lines from thousands of conversations like ours. She often stops to chat with me, asking how my day is going and sharing stories from her own life. I always look forward to seeing her. She’s like the grandmother I never had. Mrs. Carter inspires me to be a better community member every day(( This kind of reflection brings the focus back to the writer’s personal journey.)) .

Running through my neighborhood is about more than just staying fit. It’s also about being in community with those around me. As I weave through the people on the sidewalk, I feel as though I am weaving myself through their stories, picking up tidbits and adding them to my own narrative. I wouldn’t be who I am today without these runs that have taught me so much. I can’t wait to run across my college campus, admiring my new surroundings and meeting my new neighbors(( I like this gesture to the future—as an AO, I would start to picture this student running through my campus, too!)) .

AO Notes on Running through My Neighborhood

Running essays can get a bad rap in college admissions. But this one overcomes that stereotype. At its core, this essay is about the runner’s relationship to their community. I really appreciate how much care and enthusiasm this writer shows for those around them.

• Writing: The writer’s voice shines through. They have great vivid descriptions, and we’re really able to envision ourselves in the neighborhood alongside them.
• Personal meaning: The way the writer describes those they encounter in their neighborhood shows that this isn’t a minor part of their life. Their runs are a big deal. The people they see along the way have greatly shaped who they are.
• Greater focus on self: Now, there are much worse culprits when it comes to personal essays that focus on people other than the writer. But the writer does toe the line. Their descriptions mostly focus on those around them, and while there is some reflection that connects their own experience to other people, it doesn’t actually take up much space in the essay. To level up, the writer could make this essay more about themself.

Personal Statement Example #12: Musical Installation Art

As a child, I was always drawn to stringed instruments(( The hook could have more punch, but this gets the job done.)) . I would pluck at my dad's old guitars, create makeshift harps with dental floss, and even play around with the banjo and harp in music class. As I got older, I realized that I wanted to focus on making my own instruments. And where better to start than in my dad's scrapyard? The yard sprawled out for almost five acres behind our house. It was a marvel of junk and oddities, with the accumulated garbage from hundreds of junker cars built up in our backyard. I grew up playing there, leading a childhood that most parents would probably see as reckless—rolling tires through narrow alleyways between crushed cars stacked high. But for me, the backyard was an endless playground for my imagination.

It was there that I discovered the joys of welding and soldering. I would rummage through piles of metal and find pieces that I could fashion into something new. My first sculptures were simple, resembling birds or dogs and pieced together from strips of metal. I’d look for similar art everywhere I went, grasping for inspiration. At a fair one weekend, I saw a booth run by an artist who built guitars. After speaking with him about his art, he asked to see a picture of my sculptures. I showed him and explained that I hoped to make my own instruments one day, too. He scuttled to the back of his tent and returned with a gift: a set of thick copper strings. “Try using those,”(( What an endearing story.)) he told me.

My first sculpture instrument was a crude thing—little more than a board of metal with pegs that I used to pull the copper strings tight. But I tightened them, I was in love—spending all night plucking away. At first, the instrument wailed and screeched. String by string, I delicately tuned the wires into sirens. I had created something that played music, and I was so proud.

My experience building the instrument motivated me to enroll in a sculpture class at the local community college. It was there that I learned how to properly solder metal and create more complex structures. For my final project, I made a three-foot-tall, four-stringed metal instrument in the shape of a dragon.

But as I worked, I started to realize that my dragon wasn't going to be beautiful in the traditional sense. Its metal body was jagged and uneven, and the strings were stretched tight across its back in a way that produced discordant, almost abrasive music. I tried to adjust the tuning, but no matter what I did, the music remained harsh and unpleasant.

At first, I was disappointed. I wanted my dragon to be a work of art, something that people would marvel at and love listening to. But as I continued to play with it, I started to see the beauty in the chaos(( This paragraph shows wonderful growth. And as a reader, I’m drawn in trying to imagine what the sculpture actually looks like.)) . The music it produced was like a musical language that I had invented, one that was wild and untamed. It was a reflection of my own creativity and individuality. A discordant collection of notes that sounded like they’d been tuned so as to be atonal. But I didn't care. I was a scrapyard kid, and this dragon played the song of my people: strong, innovative, and beautiful.

The combination of sculpture and music fascinates me. How does the shape of a fabrication affect the kind of sound that the object produces? What sounds do different materials produce? As I’ve learned more about sculpture, I’ve also become interested in installation art that has sound dimensions. I want to capture people’s visual and aural attention to inspire questions about how we navigate the aesthetic world(( It sounds like this topic potentially relates to the student’s future goals. If that’s true, there could be a clearer academic connection here.)) . And I’ll use whatever scraps I can find to make my creations.

AO Notes on Musical Installation Art

I don’t think I’ve ever seen a piece of musical installation art myself, so this topic really held my attention. I appreciate the journey the writer went on to learn that their art may not look like everyone else’s, but it can be just as impactful.

• Topic: I like this topic not only because it’s not one you see every day but also because it lets the writer reveal a lot about themself and their background. We see where they grew up and who they grew up with, and we also learn about this deeply meaningful personal interest.
• Writing style: This author has a very distinct writing style. In some ways, the writing style mirrors their art style—abrupt at times, melodic at others.
• Organization: The first half of this essay doesn’t always match up with the second half. Even though we’re still able to see the writer’s journey as a metal artist and musician, there’s still a bit of streamlining that needs to happen.

Personal Statement Example #13: Ski Patrol

I can never get enough of being in the mountains(( This hook isn’t very compelling, so it could use some more attention.)) . I am a skier through and through. Growing up, I spent countless family vacations on the slopes with my dad and siblings. I love the rush I get speeding down the mountain—I’ve improved so much over my life that I can now handle most runs I come across. But last year, I took my love for skiing to a whole other level by joining ski patrol.

It was mid-December, and my family had decided to take a weekend away to go skiing. Everything was going normally at first. We had a good day on the slopes and wanted to go one more run before calling it a night. We took a moment to rest and watched the person in front of us go. Only seconds after she headed down the mountain, something happened with her ski. She catapulted into a nearby tree. People raced to check on her, while we stayed back and alerted ski patrol.

When ski patrol arrived, I watched in amazement. They moved in such a precise way. They were like a machine—everyone knew exactly what to do when. Thankfully, it was a false alarm and the skier only had a few scratches. But my own life was changed forever. I knew then that I wanted to be a part of this team, to help others in a tangible way and to make a difference on the mountain that had always been my home.

As soon as I could, I applied for the Junior Ski Patrol team. I had to go through a tryout process on the hill, which made me nervous. But it felt good to be surrounded by people who loved skiing as much as I do. Thankfully, I was accepted shortly after; it was one of the best days of my life. Now on Junior Ski Patrol, I have the opportunity to do what I love – skiing – while also making a positive impact on others(( And here we get to the heart of the essay. The writer wants to help others while doing something they love. It’s a noble pursuit!)) . My team shadows the adult Ski Patrol, and we learn a lot of lessons along the way.

On the mountain (and in life), you never know what challenges might arise. One of the most important things I’ve learned from Junior Ski Patrol is to be prepared for anything. I’ve gotten my CPR and first aid certifications so I’m always prepared to administer life-saving care to anyone who might need it. I know how to pack a bag full of enough essentials to survive harsh weather or injuries.

But ski patrol has also taught me so much more than just how to help others. It has shown me how I work best on a team. I’m not naturally a leader, which is something I’ve always felt ashamed about. After learning from our mentors who all fulfill different roles on their adult Ski Patrol team, I realized that I don’t have to be a leader to be a good team member. The quiet collaborators who can follow the lead, take initiative when needed, and do their jobs really well are just as important as the people who are front-and-center(( An important personal insight.)) .

Being on ski patrol as a high school student has been an incredible journey, and I am grateful for the opportunity to be a part of such a dedicated team. More importantly, I’m proud of the growth I’ve experienced. I went from a person who just loves skiing to a person who is more confident in herself. I no longer feel unprepared or timid. I know exactly how to keep myself safe and work alongside others. While I don’t want to be a professional Ski Patroller or even go into medicine, I know these lessons will serve me well wherever life takes me(( As an AO, I would have been wondering if being on JSP made them want to study medicine, so I appreciate that they answered it for me!)) . But no matter where I end up, when the mountain calls, you know I’ll answer.

AO Notes on Ski Patrol

In this fun hobby-meets-accomplishment essay, the writer shows us their strengths of care and teamwork. I like the crossover between something that they really enjoy and this impressive accomplishment they have of being on Junior Ski Patrol.

• Lessons learned: The writer makes it very clear what lessons they learned from Junior Ski Patrol. Lessons don’t always have to be this explicit, but I appreciate how the writer really takes the time to reflect on what they’ve learned.
• Personal insight: Okay, this point is related to the lessons learned. But it’s important to draw out on its own because personal essays are, of course, personal. This topic easily could have been just about skiing down a mountain or administering first aid on patrol. Instead, the writer kept the focus inward to meet the expectations of a personal essay.
• What’s at stake?: We do get a good sense of personal meaning. But the writer could do a better job of speaking to the significance of this activity to their life. A good question to ask is, “What’s at stake?” What would I have lost or gained if this story had turned out differently? Asking these questions can also help you figure out what it is that you want an admissions officer to learn from your personal statement.

Personal Statement Example #14: The Regulars

One pump of vanilla syrup. Frothed milk. One espresso shot. Caramel drizzle(( Starting with some version of the following sentence would have been a stronger hook.)) . Like a scientist at her bench, I have methodically repeated these steps four days a week for the past two years. During my time as a Starbucks barista, I’ve learned hundreds of recipes and customizations. I know all the secret menu hacks, and I’ve developed several recipes for friends and family too. I pride myself on speed, quality, and memory. My favorite part of the job is the customer service. As one of the busiest locations in the region, I’ve caffeinated thousands. But it’s my regular customers, those whose orders I know like the back of my hand, who have truly impacted me.

Venti Vanilla Sweet Cream Cold Brew, hold the vanilla syrup. A busy mom of four, Chelsea is always in a hurry. I try to catch her the moment she enters the store so I can get started right away. Her Venti drink fuels her through school dropoffs and pickups, gymnastics lessons, and evening math homework. Throughout my conversations with her, I’ve learned that Chelsea is a scheduling virtuoso. As someone with ADHD(( This paragraph is almost too much about Chelsea, so this sentence is crucial to bring the focus back to the writer.)) , I became so inspired by her ability to juggle so many people and schedules simultaneously. After asking her for advice, she helped me find a time management system that I can keep up with. I have Chelsea to thank for my improved grades.

Grande dark roast, no room for cream. Mr. Williams is a retired businessman who always tips 100%. Mr. Williams is a quiet man, so it took me months to draw any information from him. Instead of using my over-the-top customer service voice, I eventually learned to be myself. When I got him to open up, I discovered that he was a service worker himself before he made it big in business in his sixties. The truth is, Mr. Williams has tipped me hundreds of dollars throughout my time here, which is extra money that will help me pay for college. He’s taught me the value of quiet generosity(( Let’s be honest. Mr. Williams sounds like a cool guy. But Mr. Williams isn’t applying to college—the writer is! I like that we get small glimpses into who the writer is through this paragraph, but there’s still room for more.)) .

Tall soy London Fog. Sweet Darla gave up coffee twenty-five years ago, but she still loves an occasional treat. When Darla enters, I clear my schedule. She always has stories to tell about the eighty years of life she’s lived. Darla is everything I want to be at that age: she’s spunky, opinionated, and hilarious(( Here we learn a lot about the writer through Darla.)) . Sometimes I tell Darla stories of my own. When I explained the dramatic series of events that led to me landing first chair in my symphony, she said she was going to retell it her bridge club. Making Darla laugh so hard will always be one of my proudest moments.

Grande iced matcha. Taylor is my age and goes to my school. When I took her order for the first time, I felt embarrassed that I needed to work to support myself while she could enjoy expensive drinks. But her kindness softened me. As time went on, I learned that she visited Starbucks so much because she wanted to get out of her house, which wasn’t a very happy place. While I have to take on as many shifts as possible, I still have a happy home to return to afterward. Now Taylor comes in near the end of my shift so we can take our drinks and have dinner at my house.

When you work in customer service, customers enter and exit your life like a revolving door. But the regulars, those special people who draw connections from daily but brief interactions, stick with you for life. I wouldn’t be who I am today if it weren’t for these people, and I would never have met them if it weren’t for my job as a barista. I haven’t just been making drinks these past two years. I’ve been making friends(( The conclusion does a good job tying all these different stories back together. )) .

AO Notes on The Regulars

No one appreciates a good barista story more than a tired admissions officer on their 30th application of the day! I like the personality that comes through in this essay especially. But this is one of those cases where it’s almost too much about other people.

• Creative take: Not every college essay needs a creative flair. In fact, sometimes going for “unique” structures can detract from an essay. But I like how the writer uses this format to structure the essay.
• Organization: This essay isn’t one a reader is bound to get lost in. The introduction sets up the essay well, it’s easy to see the connections between the points the writer is conveying, and the conclusion brings the focus back to the writer.
• More focus on self: While we do learn about the writer in this essay, we also learn a lot about Chelsea, Mr. Williams, Darla, and Taylor. The writer could have pared down the descriptions of other people—or cut one of the examples altogether—to save more room for personal reflection.

“Bad” Personal Statement Examples

These “bad” essays aren’t necessarily bad. They just aren’t very effective personal statements. Specifically, these two essays make some of the biggest college essay mistakes.

Making mistakes, especially when you’ve never written a personal statement before, is to be expected. We’ve included these examples so you can see what those mistakes look like in real-time. Learning from ineffective examples can be just as helpful as learning from the exceptional ones, so grab your pencil and start taking notes.

Our admissions officers have highlighted what’s working and what’s not. They offer helpful commentary and advice for revisions that you can use to assess your own personal statement.

Personal Statement Example #15: The Worst Year

My sophomore year of high school presented me with so many challenges(( This hook definitely gets straight to the point, but it doesn’t draw me in as a reader.)) . I struggled with a lot that year and barely managed to get by. It was the greatest challenge I ever faced.

The year started out like any other but soon went into chaos. My brother suddenly started struggling with drugs and alcohol. Before that, we didn’t know how bad he was hurting. But one night he finally came to us for help because apparently he had been using substances to cope with his emotions. He was scared because he felt like he had reached a breaking point and needed support. My parents didn’t want to help because they thought that he didn’t have a problem but I know my brother and I knew that he didn’t seem like himself. It was so sad to watch him go through that. I tried my best to help him but I was only a kid. I couldn’t really do anything besides tell him I loved him. Eventually my parents decided to get him some help, so he went away for a while and I wrote him letters every week and visited him as much as I could. The treatment he got helped thankfully. He’s doing better now and I am grateful that he is my brother.

But then Covid hit and I couldn’t even leave my house. We thought it would just be a two week vacation to school but it turned into two whole years of my life gone just like that. At the beginning I was stuck in my bedroom while my parents were working their jobs from the living room. Everyone was constantly getting annoyed with each other and driving each other wild. I would be doing a class Zoom in my room and I could hear my parents in a meeting in the living room. I had a hard time not being able to see my friends. I couldn't focus and my grades dropped. Even my teachers didn’t really seem to care. I was sick of staring at black Zoom screens all the time that I even stopped logging on. All of that combined led to me becoming very depressed and anxious. My grades dropped even more because I just couldn’t pay attention or focus enough to do my homework. I ended up getting grades way lower than I ever thought I would that year and I’m so frustrated about it because it felt like I was trying my best but it just wasn’t enough(( Here we see the writer opening up a bit and reflecting on what it was like to go through that experience.)) .

Even once we finally got back in school things didn’t get much better. The pandemic was just too much for my family so my parents ended up getting divorced at the beginning of my junior year. After all we had been through together seeing them separate made me devastated. My dad got an apartment and I had to go back and forth between their houses and pack up all my stuff every time. It was like moving my entire life every weekend. My brother was out of the house by this point so it was just me all by myself. My school was far from my dad’s new place so I’d have a long commute on the weeks I was with him. He was stressed at work and about the divorce and I just ended up feeling so lonely and spending most of my time in my room. My grades got better once online school stopped(( This moment of hope does a lot for moving the essay forward.)) but I had a hard time keeping close relationships with my friends because they didn’t like that I was living far away now and that we couldn’t really hang out anymore.

I couldn’t believe that two years would change so much. Getting through everything really challenged me. But I’m glad to be moving forward with my life.

AO Notes on The Worst Year

This student definitely had a challenging year. It’s clear that they’ve overcome a lot, and I appreciate their willingness to share their struggles. I like that the very last sentence

What this essay does well:

• Vulnerability: Writing about challenges is never easy, especially when you’re writing to people you don’t know. This writer is bold and unafraid in doing so.

What could be improved on:

• Not enough positivity: Here’s the thing. You definitely don’t need to be able to spin all of your challenging experiences into positive ones. But the topics you choose to write your college essay about should ultimately conclude on a positive note. You want your college essay to show you in a positive light, so you should choose a topic that lets you find a light, positive, or hopeful resolution.

Personal Statement Example #16: The Strikeout that Changed My Life

The stadium lights shone brightly in my eyes. I stepped up to the plate and drew back my bat. I wiggled my fingers, waiting. The pitcher wound up his arm and threw the ball towards me. My eyes worked overtime to track the ball. I watched as it flew directly towards the center of the plate and made a last-minute curve(( I like this vivid description.)) . It went straight into the catcher’s mitt. “Strike three!” the umpire yelled. That was the time I struck out at the quarter-finals. My team was so close to making it to the championship that we could taste it. It was the bottom of the sixth, and I gave up a valuable chance to score game-winning runs. We ended up losing. I learned a valuable lesson that fateful day. I never wanted to let my team down like that again(( And the writer jumps quickly into the main theme of the essay. Still, the message here could be more specific.)) .

We had advanced through our bracket without much trouble. The other teams were no match for our work ethic and teamwork. We were in perfect sync. As the first baseman, I was ready for any throw that came my way. We were also hitting well. I scored three home runs throughout the course of the tournament. We were a high-functioning machine. But for a machine to work, each cog has to function correctly. When I stepped up to the plate in the sixth inning, I was a broken cog.

After our quarter–final loss, I grieved with my teammates. Then I went off on my own to think. How had I let my team down so badly? How did I not even try to swing at that pitch? It was all my fault. I had to figure out what I had done wrong so I would never make the mistake again. I realized that I had been thinking selfishly. I was concerned about my own performance, my own at-bat averages(( This is a good reflection.)) . I was scared of failing because I didn’t want to be embarrassed. And worrying about all of those things caused me to lose focus and miss my chance to make a difference. Instead, I should have been thinking about how my at-bat would contribute to my team’s overall goal of winning the game.

I returned to where my teammates were congregating, and several of them patted me on the back. The next day, we went over how the game went as a team and talked about how we could improve at our tournament the following weekend. I admitted that I felt like I let the team down. My teammates said that they understood and reassured me that mistakes happen. It wasn’t my failed at-bat alone that lost us the game. Like winning, losing is a team effort. It was a culmination of lots of little issues. At the end of the day, the other team just out-performed us. But we could try hard, practice a lot, and return triumphant next weekend.

Letting my team down was a crushing blow to my self-esteem. I never want to feel like that again, but I know that the experience caused me to grow. Through all of this, I learned that I have to trust myself and my team(( Here we get to the lesson learned.)) . Focusing on myself alone can only get me so far. But focusing on my team can get me to where I want to go. I’m actually thankful that I struck out in that sixth inning because it caused me to learn an important life lesson.

AO Notes on The Strikeout that Changed My Life

This essay on its own definitely isn’t “bad.” As far as essays go, it’s clear, well-written, and organized nicely. But as a college essay, it could be doing more work on the writer’s behalf. See, as an admissions officer, I don’t actually learn that much about the writer from this essay alone. I see that they like baseball, are a good teammate, and can overcome failure. Those are wonderful traits, but they don’t exactly help set this student apart on the admissions committee floor. Instead, the student could make this essay more vulnerable and personal.

• Writing: The writer uses some great creative writing skills to really set the scene for the readers. In that first paragraph, I really feel like I’m there watching the game.
• Reflection: Even though the topic could be more significant, the writer does a great job reflecting on the meaning they drew from the experience.
• Significance: It’s very clear that this topic holds a lot of meaning to the writer. But as a college essay topic, it lacks vulnerability and stakes.

Key Takeaways

Writing a personal statement is a difficult ask, especially when you’ve never even read one before. But now, with these fifteen examples in your back pocket, you’re ready to write your own.

If you’re not sure what steps to take next, hop on over to our guide to writing personal statements for advice. You can also find more extensive guidance on the Essay Academy , a comprehensive college essay writing video course and community.

Happy writing! 🥳

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Tell Me About Yourself - 79+ Perfect Sample Answers for 2024

Your job hunt has led you to your first interview.

You walk in, you’re feeling confident enough, and then the interviewer says: “Tell me about yourself.”

Suddenly, you forget who you are.

Where do you even start?

Sure, we talk about ourselves all the time, but when you think about it, it’s a really open-ended question.

Do you start with your background? Do you go through whatever’s on your resume? Or do you introduce yourself more as a person than as a professional?

Relax - you’re not the only one struggling with this interview question.

And we’re here to help!

In this article, we’re going to cover:

• Why Do Interviewers Ask This Question? 

How to Answer “Tell Me About Yourself” During an Interview

• 80 Sample Answers for Different Professions and Levels of Experience

Let’s take it one step at a time.

Why Do Interviews Ask This Question?

Before you can perfect your answer to this question, you need to understand why interviewers ask it in the first place.

"Tell me about yourself" is an extremely common opener in job interviews because it lets the hiring manager break the ice and get a quick overview of your background, experience, and qualifications.

So no, the interviewer isn’t looking for your life story or your favorite post-work pastime.

Asking you to talk about yourself gives them a window into your personality, communication skills , and ability to present yourself in a compelling way. It’s a way for them to ease into the actual interview and get a general idea of what you’re all about.

Interviewers use this question to find out your key strengths, impressive achievements , and how you might fit into the role you’re applying for or with the company’s culture as a whole.

And while you might be thinking that your resume already says enough , asking you to talk about yourself does something else. This question gives the interviewer a starting point to dive deeper into your background from your point of view.

How you answer this question can tell them a lot about your self-awareness, your ability to think on your feet, and how you prioritize the information you choose to share.

“Tell me about yourself” acts as an introduction or an elevator pitch, and depending on how you answer, it’s going to help the interviewer decide what to ask next.

This is your opportunity to make a lasting first impression.

If you give a compelling answer, the interviewer will enthusiastically ask you more follow-up questions.

But if you answer wrong, you’ll instantly be labeled as the “OK candidate” at best.

Preparing for your job interview? Check out a guide to the most common interview questions and how to answer them.

So, what makes a good answer to this interview question?

Well, it’s actually pretty straightforward. A good answer is:

• Tailored. If you’re applying for a job as a data analyst , the hiring manager doesn’t care about your experience as a real estate agent . Your answer should be tailored to the job and company you’re applying for.
• Based on Experience and Achievements. Your answer should be super specific. Don’t just stutter out your name and job title. Instead, mention significant parts of your background (what did you study?), top achievements (how do you stand out from other candidates?), and interests (why are you applying for this job?).
• Structured. Use a simple, easy-to-follow format. We recommend sticking to the tried-and-tested “Past-Present-Future” formula.

Past: What is your background and relevant work experience? How did you get to where you are now?

Present: What is your current role? What do you do? What are your top accomplishments?

Future: What are you looking to do next? Why are you interested in the position?

So, with all this in mind, what would a good answer look like?

Here’s an example:

“Um, well, I’m Joe, and I work as a business analyst. I like video games and my pet iguana.”

“Sure! So, my name is William, and I’ve been living in Tuscon for about two years now.

For the past 5 years, I’ve been working as a business analyst at Company X and Company Y.

I have some background in data analysis, with a degree from University XY. What really got me into the field, though, was the internship I did at Company Z.

Throughout my career, I’ve noticed that I’ve always been good with numbers and handling data.

For example, when I was working at Company X, I led a project to migrate all operations data to a new data warehousing system to cut down on costs. The new solution was a much better fit for the business, which eventually led to savings of up to $200,000 annually.

Moving forward, I want to expand my experience across different industries. Particularly fintech, which is why I’m interested in your company...”

What to Include In Your Answer

Now that you know how to answer “tell me about yourself,” let’s talk about the elements your answer should include.

• Introduction. Begin with a brief and engaging introduction that’s going to set the tone for your answer. Mention basic information like your name and where you’re from.
• Professional Background. Give an overview of your work history and highlight your most relevant experiences that align with the job you’re applying for.
• Most Important Skills. Emphasize the specific skills, knowledge, and expertise that make you an ideal candidate for the position.
• Impressive Achievements. Mention one or two of your greatest accomplishments that showcase your capabilities and potential.
• Educational History. Talk about your educational background, but focus on the most important degrees, certifications, or training.
• Professional Interests. Discuss your passion for the industry or specific field, and show the hiring manager your genuine enthusiasm and curiosity.
• Alignment with Company Values. Explain how your personal values, work ethic, or personality align with the company's mission, culture, and needs.
• Career Goals. Talk about how this role aligns with your long-term career aspirations and how you can contribute to the company's success.
• Hobbies and Interests. If relevant, you can briefly mention a few hobbies or interests that complement your professional profile.

12 Tips for Answering “Tell Me About Yourself”

Now that we’ve covered the basics of how to answer “Tell me about yourself,” we’re going to give you several essential tips that can help you stand out even more, starting with:

#1. Prepare Sample Answers

As with any interview question, preparing ahead of time is the key to success.

So, before you head in for your interview, write down a few different versions of how you could talk about yourself.

Writing a sample answer ahead of time can help you get a feel for the structure you need to follow, and it can help you iron out the important details you want to give the interviewer.

Begin your answer with a brief introduction, about two to three sentences long, then move on to the most relevant parts of your background.

Having a few sample responses ready will help you feel more confident and avoid rambling during the actual interview.

#2. Practice Without Memorizing

Rehearsing your answer can make you feel more comfortable during the interview, but keep in mind that you shouldn’t learn it by heart.

Sure, it might seem like the safer option, but if you end up forgetting something in the interview, you might mess up your entire answer.

Not to mention that if the hiring manager goes off your presumed script, you’ll probably fall flat during the interview .

Instead, come up with a general idea of what you’re going to talk about, memorize the structure, and just wing the rest of the interview.

To really get the hang of it, we recommend grabbing a friend and doing a quick mock interview.

#3. Be Brief and to the Point

Always keep your response concise, focused, and tailored to the specific role.

For starters, your answer is best kept under one or two minutes at most. After all, the interviewer doesn’t have all day to spend interviewing you.

Meaning, they don’t care about which kindergarten you attended, how your first internship went, or what you studied in high school.

You want to stick to your main selling points that are relevant to the job.

In fact, if you can see that the interviewer is getting distracted, you should take that as a sign to wrap things up.

Here’s an example of how not to talk about yourself:

“Well, I’ve always been interested in tech.

It all probably started when I was a kid, and at the age of nine, I got my first computer.

I always loved playing around with code and learning new things. But it wasn’t until high school, where I first had my first class about it, that I really fell in love with the subject.

Since then, I started learning more about it and decided to major in IT at University X, where I learned how to code in several programming languages, and I had a chance to intern at Company Y...”

Instead, try something like:

“Sure! As you know, my name is Kate, and I spent the last four years working as a cyber security specialist.

When I saw your company was hiring, I decided to give it a shot. I’ve been following your work for a while, and you have some interesting projects I’d love to learn more about and contribute to.”

#4. Give a Structured Response

Try to organize your answer with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.

Similar to the past-present-future formula, this structure makes it easier for the interviewer to follow your narrative without getting lost in the details.

Start by telling them who you are in the most basic sense - your name, where you’re from, and how experienced you are.

Then, mention your most relevant skills and notable accomplishments. This is where you want to apply the past-present-future formula and explain where you started, what you’re currently up to, and what you plan to do in the future.

Finally, wrap up your answer by highlighting your enthusiasm for the role to leave a good impression.

#5. Customize Your Response

Take the time to tailor your answer to the specific job you’re interviewing for.

Research the company ahead of time and look into what the role is and what exact qualifications it requires.

Be strategic and only talk about your most relevant experiences, skills, and achievements from your background.

For example, if you’re a content writer and you’re applying for a job as a social media manager, mention some successful social media campaigns you were part of.

This way, you can show the interviewer that you have a deep understanding of the position and how your unique background makes you the ideal candidate.

#6. Highlight Your Strengths

Clearly articulate your greatest strengths to set yourself apart from other candidates.

This could include any specific technical expertise, impressive soft skills , or anything that proves you’re capable of excelling at the job.

For example, if you consistently exceeded your KPIs for six months, that shows you were an overachiever in your field and you’re ready for a new challenge.

That being said, you should also avoid mentioning your weaknesses unless the interviewer directly asks. There’s no need to let them know you almost failed math, especially if you ended up becoming an accountant.

#7. Connect Experiences to the Role

Make an effort to explain how your past experiences, qualifications, and abilities directly relate to the job you’re applying for.

For example, if you were a cashier and now you’re applying for a position as a retail assistant, there are plenty of transferable skills you can focus on.

This can help the interviewer see the connection between your unique background and what the employer’s needs are.

#8. Maintain Professionalism

Keep your tone and the details of your answer professional.

You don’t want to give the interviewer any overly personal information that isn’t relevant to the job.

For example, there’s no need to mention that you moved and started looking for a new job because your last relationship ended badly. You can safely spare them the details by saying you needed a change of scenery and then focusing back on your qualifications.

Similarly, you don’t want to be too friendly or crack jokes. The interviewer might not share your sense of humor, and you want them to see you as a serious and competent candidate after all.

#9. Adapt on the Go

The interviewer might go off script during your interview, so you should be prepared to adapt your answer on the go.

Don’t expect your two-minute pitch to be the end of the story – the interviewer might ask you to elaborate on specific details or have follow-up questions about something you said.

This goes to show that while you should have a structured response ready, you should also be ready to answer any unexpected question the interviewer may throw at you.

For example, if you briefly mention your time working as a project manager when you’re applying to work as a QA, that could catch the interviewer’s attention, and they might ask you to tell them more.

Be ready to dive deeper into that topic to provide more context and relevant examples, depending on what the interviewer wants to hear more of.

#10. Be Honest

It’s always crucial that you’re honest when answering this question.

Don’t exaggerate about your background, experiences, or qualifications. You might think it’s harmless, but the truth will come out eventually, and your reputation and career could bear the brunt of it.

Give honest and transparent answers to make sure the interview is on solid ground. If there are any gaps in your story, it won’t go well.

If they come up, acknowledge any weaknesses tactfully and explain how you have worked to address them. Authenticity is far better than trying to oversell yourself.

#11. Know Your Audience

Or, know thy interviewer.

It’s important to keep in mind who you’re talking to.

Is it the HR manager? The head of the department? The CTO? CMO? CEO even?

You might be wondering why this even matters.

Well, the thing is, you should tailor your answer for each accordingly.

Let’s say you’re a software engineer. If you’re being interviewed by the HR manager and you start going on and on about how much you love coding in Assembly, you’ve already lost them.

The HR manager probably doesn’t know anything about coding or assembly.

They’re expecting a more generic answer about you, your career, and your reasons for applying to the company.

However, if you’re being interviewed by the CTO or the head of the department, you can geek out as much as you want with your answer.

#12. Remember W, E, P (Work, Education, Personal)

There’s a useful way to structure your response to cover your work history, educational background , and relevant personal hobbies or interests.

Or WEP , for short. That is:

• Work. This should make up about 80% of your answer, so focus on your previous experience and achievements.
• Education. 15% of your answer should be about your educational history. Mention your university, any impressive academic achievements, or relevant coursework .
• Personal. Finally, the last 5% should be about you as a person, while still keeping it relevant to the company.

Keep in mind, though, that the W.E.P. rule isn’t set in stone.

For example, if you’re a student, your entire answer could be about your academic career and personal interests.

“Tell Me About Yourself” Sample Answers

Need inspiration to figure out how to talk about yourself? No worries!

We’ve put together a list of over 80 sample answers for different professions and levels of experience.

Sales and Customer Service Sample Answers

#1. sales associate sample answer.

“I recently graduated with a degree in Business Administration, and I had the chance to intern at a retail company. I mostly helped with customer service and sales. It was a hands-on experience that taught me a lot about what makes customers tick and how to meet their needs.

At university, I also had a part-time job at the movie theater, where I learned how to upsell and keep track of profits.

I'm looking forward to honing my skills as part of your team. From what I read, your company has an innovative approach to customer engagement, and I'm eager to contribute and learn more in a real-world setting.”

Read a full sales associate resume example here.

#2. Account Manager Sample Answer

“I've been an account manager for over a decade. I’ve primarily been working with tech companies to build strong client relationships and deliver tailored service solutions. My experience includes navigating complex contract negotiations and consistently achieving above-target retention rates.

At my current job, I've led our team to a 20% increase in client retention by implementing strategic communication plans and personalized account reviews. I also spearheaded our quarterly client feedback sessions, which were crucial in adapting our services to better meet client needs.

I'm good at building relationships, and I love making sure client satisfaction rates stay high. So, when I saw your ad, I wanted to apply immediately. I'm really impressed by your company's commitment to innovation. I’m pretty excited about the opportunity to put my strategic thinking to good use and use my client management skills to help your team.”

#3. Software Support Specialist Sample Answer

“I graduated with a degree in Information Technology, where I concentrated on software development and troubleshooting. During college, I interned at a tech startup, where I provided software support and learned how to resolve customer issues. The role let me develop strong problem-solving skills and showed me the ins and outs of common software problems.

In addition to my internship, I worked part-time at the campus IT desk, where I helped students and faculty with software installations and bug fixes. The hands-on experience helped me improve my technical communication skills, so I can make complex information accessible to non-technical users.

So, when I saw your ad, I knew I was the right person for the job. I want to bring my background in software support and my passion for tech to your team.”

#4. Customer Service Representative Sample Answer

“I'm coming from a career in hospitality management, where I spent the last eight years managing front-of-house operations at a bustling hotel. This really sharpened my ability to handle customer inquiries, resolve all sorts of conflicts, and ensure guest satisfaction. So, I think my skills are directly transferable to the customer service representative position.

I recently completed a series of professional workshops on communication and customer relationship management to make sure I’m on top of my game. I learned a lot of new strategies to effectively engage with customers and solve problems more efficiently, so I’m excited to put them to use.

I actually found your company while looking for something different after so many years working at a hotel, and the job ad was just what I was looking for. I'm interested in e-commerce and I’m excited to leverage my background in hospitality to contribute to your team and help maintain the high standards your service is known for.”

Read a full customer service resume example here.

#5. Cashier Sample Answer

“I recently finished high school, and I’m looking for a job that lets me work in shifts. I’m starting community college in the fall, but I have some experience with school fundraising events and running a lemonade and brownie stand. I can interact and work together with all sorts of different people, and I think those experiences helped me develop strong communication skills.

I've always had a knack for numbers, and math was my favorite subject in school. Not to mention, your supermarket's produce section is my favorite in the neighborhood, so I was pretty happy when I saw your ad. I’ve always had good experiences shopping here, and now I can help your customers have good experiences, too.”

Read a full cashier resume example here.

#6. Retail Manager Sample Answer

“Over the past six years, I've grown in the retail industry, starting as a sales associate and working my way up to a store manager position. Currently, at Store X, I oversee daily operations at the busy strip mall location and manage a team of 15 employees. I’ve been focused on optimizing staff performance and improving sales metrics, all while keeping customer satisfaction at an all-time high.

One of my key achievements was redesigning the store layout. That gave us a 25% increase in foot traffic and significantly boosted our sales. I also implemented a new training program for staff that improved employee retention and performance across the board.

I think my retail management expertise would make me a great fit for your company, especially since you have a commitment to quality and customer experience. I’m looking for a new challenge, and a luxury perfume brand like yours is just the right place for me to leverage my skills in team leadership and store operations.”

Read a full retail manager resume example here.

#7. Barista Sample Answer

“I’ve worked part-time as a barista at a local cafe, so I know everything there is to know about coffee and customer satisfaction. I’m also good at managing those busy rush hours without compromising on cappuccino quality.

For me, this is not just a job – I actually love coffee. I completed a specialty coffee workshop, so I have top-notch brewing techniques and know about different coffee varieties. That training taught me to engage with customers more effectively, so I can offer them personalized recommendations, and make sure they learn all about their favorite morning drink, from the quality of the beans to the distinct flavor of the roast.

I want to work in the field long-term, so I’m here to bring my passion for the brew and my customer service skills to your team. Your cafe has a great reputation, and I’ve actually had coffee here several times so I know it’s well-earned. When I saw you were hiring full-time, I knew it was the right place for me.”

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#8. Server Sample Answer

"I'm an enthusiastic people-person looking to start my career in the restaurant industry. While I don't have extensive experience yet, I've been trained in excellent customer service through my part-time retail jobs during high school and college.

I have strong multi-tasking skills, stamina to work on my feet all day, and a friendly, upbeat personality. My passion is creating positive experiences for others through attentive service. Last semester, I took a food safety certification course to prepare for this role.

What excites me most about this server position is the opportunity to learn from experienced staff while delivering outstanding hospitality. I'm a quick learner, team player, and hard worker committed to providing diners with an enjoyable meal."

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#9. Waiter Sample Answer

“I have been working as a waiter for over five years, starting at small local diners and gradually moving up to fine dining restaurants. My experience spans different aspects of the service industry, from opening and closing shifts to meal prep, managing reservations, and providing personalized guest service.

One of my key achievements was at my current restaurant, where I initiated a customer feedback system that helped us understand and quickly respond to guest preferences. It significantly improved our return customer rates and led to a more tailored dining experience, which boosted our average per-table sales by about 20%.

I'm excited to bring my skills and insights to your renowned restaurant next. I admire your commitment to culinary excellence and customer satisfaction, and I'm ready to contribute to your team and ensure that every guest has an exceptional dining experience.”

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#10. Front Desk Agent Sample Answer

“I have over two years of experience in hospitality, working at both boutique hotels and large international chains as a front desk agent. My experience includes efficiently managing check-ins and check-outs, quickly resolving any guest inquiries, and overseeing smooth booking processes.

Out of my achievements in the field, I’d single out how I implemented an online check-in system that cut guest wait times in half and boosted the hotel’s satisfaction ratings. I've also led training sessions for new staff several times where we focused on exceptional customer service.

I'm excited about the opportunity to bring my front desk management skills to your hotel since I think I align well with your commitment to guest satisfaction and innovation in the hospitality sector.”

#11. Housekeeper Sample Answer

"I'm an energetic and reliable housekeeper with a year of experience, so I’ve been providing thorough cleaning services for a while. Up until recently, I worked at a small hotel where I made sure all the guest rooms, common areas, and bathrooms met high standards of cleanliness and presentation.

I have experience using commercial cleaning equipment and supplies, following checklists, and paying close attention to detail. What I enjoy most about the job is creating an inviting atmosphere that exceeds expectations, and I get to listen to music while I’m at it, so it’s a win-win for me.

Beyond my cleaning responsibilities, I also helped with completing logbooks and reporting any maintenance needs. My strengths include efficiency, time management, and working well in a team.

So, when I saw your ad, I was excited to apply. I have a positive attitude and housekeeping skills, and I can guarantee a commitment to your standards, so I know I'll deliver an impeccable experience for every visitor."

#12. Line Cook Sample Answer

“I've spent the last eight years honing my culinary skills in various kitchens, from fast casual to upscale dining. I started with basic prep work and gradually evolved into more complex cooking techniques under the mentorship of seasoned chefs back in the day.

In my current position, I redesigned the menu, which led to a 30% increase in customer orders for featured dishes. I've also taken the initiative to streamline our kitchen operations and reduce food waste while improving service speed.

I'm excited about the opportunity to bring my kitchen expertise and passion for food to your restaurant. Your business has great reviews, and I like the commitment to sustainability you’ve declared, so I’m looking forward to contributing to your success.”

#13. Restaurant Manager Sample Answer

“I have over a decade of experience in restaurant management, and I’ve been overseeing operations in both family-owned eateries and high-volume establishments. My career so far has focused on optimizing staff performance, enhancing customer service, and profitability.

One of my significant accomplishments was at my current restaurant. I implemented a new inventory management system that reduced our waste by 25% and increased our profit margins. I also led a successful initiative to redesign the dining space, which improved customer flow and increased the seating capacity by 15%.

I recently moved here, and I’m looking to join a restaurant where I can put my skills to good use. I read about your dedication to culinary excellence and customer satisfaction, so I'm excited about the opportunity to contribute to and grow with your team.”

#14. Bar Manager Sample Answer

“I've been immersed in the bar industry for over five years. I gradually went from cocktail waiter to bartender to bar manager. So far, I've managed all aspects of bar operations, including staff training, inventory control, and cocktail development at a popular downtown lounge.

A key achievement in my current job was launching a craft cocktail program that increased our drink sales by 40%. I also implemented a new inventory system that reduced excess stock and cut costs by 10%. Beyond operations, I've fostered a team culture focused on exceptional service and continuous learning. I make sure all our staff attends bartending classes and knows the ins and outs of the menu and everything featured on it.

I want to bring my expertise in bar management and mixology to an up-and-coming bar like yours. I'm particularly drawn to your twist on unique customer experiences, and I’m looking forward to the new challenge. I think I can really help your bar succeed.”

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Administrative and HR Sample Answers

#15. receptionist sample answer.

“I recently graduated with an associate degree in Business Administration. While studying, I also worked part-time as a receptionist at a busy local clinic, where I managed appointments, handled patient inquiries, and maintained a welcoming front office environment.

I think that helped me work on my organizational and communication skills. The job also reinforced my multitasking abilities, so I can deliver excellent customer service under pressure.

I also volunteered at community events, coordinating logistics and helping guests with anything they needed. I have an eye for detail, and I’m good at problem-solving, so I managed to run a tight ship, and all my events went without a hitch.

Now that I’m looking for a full-time job, I saw the ad for your gym, and I thought - perfect! I'm ready to put my customer service experience to good use, and I can make sure your customers have a positive first impression every time they come to your gym.”

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#16. Recruiter Sample Answer

“I recently graduated with a degree in Human Resources Management, and I’ve been actively involved in organizing career fairs at my university. These events required coordinating with multiple departments, handling logistics, and communicating effectively with both companies and students. So, I’ve had the opportunity to sharpen my organizational skills and my ability to engage with diverse groups of people.

I've also gained insight into the recruitment process through varying internships. I learned how to match candidates with suitable roles based on their skills and potential.

I'm excited about the opportunity to leverage my educational background and hands-on experience in a real-world setting. Your company's innovative approach to recruitment and talent development is inspiring, and I am eager to contribute to your team and help people find their dream jobs.”

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#17. Human Resources Specialist Sample Answer

“I have over ten years of experience in human resources, mostly focused on employee relations, benefits management, and compliance within the healthcare industry. My career has been dedicated to enhancing workforce efficiency and fostering an inclusive corporate culture.

In my current role, I led the overhaul of our onboarding process, reduced employee turnover by 18%, and increased job satisfaction scores among new hires. I also managed the move to a new HRIS system that streamlined operations and improved data accuracy across the department.

I'm passionate about using technology to enhance HR functions and excited about the opportunity to bring my expertise to your organization. I admire your commitment to employee development and well-being, so I look forward to joining your team and supporting your strategic HR initiatives.“

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#18. Office Manager Sample Answer

“Over the past five years, I've developed my skills as an office manager while overseeing operations in a fast-paced tech startup environment. My role has been integral to streamlining office processes, managing administrative staff, and ensuring seamless daily operations.

A major achievement in my current position was the implementation of a digital filing system that reduced paper use by 40% and improved our overall operational efficiency. I also coordinated a new office layout that fostered better workflow and collaboration among teams.

I thrive on making office environments more productive and enjoyable for everyone. It’s a role where I can help everyone by doing what I’m best at - organizing! I love keeping a neat space. So, I'm enthusiastic about bringing my expertise to your company now. I’m ready to support your growth and help you enhance team collaboration.“

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#19. Secretary Sample Answer

“I earned my associate degree in Office Administration two years ago and have since been working as a secretary in a bustling law firm. I can manage complex schedules, handle confidential documents, and provide comprehensive support to a team of attorneys.

During my time there, I've implemented an electronic filing system that has improved document retrieval times and enhanced the efficiency of our office operations. I've also gained significant experience in drafting correspondence, preparing legal documents, and organizing client meetings.

I'm really excited about the opportunity to bring my organizational skills and attention to detail to your team. I admire your company's commitment to excellence, and the pro bono work you do is inspiring. I want to contribute to your success by leveraging my strengths, which are all administrative and organizational excellence.“

#20. Executive Assistant Sample Answer

“I recently graduated with a bachelor's degree in Business Administration, where I focused on project management and corporate communications. During my studies, I interned at a mid-sized corporate firm, where I assisted the executive team with scheduling, correspondence, and daily office operations. The role let me develop strong organizational skills and an ability to handle sensitive information discreetly.

I've also managed multiple high-stakes projects during university. I had to coordinate across teams and ensure the timely delivery of all sorts of objectives. That taught me how to effectively support high-level executives while maintaining attention to detail and meeting strict deadlines.

I'm enthusiastic about the opportunity to apply my skills in a dynamic environment like yours and support your executive team's goals. Your company is a leader in the market, and I’m ready to learn all I can to support you and contribute to your success while kickstarting my career.“

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#21. Administrative Assistant Sample Answer

“I have five years of experience as an administrative assistant. So far, I’ve primarily been supporting senior management in a busy corporate setting. My current role involves handling a wide range of administrative tasks, from managing calendars and coordinating meetings to preparing reports and handling correspondence.

I suppose I have a few achievements. A significant thing I accomplished was the development of a new document management system, which reduced the time spent on file retrieval by over 50%. I also played a key role in organizing an annual conference for over 300 attendees, which was recognized for its high level of organization and smooth execution.

I definitely thrive in fast-paced environments, and I enjoy the challenge of improving administrative processes. When I saw your ad, I knew I was the right person for the job. After my old company got acquired, I felt like it was time for a change, so I'm excited to bring my skills to your team and contribute to the continued success of your company.“

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#22. Data Entry Sample Answer

“I've spent the last five years specializing in data entry and database management in the healthcare sector. My job required meticulous attention to detail and proficiency in various database systems to maintain the accuracy and confidentiality of sensitive patient information.

One of my notable achievements includes leading a project to switch from paper-based to digital records, which improved data retrieval times by 40% and reduced errors by 30%. I have the ability to adapt quickly to new technologies, and I have a focus on accuracy, which I believe is crucial to maintaining the integrity of data systems.

I want to bring my expertise to your team since I’m looking for a new job in the same field. I read about your company’s innovative use of data analytics, so I look forward to diving into something new while contributing to your projects.“

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Finance Sample Answers

#23. accountant sample answer.

“I have over a decade of experience as an accountant, and I’ve been working extensively in the manufacturing sector. Financial reporting, tax planning, and budget management are all well within my expertise. Currently, I oversee the financial operations for a plant with annual revenues that exceed $30 million.

A key accomplishment of mine was spearheading a financial restructuring project that resulted in a 20% reduction in operational costs without compromising on output quality. I also introduced a new software system that automated several key accounting processes, which enhanced accuracy and saved time.

I like numbers, and I'm all about using financial data to drive business decisions and improvements. I like the idea of bringing my strategic financial management skills to your company, so I can contribute to your financial performance and growth.“

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#24. Financial Analyst Sample Answer

“Well, I graduated with a degree in Finance from Columbia  University. I’d say that gave me a great foundation for my analytical skills and I gained a solid understanding of financial principles. After college, I joined a mid-sized investment firm as a junior financial analyst. I supported senior analysts there, mostly in tracking and analyzing market trends, building financial models, and preparing investment reports.

There was a significant project I worked on, where I helped develop a model that predicted stock performance with 80% accuracy. That was instrumental in guiding client investment decisions down the line. The role taught me to interpret complex financial data and communicate my insights more clearly, so it was a great learning experience.

Now, I’m looking for the next step in my career. You’re a bigger company, and I'm excited about the opportunity to bring what I’ve got to your team.“

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#25. Bank Teller Sample Answer

“I recently graduated high school and my best subjects were mathematics and Spanish. I can even communicate comfortably in Spanish and was top of my class.

I have experience volunteering at community events, so I’ve handled cash transactions and helped attendees. I can interact with people from all sorts of backgrounds, which I pride myself on.

I also have a bit of experience in customer service. I worked the counter at a local bakery, so I made sure everyone got what they needed and left with a smile.

I gained an interest in the financial sector recently and thought this was a great opportunity when I saw your ad. I'm eager to apply my skills in a new professional setting,  and I look forward to contributing to your team.“

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#26. Banker Sample Answer

“I recently graduated with a degree in Finance from Ohio University, where I was part of the student council and I oversaw the financial decisions we voted on. I was the council cashier, so I was responsible for collecting money from the students and staff for any events we had planned.

Overall, my experiences in university gave me a great understanding of finances but I really got into the field when I interned at City Bank. I was involved in assessing client financial needs and supporting loan processing there, which gave me practical experience and exposure to banking operations.

I had a great time during my internship and when I saw you were hiring full-time, I wanted to apply immediately. I think I’ve honed my financial analysis and client interaction skills and found a passion for banking. I really look forward to contributing to your team and learning from industry leaders.“

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Business Sample Answers

#27. business analyst sample answer.

“I've been a Business Analyst for over five years, and I’ve mostly been working in tech. My experience includes conducting detailed market analysis, developing business models, and leading cross-functional project teams to drive process improvements and product innovations.

In my current position, I played a huge role in a project that redesigned our customer service processes. That enhanced user satisfaction by 25% and reduced support costs by 15%. I’d say my approach is to combine data-driven analysis with a deep understanding of user needs so I can get the best insights possible.

When I heard your company was hiring, I knew I had to apply. Your reputation in the tech industry is unmatched, and I'm excited about the opportunity to bring my analytical skills and passion for problem-solving to your team.“

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#28. Business Development Manager Sample Answer

“I have over a decade of experience in business development, both in and outside of the tech industry. Strategic partnership development, market expansion, and revenue growth are all things I’m deeply familiar with.

At my current job, I led initiatives that resulted in a 40% increase in annual revenue through new client acquisition and the expansion of existing accounts. One of my key achievements was negotiating a partnership with a major software provider, which extended our market reach and enhanced our product span.

I've consistently used market insights and competitive analysis to make strategic decisions, so when I read your ad, I knew I could fit in great. I love driving innovation and profitability, so I’m excited to bring my skills and experience to your company. I’m sure I can contribute to your growth targets and overall success in the industry.“

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#29. Project Manager Sample Answer

“Sure, I’d be glad to. I’ve been a tech-focused project manager for up to 8 years now.

I graduated from Cornell University, where I made the Dean’s List, with a major in business administration and a minor in computer science. After that, I first got into the industry, working as an administrative assistant at Company X. There, I provided clerical support with interdepartmental communication, so I helped manage schedules and maintained the digital filing system.

After that, I worked as a project manager for Company Y, which provided cloud computing solutions for about 6 years. There, I personally managed 5+ teams of software projects and made sure everything went smoothly in terms of business goals, deadlines, budget, and more. 

In my downtime, I enjoy reading about AI, tech, and robotics. Since you guys do all three, I thought I’d apply.”

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Marketing and Advertising Sample Answers

#30. marketing executive sample answer.

“I graduated with a degree in Marketing from Michigan State University five years ago and quickly started my career at a dynamic advertising agency. In my role, I contributed to several high-profile campaigns, focusing on digital marketing strategies that increased brand visibility and consumer engagement for our clients. 

One standout project was for a major retail client, where my team implemented an innovative social media strategy that boosted customer interactions by over 50% within the first quarter. My experience also extends to analyzing market trends and consumer behavior, which helps in crafting targeted marketing messages.

I’m excited about the opportunity to bring my creative and analytical skills to your company, particularly because it aligns with your vision of driving brand growth through cutting-edge marketing techniques.“

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#31. Marketing Manager Sample Answer

“I have six years of experience as a Marketing Manager, primarily in the consumer goods sector. My role involves overseeing campaign development, managing budgets, and leading a team to execute strategic marketing initiatives that enhance brand awareness and sales.

A key achievement was spearheading a digital marketing campaign that increased our market share by 15% in one year. It was a great success and it was mostly due to the innovative content strategies and robust data analysis we did beforehand. We made sure we targeted the right audience effectively.

I'm eager to bring my expertise in campaign management and team leadership to your company. I admire your commitment to sustainability and innovation, and I am excited to contribute to your marketing objectives and drive continued growth.“

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#32. Social Media Marketing Manager Sample Answer

“I have over four years of experience in social media marketing, specializing in building and managing brand presence across various digital platforms. In my current position, I successfully increased the company’s follower base by 200% and tripled engagement rates through targeted content strategies and influencer partnerships.

A notable achievement was when I led a campaign that went viral. That generated significant media coverage and a 50% increase in sales over the previous quarter. I’m excellent at analytics and creative content creation, so I make sure that all campaigns are aligned with brand goals and audience preferences.

I’m really excited to bring my expertise in viral marketing and strategic planning to your team. From what I read in your ad, that’s just what you’re looking for, and I like your company’s services, I’ve been using your app for over two years now. So, I look forward to driving your social media presence to new heights.“

#33. Content Marketer Sample Answer

“I'm switching from a career in journalism, where I spent over eight years crafting compelling stories and managing content for a major online news platform. My background gave me with a deep understanding of audience engagement and content optimization for various digital channels.

Recently, I've redirected my focus towards content marketing, so I completed a few courses in SEO and digital marketing analytics. My current approach is to combine data-driven strategies with my creative storytelling so I can enhance brand visibility and engagement.

Since I was looking for a new job, I saw your ad and was immediately interested. I'm drawn to your company's innovative approach to content creation. I am excited about the opportunity to apply my seasoned storytelling skills and analytical abilities to your content marketing initiatives. I believe I can really contribute to driving traffic and building audience relationships.“

#34. SEO Specialist Sample Answer

“I've spent the past four years honing my SEO skills, mainly at a digital marketing agency where I managed SEO strategies for a diverse portfolio of clients, from small businesses to large enterprises. My background includes a Bachelor's in Marketing from a California State University, but it's my on-the-job experience that honed my skills.

During my time at the agency, I led a project that increased organic traffic for our key client by 150% within six months through comprehensive keyword research, content optimization, and technical SEO improvements. I also have experience with SEM and have run successful PPC campaigns.

Outside of work, I run a personal blog about sustainable living, where I apply my SEO skills to promote eco-friendly practices, which aligns with my personal passion for environmental advocacy. This also keeps me updated on the latest digital marketing trends, so it’s a win/win hobby.

I'm excited about the opportunity to bring my skills to your company, especially since I admire how your business prioritizes both growth and sustainability. I am eager to contribute to your projects and help enhance your online presence and search rankings.”

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#35. PPC Specialist Sample Answer

“I have over a decade of experience in digital marketing, with a specialization in pay-per-click (PPC) advertising. In my current role, I manage a substantial PPC budget, focusing on optimizing ad spend for maximum ROI across multiple platforms, including Google Ads and Bing.

A significant accomplishment was revamping a struggling PPC campaign that resulted in a 70% increase in click-through rates and a 50% increase in conversions within the first three months. I leverage data analytics to fine-tune targeting and bidding strategies and ensure that each campaign delivers against set objectives.

I'm enthusiastic about the opportunity to bring my expertise in PPC management to your team. I'm particularly impressed by your company's innovative approach to digital marketing and am eager to contribute to your continued success.“

IT and Software Development Sample Answers

#36. it specialist sample answer.

“I have over ten years of experience as an IT Specialist, currently focusing on system administration and network security within the finance sector. My role includes managing IT infrastructure, implementing security protocols, and ensuring data integrity and system efficiency across multiple branches.

A standout achievement was leading a critical data migration project that improved system performance by 40% and significantly enhanced our security posture. I also played a key role in changing our operations to cloud-based solutions, which increased our operational flexibility and reduced costs.

I'm excited to bring my technical expertise and proactive problem-solving skills to your team. Your company's commitment to technological advancement and security is highly motivating, and I look forward to contributing to your ongoing success.“

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#37. Software Engineer Sample Answer

“I have a decade of experience as a Software Engineer, mostly specializing in developing scalable backend systems for e-commerce platforms. At my current job, I played a pivotal role in redesigning the core architecture, which improved system reliability by 60% and significantly enhanced the user experience.

My expertise includes mastering multiple programming languages and frameworks, leading agile teams, and implementing robust testing protocols. A notable project involved developing a real-time analytics tool that increased data processing speed by 50%.

I am enthusiastic about the opportunity to bring my technical skills and passion for software development to your team. I admire your company’s commitment to cutting-edge technology solutions, and I am eager to contribute to your projects.“

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#38. Cyber Security Sample Answer

"I've spent the last ten years as a software developer, where I focused a lot on building secure applications and managing software lifecycles. My interest in cybersecurity really took off while I was at Tech Innovations Inc. I collaborated with the cybersecurity team there, and that really made me get into it.

I recently completed a certification in network security, and I'm currently working towards my Cybersecurity Analyst certification. It’s been fun blending my tech skills with my passion for cybersecurity.

So, since I've been looking for something new, I saw your ad, and I liked what I read. Your company’s mission is all about protecting digital assets and ensuring data integrity, and that's what I'm looking for. I think my background in software development gives me a unique perspective that can let me contribute to your team.

I’m looking forward to possibly joining your company and diving into this new role. I love a challenge, and I want to learn more about advanced cybersecurity tactics while working on interesting projects."

#39. Web Developer Sample Answer

“I've been a Web Developer for five years, specializing in front-end development and user experience design. In my current role, I've led the redesign of several e-commerce websites, enhancing user interfaces and improving navigation, which resulted in a 30% increase in user engagement and a 20% uptick in sales conversions.

My technical toolkit includes proficiency in HTML, CSS, JavaScript, and React, along with a strong understanding of responsive design principles. I've also collaborated on integrating backend APIs to provide seamless user experiences.

I'm excited about the opportunity to join your team and contribute to your web projects. Your company’s focus on creating user-centric designs aligns perfectly with my skills and career aspirations, so I’m looking forward to helping you achieve your digital goals.“

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#40. Computer Scientist Sample Answer

“I'm switching from software development to a broader focus in computer science, especially in algorithms, data structures, and machine learning. In my previous roles, I designed complex software and utilized data analysis to refine product features, which sparked my interest in the theoretical and practical aspects of computing.

I've recently finished a postgraduate degree in artificial intelligence. I wanted to combine advanced computational techniques with my real-world experience, and here I am.

I am excited about joining your company so I can work on pioneering projects with state-of-the-art tech. I think my skills and experience can contribute to your team's success, and I can’t wait to help you make some significant advancements in computer science.“

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#41. Data Scientist Sample Answer

“I recently graduated with a master’s degree in Data Science from New York University, where I focused on machine learning and big data analytics. During my studies, I collaborated on a research project that used predictive analytics to enhance decision-making processes in healthcare. That actually ended up being published in a well-regarded academic journal, so I’m very proud of my work there.

I’d say that experience really honed my skills in using advanced analytical tools and techniques, and also deepened my understanding of how to apply data science to solve real-world problems.

Now, I’m looking to get some practical experience and put those skills to good use. When I saw your ad, I thought it would be a great opportunity to start my career as a Data Scientist since your company is known for innovation and leadership in analytics.”

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#42. Data Analyst Sample Answer

“I graduated with a degree in Statistics from Metro University two years ago and have since been working as a data analyst at a retail analytics firm. I've honed some skills in SQL, Python, and Tableau. They’re great tools, and I can use them to create some insightful dashboards and reports that help our clients understand consumer behavior and optimize their marketing strategies.

A significant achievement was my contribution to a project that increased a client’s sales. I identified key customer segments, and then we tailored the marketing efforts accordingly, which led to a 20% boost in targeted campaign effectiveness.

I’m excited about the opportunity to bring my analytical skills and passion for data to your team. I’m confident I can help your company enhance its business strategies through some robust data analysis, and the in-house data analyst position is just what I’m good at.”

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#43. DevOps Engineer Sample Answer

“I have five years of experience as a DevOps Engineer, working primarily in agile tech environments. My role involves streamlining deployment processes, maintaining scalable infrastructure, and ensuring continuous integration and delivery across multiple projects.

One of my key achievements was leading the adoption of Docker containerization at my current company, which reduced deployment times by 70% and significantly improved the reliability of our production environments. I also implemented robust monitoring solutions that enhanced our system's uptime and responsiveness.

I'm eager to bring my expertise in automation, configuration management, and cloud technologies to your team. Your company's innovative approach to software development aligns perfectly with my skills and career goals, and I look forward to contributing to your projects.”

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#44. AI Engineer Sample Answer

“I'm moving from a successful career in software engineering to specializing in artificial intelligence. This is mainly fueled by my passion for machine learning and its applications in solving complex problems. Over the past eight years, I've developed robust software solutions, and more recently, I've focused on integrating AI technologies to enhance product capabilities.

My most notable project involved designing an AI algorithm for a fintech company that improved fraud detection rates by 30%. I’ve also completed a professional certification in deep learning, which has equipped me with advanced skills in neural networks and predictive analytics.

I'm excited about the opportunity to join your team and apply my AI expertise in a dynamic and innovative environment, so I look forward to contributing to your cutting-edge projects.”

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#45. Java Developer Sample Answer

“I have over a decade of experience as a Java developer. I currently specialize in building robust backend systems for financial services. My career has focused on developing and maintaining scalable applications that manage millions of transactions daily.

A significant accomplishment in my current role was leading the development of a core banking system that improved transaction processing speed by 40% and enhanced data security. My expertise extends to Spring Framework, Hibernate, and microservices architecture, all of which have been instrumental in optimizing my current company’s software solutions.

I’m looking for a new challenge, and I want to contribute to innovative projects and help refine your systems. The ad said you were looking for a Java expert for your next project, so I look forward to leveraging those skills in a new environment.”

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Health and Medicine Sample Answers

#46. nurse sample answer.

“I have five years of experience as a registered nurse, working primarily in fast-paced emergency departments. My role involves providing critical care and coordinating with multidisciplinary teams to ensure comprehensive patient treatment. 

One of my key achievements was initiating a quick-response protocol that reduced patient wait times by 20% and improved the overall efficiency of emergency services. I am committed to patient education and advocacy, and I make sure that patients and their families are well-informed and supported throughout their care.

I'm excited about the opportunity to bring my clinical skills and passion for patient care to your hospital. Your commitment to healthcare excellence and community service aligns perfectly with my values, and I look forward to contributing to your team.”

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#47. Medical Assistant Sample Answer

“I graduated with a certificate in Medical Assisting from a vocational college last year. I did great in both clinical and administrative tasks there, and I did an internship at the local health clinic. During my externship, I gained hands-on experience in patient care, medical record management, and laboratory procedures.

I got a lot of complements on how I could manage patient flow effectively and make sure that all patients felt attended to and supported during their visits. I also assisted in implementing a new digital record system that improved the accuracy and accessibility of all patient records.

When my internship ended, I started looking for a full-time job in the field, and here I am. I want to bring my skills and enthusiasm for healthcare to your team. I read about your facility's dedication to community health, and I’m excited to contribute, too.”

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#48. Dental Assistant Sample Answer

“I recently completed my dental assisting certification at a regional technical college. I learned comprehensive dental care and office management techniques while I was there, but it was my internship that really showed me the ropes.

During my internship at a busy dental office, I gained a lot of practical experience. I assisted with a variety of dental procedures, managed sterilization processes, and overall ensured the comfort of patients. My hands-on training included taking dental X-rays, preparing dental materials for restorations, and educating patients on post-procedure care.

I am enthusiastic about the opportunity to start my career as a Dental Assistant at your clinic. I read up on your practice, and I’m particularly impressed by your commitment to patient care and continuing education, and I want to contribute to your team.”

#49. Dentist Sample Answer

“I graduated with a DDS from City University two years ago and have since been practicing in a community dental clinic. There, I've honed my skills in general dentistry, performing a wide range of procedures from routine cleanings to complex root canals. I also engaged in continuous education, particularly in cosmetic dentistry, to expand my expertise.

A key accomplishment in my current role was leading a project to improve patient education on preventive care, which significantly reduced the incidence of cavities and other dental issues among our patients. 

I'm excited about the opportunity to bring my clinical skills and passion for patient education to your practice. I admire your focus on comprehensive dental care and look forward to contributing to your team and advancing my career in dentistry.”

Read a full dentist resume example here.

#50. Pharmacist Sample Answer

“With over 6 years of experience as a biochemist researching drug synthesis and interactions, I am switching to a pharmacist role so I can directly improve patient health outcomes. In my previous lab work, I developed strong analytical skills and an extensive understanding of pharmacology, medication therapy, and patient safety practices.

While conducting clinical trials, I realized my true passion lies in bridging the latest pharmaceutical advancements with compassionate patient care. This drove me to recently complete a Doctor of Pharmacy degree to formally apply my scientific background in a pharmacy setting.

What excites me about this opportunity is your pharmacy's reputation for personalized service and commitment to patient education. I look forward to combining my newly acquired clinical pharmacy skills with my ability to simplify complex scientific concepts so I can communicate clearly with patients.”

Read a full pharmacist resume example here.

Creative Sample Answers

#51. graphic designer sample answer.

“I have five years of experience as a graphic designer, primarily in a fast-paced advertising agency. Here, I've been developing and executing compelling visual content for national marketing campaigns while meeting tight deadlines.

My expertise spans digital and print media, with a strong focus on brand development and visual storytelling. A key achievement was leading the design for a campaign that increased client engagement by 30%. I introduced innovative graphic techniques and coordinated closely with the marketing team to make sure the visuals aligned with their strategy.

I'm excited about the opportunity to bring my creative skills and passion for design to your team. I’ve heard about your company's reputation for innovative design solutions,and that perfectly matches the direction I want to take my career.”

Read a full graphic designer resume example here.

#52. UI/UX Designer Sample Answer

“I have over a decade of experience in UI/UX design. I’ve mainly specialized in creating intuitive and engaging interfaces for mobile and web applications. In my current role at a tech startup, I led the redesign of our flagship product, which resulted in a 40% increase in user retention and significantly improved user satisfaction.

My approach to UI/UX combines user-centered design principles with data-driven insights. I make sure that the solutions I develop look great and perform even better. I'm also proficient in a range of design tools like Sketch, Figma, and Adobe XD.

I'm excited about the opportunity to bring my UI/UX design expertise to your company. I admire your commitment to innovation and user experience, and I’ve seen it firsthand since I’ve used your products. The feedback I gave was actually implemented over time, so I know you take user feedback seriously. I’m looking forward to contributing to your projects myself!”

#53. Product Designer Sample Answer

“I graduated with a degree in Industrial Design two years ago and have since worked as a product designer at a consumer electronics firm. There, I've been involved in the full design cycle, from concept to production, all focused on creating user-friendly and aesthetically pleasing products.

A notable project I led was the design of a wearable fitness tracker that saw a 25% increase in sales due to its innovative features and ergonomic design. I’m proficient in different types of CAD software, and I’m familiar with different materials, how they work, and how much they all cost down the line.

So, I'm eager to bring what I’ve got to your team. I recently moved to this city, and I was looking for a job that matches my experience… and then I saw your ad! I think my skills and passion for design match what you’re looking for perfectly, and I’m excited to join because your company is known for its cutting-edge product innovations.”

#54. Creative Director Sample Answer

“I'm an innovative creative director with over 12 years of experience leading design teams to develop compelling and award-winning advertising campaigns. Most recently, I spearheaded the rebranding for a major sports apparel company that generated a 25% increase in brand awareness.

My background allows me to effectively manage entire projects from concept to execution while inspiring teams to push creative boundaries. I have a proven track record of over 50 successful integrated marketing campaigns across print, digital, and social platforms.

What draws me to this role is your agency's reputation for fresh, culture-shaping creative work. In my downtime, I love exploring new design trends and mediums. I'm passionate about delivering imaginative solutions that capture audiences in memorable ways and drive real business impact.”

#55. Game Designer Sample Answer

“I have over ten years of experience as a game designer, having worked on a variety of titles from indie to AAA games. My expertise lies in creating engaging gameplay mechanics and storylines that enhance player experience and retention.

In my current role, I led the conceptual and development phases of a top-selling strategy game that received acclaim for its innovative design and depth. I am skilled in using Unity and Unreal Engine, and my approach always emphasizes player-centric design principles.

I’m excited about the possibility of bringing my creative and technical skills to your team, particularly since your company is known for pushing the boundaries of interactive entertainment. I’m also a huge fan of your signature franchise, and being able to work on the next installment is like a dream come true.”

Read a full game designer resume example here.

#56. Animator Sample Answer

“I've been an animator for over five years now. I specialize in 3D animation for television and film, so you might have actually seen some of the cartoons I’ve worked on. My portfolio includes work on award-winning animated series and feature films, where I mostly contributed to character design and complex animation sequences.

One of my standout projects involved creating the fluid motion for a critically acclaimed series' protagonist. It really enhanced the emotional depth and realism of the character interactions, and I’m quite proud of that. I'm proficient in Maya, Blender, and Adobe After Effects, and each of those tools has been essential in refining my animation techniques.

I'm excited about the opportunity to bring my creativity and technical expertise to your studio. Your commitment to storytelling and visual innovation matches my passion for animation, and I’m looking for a job where I can really make a difference. Your animations really touch lives, and I look forward to contributing to your upcoming projects.”

Read a full animator resume example here.

#57. Illustrator Sample Answer

“I graduated with a degree in Visual Arts two years ago and have since been working as a freelance illustrator. I mainly specialize in digital art and character design, which is also my biggest hobby. My work has been featured in children's books, graphic novels, and online publications. I love bringing stories to life through vivid and engaging illustrations.

One of my notable projects was illustrating a series for a well-known educational publisher. That was praised for its colorful and imaginative artwork that helped captivate young readers, so I’m really proud of that. I'm skilled in using Adobe Illustrator and Photoshop, but I like all sorts of tools that can help me create detailed and expressive art. I tried ProCreate recently, so I could adapt to it over time.

I'm looking for a full-time job now, and from what I say, your company is renowned for its creative projects and innovative approach to media, so I’d love to contribute.”

Read a full illustrator resume example here.

#58. Photographer Sample Answer

“I'm going from a decade-long career in graphic design to professional photography. It’s a field where I've passionately honed my skills through various freelance projects. My photography spans different subjects, including fashion, commercial photography, and nature, and my work in each of these subjects has been featured in several regional magazines.

Recently, I've completed a few advanced courses in digital photography and lighting techniques. I wanted to make sure I’m on top of my game before making the full switch into photography as a career. I’d say my approach combines my artistic vision with the technical precision that I keep refining. I want to tell powerful stories through each photograph, so I keep learning more each day.

I'm drawn to your magazine’s reputation for excellence in visual storytelling. I want to contribute my photographic skills and creative insights to your team, and I’m excited to capture the impactful moments that define your brand.”

Read a full photographer resume example here.

#59. Actor Sample Answer

“I graduated from the Theatre and Film Academy two years ago, where I trained extensively in theater and film acting. Since then, I've appeared in several local theater productions and short films. I’ve gained some recognition for my versatility and depth in various roles. 

My recent work includes a lead role in an award-winning independent film. I was commended for my ability to bring a complex character to life and I earned praise for the authenticity and emotional impact behind my performance. 

I'm skilled in both dramatic and comedic acting, and I continuously work on refining my craft through workshops and ongoing training. I'm excited about the opportunity to bring my passion and skills to your production and contribute to memorable and compelling performances.”

Read a full actor resume example here.

#60. Writer Sample Answer

“I've been a professional writer for over five years and recently, I’ve specialized in content creation for lifestyle and technology publications. My articles have been featured in major online magazines. I tend to blend informative content with engaging storytelling to capture the interests of different audiences.

A significant project I led was a series on sustainable living practices, which increased readership by 40% and sparked an online community dialogue about eco-friendly habits. 

I'm also proficient in SEO, so I can ensure that my work ranks well on search engines and reaches the intended audience. I'm excited about the opportunity to bring my writing skills and creativity to your team and help to expand your content’s reach and impact.”

Read a full writer resume example here.

#61. Editor Sample Answer

“I recently graduated with a degree in English Literature from Missouri State University. I actually honed my editing and proofreading skills there as the head editor of the university’s newspaper. I oversaw the selection and refinement of pieces that were going to be published, and I collaborated closely with writers to enhance the texts’ clarity, engagement, and maintain adherence to the newspaper’s standards.

I’d say the experience equipped me with a keen eye for detail and I left there with a strong grasp of language and grammar, so I’m prepared me for a professional editing career. I love literature and I’m passionate about making my own contributions to it through editing.

I’m committed to maintaining the integrity and quality of texts, so I’m eager to bring my editorial skills and enthusiasm to your publishing team and contributing to high-quality publications.”

Read a full editor resume example here.

Education Sample Answers

#62. professor sample answer.

“I have over a decade of academic experience as a professor in the field of Environmental Science at a prestigious university. Throughout my career, I've dedicated myself to research and teaching with a focus on sustainable development and climate change mitigation. I've published numerous peer-reviewed articles and have been a keynote speaker at several international conferences.

A highlight of my tenure was developing an interdisciplinary curriculum that integrated practical sustainability challenges into academic study. It has since been adopted by other institutions, too, since it was successful in enhancing student engagement and understanding of the subject.

I'm passionate about educating the next generation of environmental leaders and am excited about the opportunity to join your faculty. It would be a great opportunity to further both my research and fulfill my teaching objectives.”

Read a full academic CV example here.

#63. Teacher Sample Answer

“I've been a teacher for five years, specifically teaching mathematics at the middle school level. My approach focuses on building strong foundational skills and using interactive learning techniques to engage young students and enhance their problem-solving abilities. 

A significant achievement was the introduction of a technology-integrated curriculum that led to a 30% improvement in students' test scores within a year. I actively collaborate with colleagues to share best practices and continually seek out professional development opportunities to stay updated on educational trends.

I am passionate about making math accessible and exciting for all students. I know it isn’t everyone’s favorite subject, but I believe I can improve its reputation among students. I'm eager to bring my innovative teaching methods to your school, and I believe I can contribute to your academic programs and student success.”

Read a full teacher resume example here.

#64. Tutor Sample Answer

“I graduated with a degree in English Literature from Alabama State University last year and have since worked as a private tutor, mainly helping high school students enhance their writing and literary comprehension skills.

My tutoring style emphasizes personalized learning, where I adapt my methods to fit each student's unique needs and learning pace. A notable success of mine was with a student who improved from a C to an A in English within a semester, all thanks to our focused sessions on essay writing and critical analysis. I also incorporate interactive digital tools to make lessons more engaging and effective.

I'm really excited to bring my passion for education and tailored tutoring strategies to more students. Helping them achieve their academic goals and build confidence in their abilities is the best feeling in the world, and I want to pursue a career in that direction.”

#65. Recent Graduate Sample Answer

“My name is Jane Doe; I’m 22 years old, and I recently graduated from University X with a B.A. in international business. While there, I learned a lot of theory in subjects like corporate communication, international economics, corporate governance, and more. I was also part of the student government, and I maintained a GPA of 3.6.

I’ve worked hard in my education, and now I’m ready to put my knowledge into practice.

While I don’t have any real-life work experience, I’ve had a lot of exposure to the business environment. A lot of my courses involved working with real companies to solve real problems.

Now, I’m looking to leverage everything I’ve learned in university and get some hands-on work experience.”

Read a full recent graduate resume example here.

#66. College Student Sample Answer

“I'm currently pursuing a degree in Computer Science at X State University, where I've been actively involved in both academic and extracurricular activities. My coursework rigorously focuses on software development and data structures, but my extracurricular activities also involve computer science. I’m part of the university's coding club, where we organize weekly hackathons and coding challenges, so it’s both fun and practical.

In addition to that, I work part-time at the campus tech support center. I mostly help students and faculty with hardware and software issues when they arise. The job taught me how to communicate complex technical information clearly, so it was a great stepping stone.

Now, I'm eager to apply my academic learning and practical experience in a real-world setting, so this internship looked perfect. I’m hoping to contribute to and learn from innovative projects within your tech team.”

Read a full college freshman resume example here.

#67. College Applicant Sample Answer

“So, my name is John, and I’m a senior at School XYZ. 

This year, I managed to maintain a 3.7 GPA while working on a few different school projects. I started an ‘Ernest Hemingway Book Club’ which has up to 15 active members as of now. And I also launched a recycling program for the campus, through which we raised awareness and invited an outside guest lecturer to speak about the subject.

I tend to be teamwork-oriented and reliable, as I’ve never missed a deadline. I’m also proud of my ability to preserve and overcome any challenges that come up. For example, last year, I was having some trouble with trigonometry. I realized I needed to dedicate more time to the subject, so I met with a teacher outside the class and set aside two extra hours per day for the subject. Eventually, I ended up with an A in the subject.

At University X, I’m planning to either major in English or Journalism. I love reading and writing, so I think both programs are going to be interesting and relevant to my interests.”

Read a full college application resume example here.

#68. High School Student Sample Answer

“I am a junior at XYZ High School, and I’m pretty active in both my studies and extracurricular activities. My best subjects are Biology and English, but I’m also part of our school's debate team. I think that taught me valuable skills in public speaking and critical thinking.

I'm currently looking for a part-time job to gain practical experience and learn new skills outside of an academic environment. I like meeting new people, I’m a good driver, and I have a great sense of direction, so I think the delivery driver job is perfect for me. I have  a proactive attitude I can bring to your team, so I’m confident I’ll fit right in.”

Read a full high school resume example here.

Other Sample Answers

#69. architect sample answer.

“I have over a decade of experience as an architect, specializing in sustainable urban development. My work has included designing eco-friendly residential complexes and commercial spaces that prioritize energy efficiency and environmental impact.

A standout project was a mixed-use development that received a LEED Gold certification and significantly reduced its carbon footprint. I'm skilled in using advanced design software like AutoCAD and Revit, which helps me create detailed and precise architectural plans. I also collaborate closely with engineers and environmental consultants to make sure that all our sustainability goals are met.

I'm excited about the opportunity to bring my expertise in green architecture to your firm since you share my commitment to sustainability. Your innovative projects seem like just the thing where I can put my skills to good use.”

Read a full architect resume example here.

#70. Electrical Engineer Resume Sample Answer

“I recently graduated with a degree in Electrical Engineering from New Hampshire State University. I focused on power systems and renewable energy solutions during my studies. Then, during my final year, I led a project team to develop a solar-powered charging station that won the university's innovation award. The project honed my technical skills and considerably deepened my understanding of sustainable energy technologies.

I've also interned at GreenTech Solutions, where I helped with the design and implementation of energy-efficient systems. That really solidified my interest in practical applications of renewable energy, and it gave me some much needed hands-on experience.

Now, I’m ready and eager to apply my academic knowledge and internship experience in a real-world setting. Especially in a place like your company - you’re really well known for your sustainability initiatives and how you value innovation, so I was really excited when I saw your ad.”

Read a full electrical engineer resume example here.

#71. Interior Designer Sample Answer

“I graduated with a degree in Interior Design from a Creative Arts College two years ago, and I’ve been working with a renowned design firm since. I've mostly focused on residential projects, transforming clients' visions into functional and aesthetically pleasing living spaces.

My approach combines contemporary design principles with the clients' personal styles, so I make sure that each project is unique and reflective of their needs. One of my key projects was a complete renovation of a historic home, which was featured in a regional design magazine. I'm also proficient in 3D modeling software such as SketchUp and AutoCAD, which helps in presenting realistic and detailed visuals to clients.

I'm really excited about the opportunity to bring my creative vision and technical expertise to your firm. I’ve seen your portfolio, and you clearly value innovative and personalized designs, and that’s exactly the direction I want to take my career in.”

Read a full interior designer resume example here.

#72. Construction Project Manager Sample Answer

“I have been a Construction Project Manager for over five years. I mostly do commercial building projects. My experience includes overseeing the construction of high-rise office buildings and retail complexes, and I always make sure our projects are completed on time, within budget, and to high quality standards.

A notable achievement of mine was when I managed the development of a downtown office tower, which came in 10% under budget and was completed two weeks ahead of schedule. I'm adept at negotiating with contractors, managing supply chains, and adhering to strict safety regulations.

Now, I’m looking for a new challenge. I'm eager to bring my expertise in project management, budget optimization, and team leadership to your company since you have a reputation for excellence in construction. I’m looking forward to contributing to your future projects.”

Read a full construction project manager resume example here.

#73. Operations Manager Sample Answer

“I have five years of experience as an Operations Manager in the logistics sector, where I've successfully streamlined operations to enhance efficiency and reduce costs. My role involved overseeing warehouse operations, transportation, and supply chain management for a leading distribution company.

A key accomplishment was when I implemented an automated inventory system that reduced processing times by 25% and cut logistics costs by 15%. I also led a team that improved delivery accuracy, and customer satisfaction ratings rose significantly.

I recently moved here, so I started looking for a job in the same field, and I was excited when I saw your ad. I think I can really contribute my expertise in operational efficiency and process optimization to your organization.”

Read a full operations manager resume example here.

#74. Event Planner Sample Answer

“I recently graduated with a degree in Hospitality Management from Providence City College, where I discovered my passion for event planning. During my studies, I organized several university events, including panel discussions and seasonal balls, so I honed my skills in project management, vendor coordination, and budgeting.

I had an internship at a prominent event planning company, which put me on the right path. I solidified those skills I gained, and the internship had me assist in organizing large-scale corporate events and weddings. I had to make sure every detail met client expectations, and I learned all about working under pressure.

I am passionate about creating memorable experiences for my clients, and I thrive in dynamic, fast-paced environments. I am eager to bring my skills and fresh ideas to your team, so we can exceed client expectations together.”

Read a full event planner resume example here.

#75. Warehouse Worker Sample Answer

“I actually come from a retail background - spent the last 5 years running the stockroom operations at a couple of big box stores. Day-to-day, I was responsible for receiving shipments, managing inventory counts using handheld scanners, and ensuring the backroom was organized and properly stocked.

It was fast-paced work, having to process tons of products each day and quickly get them out on the sales floor. I got really good at staying on top of inventory levels and lazy-loading pallets efficiently. Safety was also a big priority to prevent any warehouse accidents or damages.

Dealing with high-volume inventory in that stockroom environment is what sparked my interest in the warehouse position you’re hiring for. I’m looking for something new, and I already have this knack for keeping things organized and moving products accurately. I've built up stamina and don't mind the physical side of the job either.”

Read a full warehouse worker resume example here.

#76. Welder Sample Answer

“I completed a welding certification at Technical Institute two years ago and have been working in the field since, gaining hands-on experience in MIG, TIG, and stick welding techniques. I've been involved in a range of projects at my current job in a construction firm.

Anything ranging from small custom fabrications to large structural builds are within my expertise, so I’ve been honing my precision and skills under different conditions for a while now. I've also taken a few additional courses in metallurgy and safety protocols to enhance my knowledge and make sure I’m compliant with industry standards. 

Now that I’m looking for a new job, I'm excited about the opportunity to bring my expertise to your team. Your company's stands out with quality craftsmanship and a dedication to safety that’s non-negotiable in this job, so I feel like I would be a good fit.”

Read a full welder resume example here.

#77. Real Estate Agent Sample Answer

“I have been a licensed real estate agent for over five years. I’m mostly familiar with residential properties in the urban market. My experience includes both buying and selling homes, and I've consistently exceeded sales targets through strategic marketing and personalized client service.

A highlight of my career was orchestrating a complex sale that involved several properties. I managed it through careful coordination and negotiation, and the result was a significant profit for my clients.

I'm well-versed in the latest real estate know-how and market analysis tools, so that lets me provide clients with insightful advice and great service. I'm excited to bring my expertise and client-focused approach to your firm, since I’m sure I can contribute to your continued growth.”

Read a full real estate agent resume example here.

#78. Flight Attendant Sample Answer

“I completed my certification in Airline Cabin Crew Training last year and started working for a regional budget airline. I had the opportunity to hone the skills I need to ensure passenger safety and comfort.

My previous job involved everything from conducting safety briefings to providing personalized customer service and handling any in-flight emergencies. During my time there, we made improvements in our onboard service, which enhanced passenger satisfaction, so our airline started booking 15% more flights than the previous year.

I decided I was ready for a new challenge, so when I saw your ad, I decided to apply. I thrive in dynamic environments, and I’m great at maintaining a calm, professional demeanor even under pressure. I think my dedication and skills can let me contribute to a prestigious international airline like yours, and that’s a great next step for my career in aviation.”

Read a full flight attendant resume example here.

#79. Paralegal Sample Answer

“I'm a recent graduate with a Bachelor's degree in Legal Studies and a Paralegal Certificate. I gained exposure to legal research throughout my coursework, which includes writing briefs and document management.

Last summer, I had the opportunity to intern at a corporate law firm, where I assisted attorneys with case preparation and filing. That hands-on experience solidified my understanding of paralegal duties and made me familiar with legal software and databases.

I really enjoyed the fast-paced environment and being able to collaborate with legal teams to build strong cases. I'm also an organized multi-tasker with a keen eye for detail, which makes it easier for me to juggle deadlines and volumes of documentation.

I can confidently say that I thrive in high-pressure environments that require problem-solving skills. With my enthusiasm to take on new challenges and my commitment to learning quickly, I'm confident I can provide you with valuable paralegal support from day one.”

Read a full paralegal resume example here.

#80. Social Worker Sample Answer

“I'm switching from a career in education to social work, and bringing over seven years of experience as a school counselor with me. My role involved supporting students with diverse needs, developing intervention strategies, and collaborating with parents and teachers to increase student’s welfare.

Recently, I completed a Master's degree in Social Work to get started in the field. I noticed how often my work as a student counselor was just problems that were stemming from outside the school, so I wanted to find the root cause. The degree helped me really deepen my understanding of systemic issues and learn different therapeutic techniques.

My focus was always on child and family welfare, and I had the opportunity to do an internship with some fieldwork recently at a local social services agency. Now, I’m ready for the next step in my career, and when I saw your ad, I knew I had to apply.

I'm drawn to your organization's commitment to community empowerment and mental health. I really want to apply my counseling skills and social work training in a new setting so I can advocate for individuals and families facing different challenges.”

Read a full social worker resume example here.

Key Takeaways

And that’s the end of our guide!

By now, we’re sure you’re ready to confidently talk about yourself during your next job interview.

But before you go, let’s recap the most important points we mentioned in this article:

• This question is a favorite during job interviews since it breaks the ice and lets the interviewer see how well you can think on your feet.
• Make sure you keep your answer relevant and brief - you want to be talking for one to two minutes, tops. No one wants to hear your whole life story.
• Always structure your answer in a way that makes sense. Stick to the past-present-future format, and you should be good.
• Your top achievements and relevant work experience should make up the majority of your answer, but if you’re a recent graduate, you can focus more on academic know-how.

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Interview Questions

Comprehensive Interview Guide: 60+ Professions Explored in Detail

8 Examples of How to Answer “Tell Me About Yourself”

By Biron Clark

Published: November 16, 2023

In this article, I’m going to walk you through steps and examples of how to answer the “Tell me about yourself” interview question to impress employers and get more job offers . We’ll also cover the  costly mistakes you NEED to avoid if you want to pass this question. 

Here’s exactly what you’re going to get:

• The most-recommended method of how to answer “tell me about yourself”
• 8 examples of good answers to “tell me about yourself” for various industries
• A shorter, newer method for experienced candidates
• How to practice your answer to make sure you’re 100% ready for the interview

Let’s get started…

Why Do Interviewers Ask “Tell Me About Yourself”

“Can you tell me about yourself ?” is a common interview question that’s generally delivered as an icebreaker or pathfinder question, right at the start of an interview. It can catch you off your guard because it may seem vague, broad, and somewhat tricky. Honestly though, understanding a bit more about why interviewers ask this question (which is often framed as a command) will give you a clear insight into how to answer.

Interviewers ask this question to ease you out of those introductory jitters (that you both feel) and into the nitty-gritty of why you’re there. It’s their way of establishing a direction for the interview because it shows them how you summarize your experience and show its relevance to the job you’re applying for, which in turn tells them what to ask next. Trust me though, your answer needs to be relevant, the interviewer is likely not asking whether you’re a dog or a cat person but rather what background, skills, qualifications and experiences brought you to this interview today. 

Watch: How to Answer “Tell Me About Yourself?”

Different ways of asking the same question.

I mentioned how this question can sometimes be framed as a command, i.e: “tell me about yourself,” and so on. There are numerous ways this question might be framed, but all express the same intention on the part of the interviewer, so they should all be answered the same way. Common variants include:

• “Take me through your resume.”
• “Tell me about your background”
• “Describe yourself.”
•   “Can you tell me more about why you’re here?”
• “What brings you here today?”

When it comes to describing yourself, you may wonder where to start, how personal to be, and how far to get into it. “Describe yourself” certainly feels a little more personal than the rest. For insight into how to answer that variant, Read This Article .

How to Answer “Tell Me About Yourself” in an Interview:

1. choose the right starting point for your story (important).

Your goal when answering, “tell me about yourself,” is to give a brief, concise walkthrough of your career story that will show off relevant pieces of experience. You want to start at a point in the past (like how you began working in this field), and end up in your current situation. So the first thing to decide is where you’ll begin the story… If you’re a recent graduate: Start with the fact that you just graduated, and explain why you chose this career path or field of area of study.  

For example, you might start your answer like this:

“I graduated with my degree in Economics two months ago. I chose that field of study because I’ve always been interested in finance and money, and a couple of family members told me it leads to great career options, too.”

If you have 1-8 years of experience, start with the moment you graduated and walk them through your employment experience since then.

Here’s an example of how you’d start your interview answer in this situation:

“I graduated with my degree in Industrial Engineering six years ago and immediately went to work for a small design firm in Chicago. Since then, I’ve…”

And if you have 8-20+ years of experience, you can start with a mid-point in your career. This will keep your answer from getting too long.

For example, if you’re a manager, you could start with how you first became a manager. If you’ve been working for 25 years but have only been a sales professional for 12 years, you could begin with how you got started in sales.

Here is an example of how to begin your answer to “tell me about yourself” as a very experienced candidate:

“I first started managing people twelve years ago, when I was promoted from Customer Service Associate to Customer Service Supervisor. Since then, I’ve…”

2. Highlight Impressive Experience and Accomplishments

As you tell your career story, explain key accomplishments you’ve achieved, work you’ve done, skills you’ve learned, and key career moves you’ve made.

• Were you promoted? That’s always a great sign and worth mentioning.
• Did you accomplish something significant like solving a big problem for your last employer?  That’s great to mention, too.
• Did you build new skills or overcome challenges? Get specific! Tell details.

But random impressive facts aren’t enough. You should be thinking about how this ties in with the company you’re talking to.

• You should always research the company before going into the interview . Study their job description in particular so you know what skills THEY care most about.
• What does this particular job involve? Is there a lot of leadership? Talk about your experiences leading (no matter how small!), how it went, and what you learned.
• Does the job involve a high level of technical skill? Talk about how you learned and advanced in that area through each step of your career!
• You need to “tailor” your answer for, “tell me about yourself,” for their job description and their needs. Try to talk about experiences and qualifications that are relevant to this job you’ve applied for.

3. Conclude by Explaining Your Current Situation

Finally, the best way to finish your story is to bring them up to speed on your current situation. Why you wanted to apply for their job , what you’re looking to do next, etc.

For example you might end your answer by saying:

“…and that’s why I wanted to interview with your firm. This position seems like a great opportunity to advance those skills I just talked about, and continue building my career and challenging myself”.

4. Keep Your Answer Work-Related

When employers ask, “tell me about yourself,” in an interview, they usually want to hear about you as a professional. So the safest approach is to keep your answer work-related and share your career story, rather than personal details. You can show more personality as the interview goes on, but it’s risky to share too much personal info when answering, “tell me about yourself.” It could lead to your answer getting too long, or it could cause you to leave out important professional information that the interviewer was looking to know!

5. Be Concise When Answering (2 Minutes or Less!)

When they say “tell me about yourself,” it’s going to be tempting to give a long-winded answer. It’s such an open-ended question. And we covered a lot above, but there’s something just as important as any of that. You need to be concise.  Your communication and ability to stay on track with your answer are two things they are watching closely. The interviewer wants to see that you can tell your story from Point A (the beginning) to Point B (the end) without getting sidetracked, distracted, or scattered. Because it tells them how you’ll communicate as an employee… when there’s a problem, when there’s a disagreement, or when you simply need to share your knowledge or opinion. If you take this answer beyond 2 minutes you are shooting yourself in the foot. In fact, below 90 seconds is ideal. Practice at home with a timer! That’s why I recommend choosing a starting point based on your experience (Step 1 above)… because if you have 25 years of experience and you start at the moment you graduated from college, your answer will be too long.

“Tell Me About Yourself” Example Answers:

Now that we’ve covered the key steps to answering, “tell me about yourself,” let’s look at some full answer examples to this interview question .

Example Answer for Experienced Candidates:

“I graduated with a Business degree in 2010, and was offered an account management position at a telecommunications company I had interned with. I loved working with customers and managing and growing my accounts, but the industry we were in just wasn’t very appealing to me. After that, I stayed a full year and learned a ton about how to build and manage accounts successfully and  I ended up becoming a top performer in my group before leaving. I left at the 1-year-mark to pursue a very similar position within an industry I’m much more excited about- healthcare. I’ve been at this healthcare startup space for 2 years with this company and I feel ready to take my career to the next level so that’s why I’m currently looking for a new opportunity.”

That first example showed you how to answer “tell me about yourself” for experienced job seekers (at least a few years of experience). Now let’s look at an example for entry-level job seekers and job seekers with no experience .

Example Answer With No Experience:

“I graduated with a degree in Engineering two months ago. I chose that field of study because I’ve always been interested in math and physics , and a couple of family members told me it leads to great career options. One of my key accomplishments during my academic career was speaking at a conference on the topic of energy-efficient window design, based on research I had done for one of my senior-level classes. This led to an internship that I just wrapped up, so I’m actively looking for a full-time position now.”

Stand Out by “Tailoring” Your Answer to the Company

The end of your interview answer is a big opportunity to customize your answer for the company and job you’re interviewing for. When you talk about what you’re looking to do next in your career, try to mention whatever you see this company providing for your career (leadership, technical challenges, exposure to new areas, etc.) That shows them why you’re excited about their job, which will help you get hired! (I explain more about why this is true here ). Before we move on to more tips and a HUGE mistake to avoid, here’s one more example interview answer for this question.

Shorter Method for How to Answer “Tell Me About Yourself” (For Experienced Candidates Only)

The method I gave you above is the standard way most recruiters recommend answering “tell me about yourself.”  It’s how I coached job seekers to answer this question for years. There’s another way you can answer, though… and it has some benefits. I’ll explain…Many experts have pointed out that if the interviewer wanted your career story, they could have looked at your resume or your LinkedIn , or asked a question like, “can you walk me through your background?” So there’s another approach for answering, “tell me about yourself,” that skips the career story and just cuts right to the chase: Why you’re awesome and why they should hire you !

Let’s look at 2 word-for-word templates that accomplish this.

After this, you’ll have two proven methods for answering, “tell me about yourself” in interviews, and in the next section, I’ll reveal how to decide which method is best for YOU.

Example answer if you’re job searching while employed:

“Well, I’m currently working at XYZ Company and I specialize in doing ___. The reason I applied for this job is I saw ___ on the job description and I think I would be able to help you ___ and ___. One of my key accomplishments in my current role was helping my employer do ___, and I’m confident I can help your team get similar results here.”

Example answer template if unemployed:

“In my most recent position at XYZ Company, I specialized in doing ___. The reason I applied for this job is I saw ___ on the job description and I think I would be able to help you ___ and ___. One of my key accomplishments in my last role for XYZ Company was helping them  ___, and I’m confident I can help your team get similar results here.”

Which Method Should You Use for Your Answer?

If you have work experience, both options we’ve covered are very good, and it really depends on what you feel most comfortable with. Choose the one you like best. They’re both excellent ways to answer the question, so don’t stress over it! However, if you are entry-level and have no work experience… or internships at the very least…  then I would go back to the top of this article and use the first, 5-step method for answering, “tell me about yourself.”

This second method we just covered is really best if you want to give a unique, concise answer and you have some relevant work experience to share in the interview!

“Tell Me About Yourself” Example Answers For Different Industries:

Healthcare:.

“After being licensed six years ago, I immediately entered a busy E.R. setting where I progressed to the point of triaging as many as 50 patients a shift. I’m skilled in patient record-keeping, stabilizing incoming patients, diagnosing injuries, administering meds, doing stitches, starting I.V.s, setting bones and offering emotional support to family members behind the scenes. I’ve adapted to the pressure but feel that, in the long term, I’d be better suited to a slower-paced environment with more focus on establishing lasting patient relationships. I’m ready to take on this post in your busy day clinic and believe that my advanced patient triage skills, along with my empathic nature, would be a great benefit to your team.”

This works because:   This answer outlines your qualifications and extensive background in incoming patient care, triage, diagnosing and record-keeping. Your honesty about long term goals is appreciated. The answer shows how your skills have progressed since you were licensed, and it inspires confidence in your ability to handle a hands-on post at a busy clinic.

Service Industry:

“Having spent eight years in the food and beverage industry, I progressed from head waiter to front of house manager four years ago. I’ve held so many posts in the industry, from runner to waiter to head waiter to manager, but my dedication to quality service has never changed. I believe in knowing my product and process inside and out, uplifting my team members and demonstrating focused positivity throughout. It’s easy to fall into the temper trap when things get busy, but I prefer to knuckle down, smile and get it done. I want my customers to come back for more!”

This works because: This answer makes an impact because of how your personality shines through. The service industry is incredibly stressful, but it’s refreshing to know that you have a proactive, positive attitude to stressful situations, backed up with strong product knowledge and professionalism.

“I’m an accredited software engineer and systems integrator with more than ten years of active development experience. I’m proficient in Ruby, Python, Java, C++ and a wide range of associated languages and frameworks. I’m a team player, and I love bouncing ideas off my colleagues and engaging with diverse perspectives. I like to stay abreast of the latest tech and I’m wildly competitive when it comes to troubleshooting. I’ve also got an eye for detail and clean design and I’m dedicated to delivering a seamless, streamlined experience to the end-user.”

This works because: From this answer, it’s clear that you’re accredited and boast a diversified programming portfolio with plenty of experience in the field. It’s noted that you’re a team player, as teamwork is essential when developing and managing systems for a busy tech enterprise. And your attitude to problem solving , as being competitive will help you find fast and effective solutions.

“I’ve been a retail cosmetic artist and sales assistant for six years and I’m passionate about making clients feel utterly gorgeous! I have a strong knowledge of retail processes, including stock-take, merchandising and sales targeting. If I have to describe my stand-out quality it’s that I love to build up the team, make my colleagues smile and get them motivated to break targets for our department. Above all though, the customer comes first and I’m dedicated to building brand and store loyalty in the customer.”

  This works because: From this answer, it’s obvious you know retail like the back of your hand and that you take pride in breaking targets and boosting the team morale. Your positivity shines through, and you highlight your passion for making clients feel special.

Practice Your Answer Before the Interview

As a final tip – make sure you go practice everything you plan on saying when the interviewer asks, “what can you tell me about yourself?” Nothing comes out perfect the first time, and you don’t want to appear nervous and stumble when they ask.  So I’d recommend grabbing a piece of paper and writing down the key points you want to talk about in your answer. I like to write them in bullet format. Then, use your smartphone’s voice recorder app to record a few practice answers and see how you sound. Don’t look at your notes as you give your answer. The idea is to try to remember what you want to talk about without reading off the paper. Then glance at the paper AFTER to make sure you covered everything. Keep practicing until you can give a smooth answer without forgetting anything important.

Note: If you’re having a phone interview , you can use notes/bullet points to help guide you through your answer. Nobody can see you on the phone, so take advantage!

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A guide to writing the best personal statement for your college application (with template and examples!)

Why is boasting about a best friend SO much easier than writing about yourself? Unfortunately, writing about yourself is exactly what a personal statement essay requires you to do–whether it’s for your college admissions application, or for a scholarship application to pay for college . Here’s our guide, to ensure you’re well-equipped to write a killer personal statement!

First off, what’s the purpose of a personal statement?

What topics can i write about, how do i decide what to focus on, in my college essay, okay, i’ve got my personal statement topic. but now i have to actually write it. 😱what do i do .

• Do you have personal statement examples? 

Now it’s your turn.

Your personal statement should share something about who you are, something that can’t be found in your resume or transcript.

For colleges:

• It should paint a picture for colleges to understand who we are and what we bring to the table. This is why it’s often better to tell a story, or give examples, rather than just list accomplishments.
• It should complement the other parts of your application. Consider your college application as a whole. Your personal statement, application short answers, and supporting documentation should together tell a story about who you are. This also means not being super repetitive with your personal statement and your short essays. (For instance, if you have to answer 3 questions AND submit a personal statement, maybe they shouldn’t ALL focus on music.)

For scholarship applications:

• It should indicate why you’re deserving of the scholarship. This often means making sure your essay relates to the scholarship provider’s goals. (Get more help on writing a killer scholarship essay here , and then make sure you’re applying as efficiently as possible. )
• It should showcase your strengths. This doesn’t mean it can’t acknowledge any weaknesses, but it surely shouldn’t only focus on negative aspects!

It can be overwhelming to figure out where to start. First, figure out what your choices are. Some colleges may have very specific college essay prompts. That said, many students apply using the Common App, which this year offers these 7 topics to choose from : 

• Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.
• The lessons we take from obstacles we encounter can be fundamental to later success. Recount a time when you faced a challenge, setback, or failure. How did it affect you, and what did you learn from the experience? ( Psst – If you choose this topic, you can sign up for Going Merry and apply for a scholarship bundle : one essay, multiple scholarships! )
• Reflect on a time when you questioned or challenged a belief or idea. What prompted your thinking? What was the outcome?
• Describe a problem you’ve solved or a problem you’d like to solve. It can be an intellectual challenge, a research query, an ethical dilemma – anything that is of personal importance, no matter the scale. Explain its significance to you and what steps you took or could be taken to identify a solution.
• Discuss an accomplishment, event, or realization that sparked a period of personal growth and a new understanding of yourself or others.
• Describe a topic, idea, or concept you find so engaging that it makes you lose all track of time. Why does it captivate you? What or who do you turn to when you want to learn more?
• Share an essay on any topic of your choice. It can be one you’ve already written, one that responds to a different prompt, or one of your own design.

You’ll notice that #7 is a catch-all that allows you to submit any personal statement about anything at all . 

So maybe that doesn’t help you narrow it down. 

Here’s a 3-step solution:

STEP 1. Brainstorm about your life

Dedicate 5-10 minutes each to brainstorming about these 4 sets of questions.

You can do this by yourself (writing down your thoughts), or do this exercise out loud with a friend or family member, and then jot down notes as you’re talking. If you “think out loud” better than you do on paper, brainstorming with someone else may be the way to go! 

(A) What were defining moments in your life?

How did these moments in your life changed you, what did you learn from it, and how has it shaped your future plans? Some topics might include:

• An accident or injury
• A best friend you made (or lost)
• A defining talk with a peer
• Something new you tried for the first time
• Revealing a sexual or gender identity, to friends or family
• Discovering something about your family ( e.g., see Jesus’s story )
• Moving to a new city
• Traveling somewhere, or learning about a new culture ( e.g., see Gabby’s story )
• Your first pet (new responsibilities as a fur mom or dad)

(B) What have you chosen to spend time on?

Remember to focus not just on the what , but also the why – What were your motivations? How did you feel? What have you learned? Some topics on this might include: 

• The moment you joined band, color guard, or the soccer team. 
• A time you struggled with that activity – e.g., Maybe you got passed over for captain of the soccer? Or maybe you got an injury and had to sit out on the sidelines? 
• Maybe a moment you really fell in love with that activity – e.g. Maybe the first time you investigated a story for the school newspaper and realized journalism was your calling?

(C) Whom or what are you inspired by?

How did you find out about this person or thing? Why are you inspired? In what ways are you inspired? Is there anything that inspiration has made you do (e.g. join a club, do an activity or internship on the topic)? Some topics on this might include: 

• Technology – Maybe a specific App made you inspired to learn to code? 
• Person in your life – Maybe meeting someone (or knowing someone in your family) has affected you? 
• A show, movie, book, or podcast that inspired you to look at life differently
• A dance or song that has made you interested in performing arts

(D) What are you proud of?

Make a list of all the things you’re proud of. These can be milestones, hobbies, qualities, or quirks that are what make you, you. Topics to consider might be:

• Times you saved the day – like that epic left-handed catch you made on the field
• Personal qualities – Maybe you’re really funny, or amazingly calm under pressure. What are some examples of times when you showed those qualities?
• Random life things you’re amazing at – Baking a mean chocolate brownie. Guessing how many gumballs are in a jar. Tell a story when that amazing talent was handy!

Don’t worry if some of your ideas repeat between sections. This is just a way to get ideas flowing! 

STEP 2. Shortlist your ideas

Identify your strongest ideas out of the bunch. This should probably be very few (2-4).

STEP 3. Freewrite about your possible essay topics.

Once you’ve brainstormed some ideas and identified 2-4 winners, we agree with Find the Right College – just start freewriting! Start by writing a few sentences or paragraphs about any of your shortlisted topics, and let the words flow. Write for about 15 minutes, on each shortlisted topic. Don’t worry about structure or organization – this is just an exercise so you feel comfortable getting the thoughts out of your head and onto paper. 

It will also allow you to see which of the topics seems to have the most “legs” — often, you’ll notice that your best topic will:

• Be the easiest to write about (those 15 minutes flew by!)
• Lead you to tell at least one interesting story
• Feel like it genuinely reveals something important about who you are
• Not be captured easily by other parts of your application (you’ll need a full 500 words to really be able to tackle this meaty topic)

Well, let’s start here: What makes a personal statement good or even great ?

Here are some things to keep in mind: 

1. Get personal.

Remember the “personal” in personal statement. We all have a story to tell, and we all have a different journey that led us to where we are today. We might think “someone already wrote about this” or we might think our story isn’t unique, but IT IS.

2. Speak like you.

Write your personal statement in a genuine tone that reflects who you are . There’s no right or wrong tone – just make sure your tone represents YOU. This means, in particular, not using big words just to show off. Often, this just seems like you’re trying to hard. (Or, even worse, you accidentally use the word incorrectly!)

3. Think about your audience.

Who will you be writing your personal statement for? What message do you want to convey? If it’s for to the college admissions committee, how do you show you’ll align well with the culture of the school? If it’s for a scholarship provider, how do you show you support their mission?

4. Hit the big three: Story, Implication, Connection to college/major.

Most successful college essays do at least 3 things: 

• Mention at least one anecdote or story. (“Show, don’t tell.”)
• Explain why that anecdote or story is important to who you are.
• End (or begin) by connecting this information, to why you are applying to this specific college. This may include information about the major (why you think their department/program is great), or more general information about what attracts you to the school (e.g., location, sports, extracurricular activities, Greek life). Get specific so the school knows you’re really interested in them! This is the one piece of your personal statement that probably shouldn’t be cut & paste.

Here’s an example of how to use that personal essay template:

• Story: When I was 11, my family traveled to Italy and visited museums — one specific painting made me fall in love with art. ( 1-2 paragraphs )
• Why important: After that trip, I did lots of art and studied lots of art. Mention specific extracurriculars. ( 3 paragraphs )
• Why this college: I want to apply to X college because of its excellent art program, which I can also complement by joining Y and Z clubs. Since it’s in New York, it’ll also offer my the opportunity to visit the countless art museums like MOMA. ( 1 paragraph )

5. Hit the length.

Make sure you keep within the required length. Normally if you aim for 500 words, you’re golden. Some college or scholarship applications will allow you to write up to 600 or 650 words.

6. Edit your work.

Once you’ve written your personal statement, step away from it. There was a time when we used to rely on pencil and paper to write down all of our ideas and information (including first-draft college essays). Now, we mainly rely on screens, so our eyes grow tired, causing us to miss typos and grammar mistakes.

So save that document in an easy-to-find folder on your computer. Then stepping away from your computer and taking a break helps relax your mind and body and then refocus when you come back to edit the document.

( Psst – If you’re applying for scholarships with Going Merry, we’ve got built-in spellcheck, and we allow you to save essays in your documents folder, so no work will get lost! )

We can’t stress this one enough: Don’t submit your personal statement without checking your spelling, grammar, punctuation, sentence structure, etc.! All the grammar things! Your personal statement reflects who you are, from the topic you choose to the style you write it in, so impress colleges (or scholarship providers) with excellent structure and great grammar!

7. Then, ask someone else to edit it too.

We recommend asking a friend, counselor, or parent to read your personal statement before you submit the document. One more set of eyes will really help you get a second opinion on the tone, writing quality, and overall representation of who you are in your personal statement.

8. Be brave, and hit that “submit” button on your personal statement!

Finally, when everything is completed, click submit! Don’t hold back!

9. Remember, personal statements for your college app, can also be reused as scholarship essays.

Get double-use out of your personal statement. Going Merry is your home for all things scholarships–fill out a profile, get matched to eligible scholarships, and apply. You can even save essays so that you can easily upload the same one for multiple scholarship applications. (We were inspired by the Common App to make applying for scholarships easier.)

Register for an account here , get the full lowdown on how it works , or just sign up for the newsletter below (to get 20 scholarship opportunities delivered to our inbox each each week!).

Do you have personal statement examples ? 

Oh yes we do. First, here are some excerpts of personal statements from members of our very own Going Merry team!

Charlie Maynard, Going Merry CEO – wrote about what matters most to him and why, for his grad school application.

• The open paragraph read: “Being open to new ideas and able to take advantage of opportunities is what is most important to me. The most extraordinary times in my life have come as a result of moments when I’ve seized opportunities. This has been evident in my educational life, my travels around the world and my professional career.”
• This anchored the main topic of his essay. He then went on to explain examples.

Charlotte Lau, Going Merry Head of Growth – wrote for her college Common App personal statement:

“As a child, I was never close with my father, though we were always on good terms. He made me laugh and taught me all the things that made me into a young tomboy: what an RBI is, how to correctly hook a fish when I feel it biting, what to bring on a camping trip. But whenever I was upset, he wouldn’t know how to comfort me. He is a man of jokes and words, not of comforting motions.

But as I grew older and I too became infatuated with words—albeit in written form—our topics of conversation became more diverse and often more profound. We continued to watch sports games together, but during commercials, we’d have epistemological and ethical discussions more fitting for a philosophy class than a chat during a Knicks’ time-out. During these talks, my father would insert stories about his youth. They’d always be transitory or anecdotal, told as if they were beside the point. Still, I’d eagerly commit them to memory, and, over time, I began to get a sense of who my father was—and, in turn, who I am.”

Now, here are some excerpts from other sample personal statements:

These 3 are college essays about personal characteristics:

Essay 1: Humorous essay about getting a D and learning a lesson

“Getting a D probably isn’t the worst thing in the world, but it’s not something anyone wants to see, let alone put, on a college application. It came back to me, scrawled in red, on the first big history test of the year. The one the teacher had assured us was a third of our grade. I could already see my chances of a four-year college going up in smoke and my school year hadn’t even started yet.

What happened? I’m not a D student. I’ll get the occasional C as well as the occasional A. D’s are out of character for me, and enough of a stomach punch to really get my attention. The short version is, I didn’t study, and I don’t remember precisely why. There is always a reason not to study, isn’t there? I didn’t study and I went into a test woefully unprepared and got beaten up.

I had two options here. I could accept that I was in fact a D student despite what I had thought. Or I could study hard for the next test and try to bring my grade up by the force of the average.”

Essay 2: Why a talent (in this case, one at football) is also a responsibility

“Talent is not remarkable. It’s usually the first thing anyone compliments. “You’re so talented.” It doesn’t mean what they think it means. It doesn’t mean I worked hard. It means I was lucky, or blessed, or anything else you want to call it.

I have talent. I’ve known since I was old enough to hold a football. The game just makes intuitive sense to me. The pathways of the players, both my team and the others, where the ball has to go, and what I’m doing. In the silence before a snap, I’m already playing out what is going to happen, watching the holes in my lines, tracing the route of my receivers. […]

It is far too easy to view talent as an excuse. For me, it is a motivator. For my talent, I will accept nothing less than a dream that only a tiny percentage of people ever get to experience. To get there, I’m willing to work hard and wring every last accomplishment from myself.

Talent is a responsibility. Because you had nothing to do with acquiring it, you are compelled to achieve every last bit you can with it. While I had grown used to thinking varsity would be it, that was not the case. Now, I can focus on the goal while I accomplish the steps.”

Essay 3: On living with depression

“Before I was diagnosed, I had been told it was a normal part of growing up. I was told that teens are moody. I would grow out of it. I couldn’t imagine anyone growing out of what I was feeling. I couldn’t imagine anyone surviving.

Diagnosis and medication have saved my life, allowing me to see the world as people without my brain chemistry would. […] what I found was a place of tiny kindnesses.

It might sound bad—as though kindness can only exist in the smallest forms. This is not what I mean. There are extraordinary people out there who devote their lives to doing very large, very important things for others. I’m not talking about them, partially because they are extraordinary. They are not the norm.

What is normal are the tiny kindnesses. These do not cost a person much of anything. A slice of time, a moment of openness, and little else. They are a smile when you’re feeling down, a comforting hand on the shoulder, a moment to talk.”

And here are 3 college personal statements, about what drove their interest in their intended major: 

Essay 4: On why this applicant wants to study music

“My great-great-uncle Giacomo Ferrari was born in 1912 in Neverland, NY, the youngest of four sons. His parents had emigrated from Italy with his two eldest brothers in the early 1900s in search of a better life in America. Their struggles as immigrants are in themselves inspiring, but the challenges they faced are undoubtedly similar to those that many other immigrant families had to overcome; because of this, the actions that my relatives embarked upon are that much more extraordinary. Giacomo’s oldest brother Antonio, my great-grandfather, decided to take a correspondence course in violin, and to teach his youngest brother Giacomo how to play as well. Giacomo Ferrari eventually became an accomplished violinist and started a free “Lunchtime Strings” program for all the elementary schools in the Neverland area, giving free violin lessons and monthly concerts.

As a native English speaker who has had the privilege of studying viola and violin with trained, private teachers, I can only imagine the perseverance it took for my great-grandfather and great-great uncle to learn an instrument like the violin out of booklets and lessons that were not even written in their native language. Their passion and dedication to learning something new, something not part of their lives as blue-collar, immigrant workers, and their desire to share it with others, has inspired me as a musician and a person. It is this spirit that has motivated me to pursue an MA at Composition at the University of XXX.”

Essay 5: On why this applicant wants to be an allergy specialist

“Suddenly I started scratching my neck, feeling the hives that had started to form. I rushed to the restroom to throw up because my throat was itchy and I felt a weight on my chest. I was experiencing anaphylactic shock, which prevented me from taking anything but shallow breaths. I was fighting the one thing that is meant to protect me and keep me alive – my own body.

[…] After that incident, I began to fear. I became scared of death, eating, and even my own body. As I grew older, I became paranoid about checking food labels and I avoided eating if I didn’t know what was in the food. I knew what could happen if I ate one wrong thing, and I wasn’t willing to risk it for a snack. Ultimately, that fear turned into resentment; I resented my body for making me an outsider.

In the years that followed, this experience and my regular visits to my allergy specialist inspired me to become an allergy specialist. Even though I was probably only ten at the time, I wanted to find a way to help kids like me. I wanted to find a solution so that nobody would have to feel the way I did; nobody deserved to feel that pain, fear, and resentment. As I learned more about the medical world, I became more fascinated with the body’s immune responses, specifically, how a body reacts to allergens.”

Essay 6 : On why this applicant wants to study medicine  

“My passion for teaching others and sharing knowledge emanates from my curiosity and love for learning. My shadowing experiences in particular have stimulated my curiosity and desire to learn more about the world around me. How does platelet rich plasma stimulate tissue growth? How does diabetes affect the proximal convoluted tubule? My questions never stopped. I wanted to know everything and it felt very satisfying to apply my knowledge to clinical problems. distinct concepts together to form a coherent picture truly attracts me to medicine.

It is hard to separate science from medicine; in fact, medicine is science. However, medicine is also about people—their feelings, struggles and concerns. Humans are not pre-programmed robots that all face the same problems. Humans deserve sensitive and understanding physicians. Humans deserve doctors who are infinitely curious, constantly questioning new advents in medicine. They deserve someone who loves the challenge of problem solving and coming up with innovative individualized solutions. I want to be that physician. I want to be able to approach each case as a unique entity and incorporate my strengths into providing personalized care for my patients. Until that time, I may be found Friday mornings in the operating room, peering over shoulders, dreaming about the day I get to hold the drill.”

You made it this far. Now, it’s time to write your personal statement!

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How to Answer “Tell Me About Yourself” (17+ Sample Answers)

Learn everything you need to know to ace the question “Tell me about yourself” in your next interview and land the job.

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You’re dressed to impress, your resume is polished, and you enter the interview room. Suddenly, you’re met with the seemingly simple yet pivotal question: “Tell me about yourself.” 

Then you either freeze like a deer in headlights or word barf a version of your life story that includes unnecessary details about the lasagna your mom used to bake you as a kid.

This open-ended question has stumped the best of us. But in this post, we’ll give you a simple formula, a handful of extra tips, and a bunch of sample scripts to hit this question out of the park and ace your interview.

Let’s dive in!

Simple Guide on Responding to “Tell Me About Yourself”

One problem with this question is you never know how much someone wants to know. You can consider asking back:

“Do you want the long answer or the short answer?”

If they say the short answer you can just answer the same way as you would with “What do you do?” Use this script:

I’m a ____, and I enjoy ____. 

If they say they want the long answer, you can use this basic script or read on for a more advanced approach below:

“Originally, I’m from ____. Now I live in ___. I work as a ____. And for fun, I ____.

If you’d like more detailed tips, we’ll get into more nuance below.

And if you’d like tips on another stumper, “What’s your greatest weakness?” then check out this article . 

Tips for How to Respond to “Tell Me About Yourself”

Let’s go over a few more detailed tips on how to summarize your professional background.

Quick formula to answering this question

Who’s asking you the question? If you are being asked in a professional setting, figure out the main skillset required for the role and then talk about your past, present, and future as it relates to the skillset. 

For example, let’s say you’re applying for a role whose main function is strategic planning. In this case, you would talk about your past, present, and future while strategizing.

You might say something like:

[PAST] “I first realized I was interested in strategy when I participated in a university case competition. Analyzing business scenarios was a total blast.

[PAST] My first role exploring strategy was as a junior analyst at a consulting firm. That’s when I realized the power of data-driven decision-making and how it can transform a business’s trajectory. This was a game-changer for me.

[PRESENT] That’s why I’m currently working at Bright Solutions. I love it here because I get to spearhead the business strategy and actually see results.

[FUTURE] But I’ve come to realize I want to work on more complex, company-wide strategies. And it seems like this role might be a great place to apply my skills on a larger stage where I can guide the strategic direction of this organization.”

Boom! Easy as that.

Pick an anchor

Another way to answer this question is with an anchor. This is the main topic that you will center your response around.

When sharing about yourself in an interview, it’s good to pick 1-2 central anchors. This will make your response more cohesive and easy to follow.

Consider anchoring your response around one of the following: 

• The company’s values and needs
• The skillset for the role
• The person interviewing you

Let’s dive into each option.

Tailor your response to the company’s values and needs

If you’re applying for a company that is either culture-forward or in a time of transition, then speak to this.

If they are obsessed with innovation, talk about the cool app you built. If they’re in dire need of marketing support, tell them about how you’re a marketing maestro.

Pro Tip: Study the company’s website and recent news to add relevant references to your answer.

Tailor your response to the skillset necessary for the role

When you’re applying for a position, align your response with the specific skills required for the job. 

If they are looking for a leader, mention how you were president of your college sorority and the amazing project you led in your last role.

If they want tech expertise, then wow them with your vast knowledge of coding languages.

Pro Tip: Carefully review the job description and identify the top skills mentioned. Prepare examples from your career where you’ve effectively used these skills.

Tailor your response to the perspective of the person interviewing you

You should answer the question “So tell me about yourself” differently depending on who is interviewing you.

You want to respond in a way that builds rapport and speaks to the values and perspective of the other person.

So, if you’re speaking with a CEO, you could focus on how your work will help the company’s overall goals. For an HR interviewer, speak to how good of a cultural fit you know you are. 

Pro Tip: Before the interview, research the interviewer’s role and background. Then, think about how to present your response based on their expertise and values.  

Past, present, and future

As we mentioned above, when talking about yourself, consider framing your response in three parts: past, present, and future.

Let’s dive into each one.

• Talk about your past.

Once you know what you want to anchor your response in (the company, the skillset for the role, or the interviewer), pick one or two examples from your past that speak to this anchor.

If you’re talking about yourself as it pertains to your design skills, for example, try to paint a brief picture of your history with design.

You can do this in two parts.

First, start with an early experience—an “awakening” you had toward design skills. You could say:

“I first discovered my passion for design during a high school art class, where I was fascinated by the ways that colors can express ideas. This led me to pursue a degree in graphic design.”

Then, connect this to a more recent experience that shaped your skills. You might continue, 

“Recently, in a previous role at Designer Pros., I led the rebranding project for a major client. This experience taught me the importance of user-centered design and how to effectively blend creativity with functionality.”

Pro Tip: In your “awakening” story, highlight the emotional or intellectual impact it had on you. For the recent experience, focus on specific skills or insights gained and how they prepare you for the role you’re interviewing for.

• Talk about your present.

Next, speak to your current role. It “‘s essential to convey not just what you do but also what you love about it. Your passion will go a long way!

In the design example above, start by expressing what excites you about your current leadership role. You might say:

“As a Senior Designer at Creative Designs Inc., I get to immerse myself in creating visual solutions that not only meet our client’s needs but also push the boundaries of my own creativity. It’s an absolute blast. What I love most about this role is the freedom to experiment with new design concepts and the collaborative environment that allows me to learn from my peers.

Then, highlight a specific aspect or project in your current role that you are particularly passionate about:

“Recently, I spearheaded the redesign of a major client’s branding, which involved huge amounts of market research. This project was particularly fulfilling because it allowed me to blend my artistic skills with strategic thinking.”

Pro Tip: When speaking about your current role, focus on elements that you genuinely enjoy and that align with the new role you’re applying for. Then, pick a specific part of your role or project that speaks to your passion.

• Talk about your future.

In wrapping up your response, talk about your future aspirations and how they align with the potential role at the company. This part of your answer bridges your past and present experiences with your future goals and creates a cohesive narrative that shows how good a fit you are for the role.

For instance, continuing with the theme of design, you might express your future aspirations like this:

“Thinking about the future, I’m excited about the opportunity to expand my design expertise and take on larger, more complex projects. My goal is to work in an environment that continually challenges me and allows me to contribute to groundbreaking design initiatives. I see myself evolving not just as a designer but as a creative leader who can inspire and guide teams towards innovative solutions.

Joining your team would be an exciting opportunity to do just that. With your company’s commitment to cutting-edge design and creative excellence, I feel it’s the perfect place for me to grow and contribute my expertise, pushing the boundaries of what’s possible in design.”

Pro Tip: In discussing your future, connect your career aspirations with how they align with the potential role and the company’s direction, showing your enthusiasm and fit for the role.

Keep it to 2 minutes max.

When answering the “Tell me about yourself” question, it’s a good idea to keep your response concise, ideally no longer than two minutes. 

Two minutes is enough time to say what you need to say. It will give openings for the interviewer to get to know you more. But it’s not so long that you’ll lose their attention.

Going much longer than two minutes might start to get monologue-y.

And make sure not to talk to the interviewer. Talk with them! Pay attention to their non-verbal cues. If they start leaning away, looking away, or looking distracted, you might be going too long.  

Pro Tip: Time yourself during practice to get a feel for what two minutes of speaking feels like.

Practice authentically

Try practicing your response ahead of time. 

But don’t memorize it word for word! Because you don’t want to come off as a robot or a performer. The goal is to sound natural and confident.  

To practice effectively, just get to know your key points. You can even write them down. Then, you don’t have to memorize anything; you can just practice riffing off your bullets.

Pro Tip 1: Write out your responses to this question in key bullets.

Pro Tip 2: After each practice session, reflect on what felt most natural and what could be improved. 

Pro Tip 3: You can also try recording your practice sessions to bring more formality to them.

If you’d like tips on how to annunciate and speak clearly, you might enjoy this article.

Make the throughline exciting.  

A “throughline” is an underlying thread that ties together a narrative, story, or speech. For example, one of the main throughlines in Star Wars is good versus evil. 

Similarly, you can tell your story through different emotional throughlines.

If you were responding to the question “Tell me about yourself,” think of how different your response would be with each of the following throughlines: 

• Sharing about when you’ve felt most inspired in your career journey
• Sharing about overcoming challenges in your career journey
• Sharing about annoyances in your career journey

There are lots of good options, but “excitement” is a safe bet to bring enthusiasm into the conversation.

If you speak too negatively, it could hurt your rapport. There’s a psychological term called spontaneous trait transference , which means that if you speak negatively about your old boss, for example, the interviewer’s brain will assign those negative traits to YOU. So if you use words like “hate,” “awful,” or “the worst,” the interviewer will associate those words with you! 

Pro Tip: When asked the question “Tell me about yourself,” reframe it in your mind as “Tell me about how excitement has guided your career journey.”

Bonus tip: offer hooks

A hook is a strategically placed and intriguing piece of information in your response that piques the interviewer’s interest and encourages them to ask follow-up questions. 

It’s like dropping a breadcrumb that the interviewer can choose to follow. And that breadcrumb will lead to a topic you love talking about.

Hooks are designed to make the interview more interactive and memorable. So it’s not just a mechanical Q&A session but a live conversation. 

Here’s how are a few tips on how to offer hooks effectively:

• Mention a project you’re proud of. If you mention a project you’ve completed in your initial response, you won’t have time to unpack it all, but you’re then giving the interviewer a chance to follow up.
• Mention the massive impact of an experience. If you say, “This was one of the most important moments in my career,” the interviewer’s ears will perk up.
• Hint at further discussion. Mention topics you are knowledgeable about and want to discuss more, like recent industry trends or a professional course you completed. You could say, “I recently finished this awesome course on Instagram marketing that I’d love to share more about.”

Offering hooks is a bonus tip because it’s tricky and can take practice and nuance. But it’ll bring your response from an A to an A+!

Pro Tip: Prepare a list of ‘hook’ points before the interview. Think of interesting snippets about your relevant experiences and skills. Practice how to incorporate them naturally into your responses. 

If it feels too confusing and heady to try to practice hooks and weave them in, then you can simplify this tip: respond to the question “Tell me about yourself ” with stories and pieces of information that you want the interviewer to ask you more about.

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Sample Answers to “Tell Me About Yourself”

If you’d like some better ideas on how to frame your response, below are several example answers for different situations.

Peruse these variations and use them for inspiration as you prepare your own answer.

Speaking to a CEO  

When talking to a CEO, it’s a good idea to mention how your skills and experiences align with the company’s strategic goals and vision.

[PAST] “My fascination with strategic analysis began during my university’s case competitions, where I excelled in developing innovative solutions to complex business problems.”

[PAST] “This led to my first role as a Strategic Analyst at XYZ Corp, where I played a key role in market analysis and strategy formulation.”

[PRESENT] “Currently, I’m at ABC Inc., thriving in a dynamic environment that challenges me to leverage data for strategic decision-making.”

[PRESENT] “I’m particularly proud of a recent project where I analyzed emerging market trends to redefine our company’s strategic focus.”

[FUTURE] “I’m now looking to expand my horizons in a role that allows for broader strategic influence, and I believe your company is the perfect place for this growth.”

Speaking to a Potential Direct Report  

When talking to a direct report, you might want to highlight your collaborative and leadership style, focusing on team success and project management.

[PAST] “My leadership path started as a Team Leader at FastPace Solutions, guiding my team through various successful projects.”

[PAST] “This experience solidified my passion for management, especially in high-stakes situations like critical product launches.”

[PRESENT] “Currently, I’m managing a talented team at Rapid Growth Ltd, focusing on delivering high-quality results under tight deadlines.”

[PRESENT] “We’ve just completed a major project that has significantly contributed to our department’s targets.”

[FUTURE] “I’m now looking to bring my leadership skills to your team, aiming to drive success and foster a culture of excellence and innovation.”

Speaking to Human Resources  

If talking to someone in HR, speak about your cultural fit, adaptability, and how your personal values align with the company’s ethos.

[PAST] “My interest in project management sparked during a collaborative university project, where I found my knack for organizing and directing team efforts to achieve our goals.”

[PAST] “This led to my first professional role as a Junior Project Coordinator at a tech firm, where I learned the importance of clear communication and effective resource allocation in project success.”

[PRESENT] “Currently, I’m a Project Manager at Innovative Solutions, where I oversee complex projects and enjoy the challenge of bringing diverse elements together to meet deadlines and exceed expectations.”

[PRESENT] “I’m currently leading a cross-functional team on a high-profile product launch, which is both demanding and rewarding, given its scope and impact.”

[FUTURE] “I’m seeking to expand my project management skills in a more diverse and challenging environment. The role at your company excites me as it offers the opportunity to manage larger-scale projects and contribute to your organization’s growth and success.”

Speaking to a Company Valuing Innovation

If the company is big into innovation, this is your chance to talk about your history with innovative projects and your proactive approach to problem-solving.

[PAST] “Innovation has been my career’s driving force since participating in a groundbreaking project at Start-Up Co., where I helped develop a new mobile app.”

[PAST] “That experience shaped my approach to product development, constantly seeking out new and better solutions.”

[PRESENT] “At TechAdvance, I’m fully engaged in integrating the latest technologies into our products, like our recent AI-enhanced software.”

[PRESENT] “I’m currently leading a team in developing a user-centric application, which promises to be a game-changer in the industry.”

[FUTURE] “I’m excited about the possibility of bringing my passion for innovation and product development to your company, contributing to cutting-edge solutions that align with your mission.”

Speaking to a Company Undergoing Rapid Growth

If the company is growing like wildfire, then focus on your adaptability, ability to scale operations, and experience in dynamic environments.

[PAST] “My career in business development started at a fast-paced startup, where I quickly learned to identify and capitalize on market opportunities.”

[PAST] “This environment was instrumental in developing my skills in scaling business operations rapidly and efficiently.”

[PRESENT] “At ExpandFast Inc., I’m part of a team driving the company’s growth, and I’ve successfully negotiated key partnerships that have expanded our reach.”

[PRESENT] “One current project involves exploring new market territories, which is both challenging and exhilarating.”

[FUTURE] “I’m now looking to leverage these experiences in a larger context, and your company’s rapid expansion phase seems like the perfect fit for my skills and ambitions.”

Speaking to a Start-Up

When interviewing with a start-up, you can emphasize your entrepreneurial spirit, versatility, and ability to wear multiple hats.

[PAST] “My marketing journey began with a successful social media campaign I led in college, sparking my interest in creative marketing strategies.”

[PAST] “This experience propelled me into various marketing roles, where I honed my skills in developing targeted campaigns.”

[PRESENT] “Currently, I’m a Marketing Specialist at InnovateNow, where I’m immersed in the dynamic world of start-up marketing.”

[PRESENT] “I’m particularly excited about a campaign I’m running that aims to double our online engagement through innovative tactics.”

[FUTURE] “I’m eager to bring this creativity and experience to your start-up, contributing to your growth and helping establish a strong market presence.”

Speaking to a Well-Established Traditional Corporation

If this company is a traditional one, then highlight your respect for established processes and your experience in structured, hierarchical environments.

[PAST] “My interest in financial analysis was kindled during an internship at Big Bank Corp, where I was involved in in-depth market research.”

[PAST] “This led to my current role at Steady Growth Investments, where I’ve refined my skills in financial modeling and analysis.”

[PRESENT] “Here, I’m passionate about developing robust financial strategies that contribute to the company’s stability and growth.”

[PRESENT] “A recent highlight has been my analysis contributing to a 10% increase in our investment efficiency.”

[FUTURE] “I’m now looking to bring my analytical expertise to a well-established corporation like yours, contributing to your ongoing financial success.”

Speaking to a Company with a Focus on Corporate Social Responsibility (CSR)

If you’re interviewing with a company big on CSR, then you could speak about your commitment to ethical practices and any experience in initiatives that benefit society.

[PAST] “My commitment to CSR began with community development projects, leading me to pursue a career focused on ethical business practices.”

[PAST] “At Green World Initiatives, managing CSR projects, I’ve learned the value of aligning business goals with societal benefits.”

[PRESENT] “Currently, I’m leading initiatives that positively impact communities, like our recent support for local businesses.”

[PRESENT] “I’m deeply involved in a project that aims to integrate sustainable practices across all our operations.”

[FUTURE] “I’m excited about the prospect of joining your team to further my passion for CSR and contribute to impactful initiatives that resonate with your company’s values.”

Speaking to a Company Valuing Work-Life Balance

If the company is big on work-life balance , then talk about how you maintain productivity and passion for work while valuing personal time and wellness.

[PAST] “I’ve always believed in the importance of a healthy work-life balance. In my early coding days, I learned to be efficient and focused, allowing me to deliver quality work while pursuing personal interests.”

[PAST] “At TechFlow, I implemented time-saving coding practices in Python, which improved our team’s productivity and work-life harmony.”

[PRESENT] “Currently at Computer Science Solutions, I maintain high productivity while actively engaging in company-sponsored wellness programs.”

[PRESENT] “I’m leading a project that optimizes our software development lifecycle, reducing overtime without compromising quality.”

[FUTURE] “I’m drawn to your company’s commitment to work-life balance and look forward to contributing my efficient coding skills and wellness-oriented mindset to your team.”

Speaking to a Company in a Highly Technical or Specialized Industry

Interviewing in a technical industry? Then, focus on your technical expertise, ongoing learning, and specific skills relevant to the industry.

[PAST] “My fascination with high-tech engineering began at university, where I specialized in advanced robotics. I’ve always been driven by the challenge of mastering complex technical concepts.”

[PAST] “In my previous role at HighTech Solutions, I contributed to pioneering work in robotic automation, constantly learning and applying new techniques.”

[PRESENT] “In my current situation, as a lead engineer at TechFront, I’m deeply involved in developing cutting-edge solutions in artificial intelligence.”

[PRESENT] “I’m working on a project that’s pushing the boundaries of AI in industrial applications.”

[FUTURE] “Joining your company, I see an exciting opportunity to apply my technical skills in a specialized industry, contributing to groundbreaking advancements.”

Speaking to a Company Prioritizing Sustainability

If they’re into sustainability, make sure to talk about your involvement in sustainable practices or projects and your dedication to environmental stewardship.

[PAST] “My commitment to sustainability started during my environmental studies, where I was involved in a campus-wide recycling initiative.”

[PAST] “At GreenTech, I worked on sustainable urban development projects, which deepened my understanding of practical environmental stewardship.”

[PRESENT] “I’m now consulting for EcoSolutions, focusing on sustainable practices in business operations.”

[PRESENT] “I’m currently advising on a major project to reduce the carbon footprint of a multinational corporation.”

[FUTURE] “I’m excited about the prospect of joining your company and contributing my expertise in sustainability, aligning with your commitment to environmental responsibility.”

Speaking to a Company Known for Technological Advancements

If the company is impressive in its tech advancements, you might want to talk about your skills in cutting-edge technologies and your passion for staying ahead in tech trends.

[PAST] “I’ve always been drawn to the forefront of technology. My passion for data science began during my master’s program, where I focused on machine learning.”

[PAST] “At DataTech, I developed algorithms that significantly improved data processing speeds, keeping us ahead of tech trends.”

[PRESENT] “In my current job at InnovateAI, I’m exploring the potential of AI in predictive analytics.”

[PRESENT] “I’m leading a project that uses advanced machine learning techniques to forecast market trends.”

[FUTURE] “Your company’s reputation for technological innovation is incredibly appealing, and I am eager to contribute my expertise in data science to continue driving tech advancements.”

Speaking to a Company Emphasizing Diversity and Inclusion

If they care about diversity and inclusion, then underscore about your work experience in diverse teams and how you value inclusive practices.

[PAST] “Diversity and inclusion have been central to my HR career. In my first role at GlobalTech, I helped implement a diversity recruitment strategy.”

[PAST] “This experience taught me the value of a diverse workforce and inclusive company culture in driving business success.”

[PRESENT] “Now, as an HR and Hiring Manager at PeopleFirst, I champion inclusive practices, from hiring to team-building.”

[PRESENT] “I’m currently leading a company-wide initiative to enhance our diversity training programs.”

[FUTURE] “I’m excited to bring this passion and experience to your company, furthering your commitment to creating a diverse and inclusive workplace.”

Speaking to a Company Focused on Employee Development 

If they care a lot about employee development, then you could speak about your commitment to continuous learning and professional growth.

[PAST] “My dedication to continuous learning began early in my career as a junior trainer, where I saw the transformative impact of ongoing professional development.”

[PAST] “In my last job at SkillBuilders, I developed comprehensive training programs that significantly boosted employee skills and job satisfaction.”

[PRESENT] “Currently, I oversee employee development initiatives at LearnGrow, ensuring alignment with career growth and business objectives.”

[PRESENT] “I’m implementing a new e-learning platform that caters to diverse learning styles and needs.”

[FUTURE] “Your company’s focus on employee growth resonates with me. I look forward to contributing to innovative training strategies that enhance employee skills and drive business success.”

Speaking to a Company that Prides Itself on Customer Satisfaction

If they are big on customer satisfaction, then consider going into experiences where you went above and beyond to ensure customer satisfaction and service excellence.

[PAST] “My commitment to customer satisfaction started in my first customer service role at ServiceFirst, where I learned the importance of exceeding customer expectations.”

[PAST] “In this chapter of my work history, I introduced a feedback system that improved our service delivery and customer satisfaction ratings.”

[PRESENT] “As a manager at CustomerCentric, I lead a team dedicated to providing exceptional service, consistently receiving high customer satisfaction scores.”

[PRESENT] “I’m currently overseeing a project to revamp our customer service protocols, enhancing overall experience and efficiency.”

[FUTURE] “I am excited about the opportunity to bring my experience and dedication to your company, contributing to your renowned focus on customer satisfaction and service excellence.”

Key Takeaways on How to Respond to “Tell Me About Yourself” in Interviews

This is an inevitable question in interviews and an easy one to fumble.

Just remember these two steps, and you’ll do great:

• Figure out the main skillset required for the role
• Talk about your past, present, and future as it relates to this skillset

Also, note that it’s not just about how you answer the interview questions. According to Harvard Business Review , one of the most common complaints that interviewers have after an interview is:

“I wish they had asked me more questions.”If you’d like to know what questions to ask your interviewer, check out these 45 Great Questions to Ask An Interviewer To Land Your Job .

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Love the frame work approach to the question. gonna write a response that I will use. Thanks again for the great education.

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Awesome practical tips to succeed in this kind of trap question. Thank you for sharing your experiences with us.

This is wonderful, I never thought about it, but I hate that question too. I have been with my company for 14 years and I have worked in all departments and 4 different towns. “what do you do” is a loaded question and I want to give my guests some information about me without giving the 14 year history.

“I’m a lifelong learner, differential thinker and problem solver with a healthy competitive streak.” This is my identity statement… then I use a pattern interrupt something like “I had a pretty normal childhood we went without gas or power multiple months out of every year because we couldn’t afford it. We even celebrated Christmas in February when my mom would get her tax return.” Because they were expecting normal and my life hasn’t been. Then depending on who I’m talking to I frame that in a positive for my situation, “but I wouldn’t trade that for anything. It taught me how to push myself. I was California state all stars in baseball every year, played on a traveling competitive soccer team on scholarship, even played in the men’s National dart tournament when I was 13 and placed in the money. Then someone told my I couldn’t play basketball because I am short and white… I said “f*ck you, watch me.” I played at UNLV…” so that reframes that sad or negative pattern interrupt as a good thing that shows my drive, ability, and effort.

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I love this lesson, Vanessa! I have been practicing all of your valuble tips and they do work. I could not thank you enough!!

Really good pointers. It is like you are writing a story, but actually you are formulating your words in a way that your listener won’t be bored and want to poke her eyes out or maybe yours for that matter. Thank you!!

Thanks very much for the post! If I understood that correctly, the answer to this question is like writing a very short paragraph. I think it’s a great tip! Have a nice day!

I sure wish I had the benefit of this information a few years ago when I was in a group situation and the leader asked each of us to introduce ourself and give a little tidbit about ourself. I was called on first. I was totally unprepared and botched the whole thing, actually giving too little info, rushing, as if I knew the others didn’t want to hear about me. By the time everyone else finished, I wanted a do-over. I’ve thought about that moment a lot and now I have the framework to give a great response next time!

I’m that very shy dude that can’t express himself, but me listening to your video will gonna help me improve my ways of expression. Thanks for the experience

Great tips over there. I bumped into this site as I was search some information on ‘people skills’. I have enjoyed reading and will continue. Thank you.

Thank you for those tips Vanessa, very helpful. I remember that in the first video of you that I watched, you were telling us a story with this lesson : ‘people are only boring because you fail making them interesting’. I still have it in mind and I guess that when we have that kind of question, we have to answer in a way to say what’s interesting about ourselves !

Great tips Vanessa! What I share about myself depends on my audience; what facts about me are they likely to be interested in? Why share I’m a violinist if I’m at an ice hockey game, and vice versa, if I’m at a classical music concert, and during interval I’m talking to someone, I’m not likely to bring up ice hockey.

These tips are really helpful. I discovered that I am doing them already but without following a sequence. So now I will simply ice up and up my game.

Thank you, Vanessa!

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Please note: Looking at examples of real essays students have submitted to colleges can be very beneficial to get inspiration for your essays. You should never copy or plagiarize from these examples when writing your own essays. Colleges can tell when an essay isn’t genuine and will not view students favorably if they plagiarized. 

Personal Statement Examples

Essay example #1: exchange program.

The twisting roads, ornate mosaics, and fragrant scent of freshly ground spices had been so foreign at first. Now in my fifth week of the SNYI-L summer exchange program in Morocco, I felt more comfortable in the city. With a bag full of pastries from the market, I navigated to a bus stop, paid the fare, and began the trip back to my host family’s house. It was hard to believe that only a few years earlier my mom was worried about letting me travel around my home city on my own, let alone a place that I had only lived in for a few weeks. While I had been on a journey towards self-sufficiency and independence for a few years now, it was Morocco that pushed me to become the confident, self-reflective person that I am today.

As a child, my parents pressured me to achieve perfect grades, master my swim strokes, and discover interesting hobbies like playing the oboe and learning to pick locks. I felt compelled to live my life according to their wishes. Of course, this pressure was not a wholly negative factor in my life –– you might even call it support. However, the constant presence of my parents’ hopes for me overcame my own sense of desire and led me to become quite dependent on them. I pushed myself to get straight A’s, complied with years of oboe lessons, and dutifully attended hours of swim practice after school. Despite all these achievements, I felt like I had no sense of self beyond my drive for success. I had always been expected to succeed on the path they had defined. However, this path was interrupted seven years after my parents’ divorce when my dad moved across the country to Oregon.

I missed my dad’s close presence, but I loved my new sense of freedom. My parents’ separation allowed me the space to explore my own strengths and interests as each of them became individually busier. As early as middle school, I was riding the light rail train by myself, reading maps to get myself home, and applying to special academic programs without urging from my parents. Even as I took more initiatives on my own, my parents both continued to see me as somewhat immature. All of that changed three years ago, when I applied and was accepted to the SNYI-L summer exchange program in Morocco. I would be studying Arabic and learning my way around the city of Marrakesh. Although I think my parents were a little surprised when I told them my news, the addition of a fully-funded scholarship convinced them to let me go.

I lived with a host family in Marrakesh and learned that they, too, had high expectations for me. I didn’t know a word of Arabic, and although my host parents and one brother spoke good English, they knew I was there to learn. If I messed up, they patiently corrected me but refused to let me fall into the easy pattern of speaking English just as I did at home. Just as I had when I was younger, I felt pressured and stressed about meeting their expectations. However, one day, as I strolled through the bustling market square after successfully bargaining with one of the street vendors, I realized my mistake. My host family wasn’t being unfair by making me fumble through Arabic. I had applied for this trip, and I had committed to the intensive language study. My host family’s rules about speaking Arabic at home had not been to fulfill their expectations for me, but to help me fulfill my expectations for myself. Similarly, the pressure my parents had put on me as a child had come out of love and their hopes for me, not out of a desire to crush my individuality.

As my bus drove through the still-bustling market square and past the medieval Ben-Youssef madrasa, I realized that becoming independent was a process, not an event. I thought that my parents’ separation when I was ten had been the one experience that would transform me into a self-motivated and autonomous person. It did, but that didn’t mean that I didn’t still have room to grow. Now, although I am even more self-sufficient than I was three years ago, I try to approach every experience with the expectation that it will change me. It’s still difficult, but I understand that just because growth can be uncomfortable doesn’t mean it’s not important.

What the Essay Did Well

This is a nice essay because it delves into particular character trait of the student and how it has been shaped and matured over time. Although it doesn’t focus the essay around a specific anecdote, the essay is still successful because it is centered around this student’s independence. This is a nice approach for a personal statement: highlight a particular trait of yours and explore how it has grown with you.

The ideas in this essay are universal to growing up—living up to parents’ expectations, yearning for freedom, and coming to terms with reality—but it feels unique to the student because of the inclusion of details specific to them. Including their oboe lessons, the experience of riding the light rail by themselves, and the negotiations with a street vendor helps show the reader what these common tropes of growing up looked like for them personally. 

Another strength of the essay is the level of self-reflection included throughout the piece. Since there is no central anecdote tying everything together, an essay about a character trait is only successful when you deeply reflect on how you felt, where you made mistakes, and how that trait impacts your life. The author includes reflection in sentences like “ I felt like I had no sense of self beyond my drive for success, ” and “ I understand that just because growth can be uncomfortable doesn’t mean it’s not important. ” These sentences help us see how the student was impacted and what their point of view is.

What Could Be Improved

The largest change this essay would benefit from is to show not tell. The platitude you have heard a million times no doubt, but for good reason. This essay heavily relies on telling the reader what occurred, making us less engaged as the entire reading experience feels more passive. If the student had shown us what happens though, it keeps the reader tied to the action and makes them feel like they are there with the student, making it much more enjoyable to read. 

For example, they tell us about the pressure to succeed their parents placed on them: “ I pushed myself to get straight A’s, complied with years of oboe lessons, and dutifully attended hours of swim practice after school.”  They could have shown us what that pressure looked like with a sentence like this: “ My stomach turned somersaults as my rattling knee thumped against the desk before every test, scared to get anything less than a 95. For five years the painful squawk of the oboe only reminded me of my parents’ claps and whistles at my concerts. I mastered the butterfly, backstroke, and freestyle, fighting against the anchor of their expectations threatening to pull me down.”

If the student had gone through their essay and applied this exercise of bringing more detail and colorful language to sentences that tell the reader what happened, the essay would be really great. 

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Essay Example #2: Being Bangladeshi-American

Life before was good: verdant forests, sumptuous curries, and a devoted family.

Then, my family abandoned our comfortable life in Bangladesh for a chance at the American dream in Los Angeles. Within our first year, my father was diagnosed with thyroid cancer. He lost his battle three weeks before my sixth birthday. Facing a new country without the steady presence of my father, we were vulnerable — prisoners of hardship in the land of the free. We resettled in the Bronx, in my uncle’s renovated basement. It was meant to be our refuge, but I felt more displaced than ever. Gone were the high-rise condos of West L.A.; instead, government projects towered over the neighborhood. Pedestrians no longer smiled and greeted me; the atmosphere was hostile, even toxic. Schoolkids were quick to pick on those they saw as weak or foreign, hurling harsh words I’d never heard before.

Meanwhile, my family began integrating into the local Bangladeshi community. I struggled to understand those who shared my heritage. Bangladeshi mothers stayed home while fathers drove cabs and sold fruit by the roadside — painful societal positions. Riding on crosstown buses or walking home from school, I began to internalize these disparities. During my fleeting encounters with affluent Upper East Siders, I saw kids my age with nannies, parents who wore suits to work, and luxurious apartments with spectacular views. Most took cabs to their destinations: cabs that Bangladeshis drove. I watched the mundane moments of their lives with longing, aching to plant myself in their shoes. Shame prickled down my spine. I distanced myself from my heritage, rejecting the traditional panjabis worn on Eid and refusing the torkari we ate for dinner every day. 

As I grappled with my relationship with the Bangladeshi community, I turned my attention to helping my Bronx community by pursuing an internship with Assemblyman Luis Sepulveda. I handled desk work and took calls, spending the bulk of my time actively listening to the hardships constituents faced — everything from a veteran stripped of his benefits to a grandmother unable to support her bedridden grandchild.

I’d never exposed myself to stories like these, and now I was the first to hear them. As an intern, I could only assist in what felt like the small ways — pointing out local job offerings, printing information on free ESL classes, reaching out to non-profits. But to a community facing an onslaught of intense struggles, I realized that something as small as these actions could have vast impacts. Seeing the immediate consequences of my actions inspired me. Throughout that summer, I internalized my community’s daily challenges in a new light. I began to stop seeing the prevalent underemployment and cramped living quarters less as sources of shame. Instead, I saw them as realities that had to be acknowledged, but could ultimately be remedied. I also realized the benefits of the Bangladeshi culture I had been so ashamed of. My Bangla language skills were an asset to the office, and my understanding of Bangladeshi etiquette allowed for smooth communication between office staff and its constituents. As I helped my neighbors navigate city services, I saw my heritage with pride — a perspective I never expected to have.

I can now appreciate the value of my unique culture and background, and of living with less. This perspective offers room for progress, community integration, and a future worth fighting for. My time with Assemblyman Sepulveda’s office taught me that I can be a change agent in enabling this progression. Far from being ashamed of my community, I want to someday return to local politics in the Bronx to continue helping others access the American Dream. I hope to help my community appreciate the opportunity to make progress together. By embracing reality, I learned to live it. Along the way, I discovered one thing: life is good, but we can make it better.

This student’s passion for social justice and civic duty shines through in this essay because of how honest it is. Sharing their personal experience with immigrating, moving around, being an outsider, and finding a community allows us to see the hardships this student has faced and builds empathy towards their situation. However, what really makes it strong is that they go beyond describing the difficulties they faced and explain the mental impact it had on them as a child: Shame prickled down my spine. I distanced myself from my heritage, rejecting the traditional panjabis worn on Eid and refusing the torkari we ate for dinner every day. 

The rejection of their culture presented at the beginning of the essay creates a nice juxtaposition with the student’s view in the latter half of the essay and helps demonstrate how they have matured. They use their experience interning as a way to delve into a change in their thought process about their culture and show how their passion for social justice began. Using this experience as a mechanism to explore their thoughts and feelings is an excellent example of how items that are included elsewhere on your application should be incorporated into your essay.

This essay prioritizes emotions and personal views over specific anecdotes. Although there are details and certain moments incorporated throughout to emphasize the author’s points, the main focus remains on the student and how they grapple with their culture and identity.  

One area for improvement is the conclusion. Although the forward-looking approach is a nice way to end an essay focused on social justice, it would be nice to include more details and imagery in the conclusion. How does the student want to help their community? What government position do they see themselves holding one day? 

A more impactful ending might look like the student walking into their office at the New York City Housing Authority in 15 years and looking at the plans to build a new development in the Bronx just blocks away from where the grew up that would provide quality housing to people in their Bangladeshi community. They would smile while thinking about how far they have come from that young kid who used to be ashamed of their culture. 

Essay Example #3: Why Medicine

I took my first trip to China to visit my cousin Anna in July of 2014. Distance had kept us apart, but when we were together, we fell into all of our old inside jokes and caught up on each other’s lives. Her sparkling personality and optimistic attitude always brought a smile to my face. This time, however, my heart broke when I saw the effects of her brain cancer; she had suffered from a stroke that paralyzed her left side. She was still herself in many ways, but I could see that the damage to her brain made things difficult for her. I stayed by her every day, providing the support she needed, whether assisting her with eating and drinking, reading to her, or just watching “Friends.” During my flight back home, sorrow and helplessness overwhelmed me. Would I ever see Anna again? Could I have done more to make Anna comfortable? I wished I could stay in China longer to care for her. As I deplaned, I wondered if I could transform my grief to help other children and teenagers in the US who suffered as Anna did.

The day after I got home, as jet lag dragged me awake a few minutes after midnight, I remembered hearing about the Family Reach Foundation (FRF) and its work with children going through treatments at the local hospital and their families. I began volunteering in the FRF’s Children’s Activity Room, where I play with children battling cancer. Volunteering has both made me appreciate my own health and also cherish the new relationships I build with the children and families. We play sports, make figures out of playdoh, and dress up. When they take on the roles of firefighters or fairies, we all get caught up in the game; for that time, they forget the sanitized, stark, impersonal walls of the pediatric oncology ward. Building close relationships with them and seeing them giggle and laugh is so rewarding — I love watching them grow and get better throughout their course of treatment.

Hearing from the parents about their children’s condition and seeing the children recover inspired me to consider medical research. To get started, I enrolled in a summer collegelevel course in Abnormal Psychology. There I worked with Catelyn, a rising college senior, on a data analysis project regarding Dissociative Identity Disorder (DID). Together, we examined the neurological etiology of DID by studying four fMRI and PET cases. I fell in love with gathering data and analyzing the results and was amazed by our final product: several stunning brain images showcasing the areas of hyper and hypoactivity in brains affected by DID. Desire quickly followed my amazement — I want to continue this project and study more brains. Their complexity, delicacy, and importance to every aspect of life fascinate me. Successfully completing this research project gave me a sense of hope; I know I am capable of participating in a large scale research project and potentially making a difference in someone else’s life through my research.

Anna’s diagnosis inspired me to begin volunteering at FRF; from there, I discovered my desire to help people further by contributing to medical research. As my research interest blossomed, I realized that it’s no coincidence that I want to study brains—after all, Anna suffered from brain cancer. Reflecting on these experiences this past year and a half, I see that everything I’ve done is connected. Sadly, a few months after I returned from China, Anna passed away. I am still sad, but as I run a toy truck across the floor and watch one of the little patients’ eyes light up, I imagine that she would be proud of my commitment to pursue medicine and study the brain.

This essay has a very strong emotional core that tugs at the heart strings and makes the reader feel invested. Writing about sickness can be difficult and doesn’t always belong in a personal statement, but in this case it works well because the focus is on how this student cared for her cousin and dealt with the grief and emotions surrounding her condition. Writing about the compassion she showed and the doubts and concerns that filled her mind keeps the focus on the author and her personality. 

This continues when she again discusses the activities she did with the kids at FRF and the personal reflection this experience allowed her to have. For example, she writes: Volunteering has both made me appreciate my own health and also cherish the new relationships I build with the children and families. We play sports, make figures out of playdoh, and dress up.

Concluding the essay with the sad story of her cousin’s passing brings the essay full circle and returns to the emotional heart of the piece to once again build a connection with the reader. However, it finishes on a hopeful note and demonstrates how this student has been able to turn a tragic experience into a source of lifelong inspiration. 

One thing this essay should be cognizant of is that personal statements should not read as summaries of your extracurricular resume. Although this essay doesn’t fully fall into that trap, it does describe two key extracurriculars the student participated in. However, the inclusion of such a strong emotional core running throughout the essay helps keep the focus on the student and her thoughts and feelings during these activities.

To avoid making this mistake, make sure you have a common thread running through your essay and the extracurriculars provide support to the story you are trying to tell, rather than crafting a story around your activities. And, as this essay does, make sure there is lots of personal reflection and feelings weaved throughout to focus attention to you rather than your extracurriculars. 

Essay Example #4: Love of Writing

“I want to be a writer.” This had been my answer to every youthful discussion with the adults in my life about what I would do when I grew up. As early as elementary school, I remember reading my writing pieces aloud to an audience at “Author of the Month” ceremonies. Bearing this goal in mind, and hoping to gain some valuable experience, I signed up for a journalism class during my freshman year. Despite my love for writing, I initially found myself uninterested in the subject and I struggled to enjoy the class. When I thought of writing, I imagined lyrical prose, profound poetry, and thrilling plot lines. Journalism required a laconic style and orderly structure, and I found my teacher’s assignments formulaic and dull. That class shook my confidence as a writer. I was uncertain if I should continue in it for the rest of my high school career.

Despite my misgivings, I decided that I couldn’t make a final decision on whether to quit journalism until I had some experience working for a paper outside of the classroom. The following year, I applied to be a staff reporter on our school newspaper. I hoped this would help me become more self-driven and creative, rather than merely writing articles that my teacher assigned. To my surprise, my time on staff was worlds away from what I experienced in the journalism class. Although I was unaccustomed to working in a fast-paced environment and initially found it burdensome to research and complete high-quality stories in a relatively short amount of time, I also found it exciting. I enjoyed learning more about topics and events on campus that I did not know much about; some of my stories that I covered in my first semester concerned a chess tournament, a food drive, and a Spanish immersion party. I relished in the freedom I had to explore and learn, and to write more independently than I could in a classroom.

Although I enjoyed many aspects of working for the paper immediately, reporting also pushed me outside of my comfort zone. I am a shy person, and speaking with people I did not know intimidated me. During my first interview, I met with the basketball coach to prepare for a story about the team’s winning streak. As I approached his office, I felt everything from my toes to my tongue freeze into a solid block, and I could hardly get out my opening questions. Fortunately, the coach was very kind and helped me through the conversation. Encouraged, I prepared for my next interview with more confidence. After a few weeks of practice, I even started to look forward to interviewing people on campus. That first journalism class may have bored me, but even if journalism in practice was challenging, it was anything but tedious.

Over the course of that year, I grew to love writing for our school newspaper. Reporting made me aware of my surroundings, and made me want to know more about current events on campus and in the town where I grew up. By interacting with people all over campus, I came to understand the breadth of individuals and communities that make up my high school. I felt far more connected to diverse parts of my school through my work as a journalist, and I realized that journalism gave me a window into seeing beyond my own experiences. The style of news writing may be different from what I used to think “writing” meant, but I learned that I can still derive exciting plots from events that may have gone unnoticed if not for my stories. I no longer struggle to approach others, and truly enjoy getting to know people and recognizing their accomplishments through my writing. Becoming a writer may be a difficult path, but it is as rewarding as I hoped when I was young.

This essay is clearly structured in a manner that makes it flow very nicely and contributes to its success. It starts with a quote to draw in the reader and show this student’s life-long passion for writing. Then it addresses the challenges of facing new, unfamiliar territory and how this student overcame it. Finally, it concludes by reflecting on this eye-opening experience and a nod to their younger self from the introduction. Having a well-thought out and sequential structure with clear transitions makes it extremely easy for the reader to follow along and take away the main idea.

Another positive aspect of the essay is the use of strong and expressive language. Sentences like “ When I thought of writing, I imagined lyrical prose, profound poetry, and thrilling plot lines ” stand out because of the intentional use of words like “lyrical”, “profound”, and “thrilling” to convey the student’s love of writing. The author also uses an active voice to capture the readers’ attention and keep us engaged. They rely on their language and diction to reveal details to the reader, for instance saying “ I felt everything from my toes to my tongue freeze into a solid block ” to describe feeling nervous.

This essay is already very strong, so there isn’t much that needs to be changed. One thing that could take the essay from great to outstanding would be to throw in more quotes, internal dialogue, and sensory descriptors.

It would be nice to see the nerves they felt interviewing the coach by including dialogue like “ Um…I want to interview you about…uh…”.  They could have shown their original distaste for journalism by narrating the thoughts running through their head. The fast-paced environment of their newspaper could have come to life with descriptions about the clacking of keyboards and the whirl of people running around laying out articles.

Essay Example #5: Starting a Fire

Was I no longer the beloved daughter of nature, whisperer of trees? Knee-high rubber boots, camouflage, bug spray—I wore the garb and perfume of a proud wild woman, yet there I was, hunched over the pathetic pile of stubborn sticks, utterly stumped, on the verge of tears. As a child, I had considered myself a kind of rustic princess, a cradler of spiders and centipedes, who was serenaded by mourning doves and chickadees, who could glide through tick-infested meadows and emerge Lyme-free. I knew the cracks of the earth like the scars on my own rough palms. Yet here I was, ten years later, incapable of performing the most fundamental outdoor task: I could not, for the life of me, start a fire. 

Furiously I rubbed the twigs together—rubbed and rubbed until shreds of skin flaked from my fingers. No smoke. The twigs were too young, too sticky-green; I tossed them away with a shower of curses, and began tearing through the underbrush in search of a more flammable collection. My efforts were fruitless. Livid, I bit a rejected twig, determined to prove that the forest had spurned me, offering only young, wet bones that would never burn. But the wood cracked like carrots between my teeth—old, brittle, and bitter. Roaring and nursing my aching palms, I retreated to the tent, where I sulked and awaited the jeers of my family. 

Rattling their empty worm cans and reeking of fat fish, my brother and cousins swaggered into the campsite. Immediately, they noticed the minor stick massacre by the fire pit and called to me, their deep voices already sharp with contempt. 

“Where’s the fire, Princess Clara?” they taunted. “Having some trouble?” They prodded me with the ends of the chewed branches and, with a few effortless scrapes of wood on rock, sparked a red and roaring flame. My face burned long after I left the fire pit. The camp stank of salmon and shame. 

In the tent, I pondered my failure. Was I so dainty? Was I that incapable? I thought of my hands, how calloused and capable they had been, how tender and smooth they had become. It had been years since I’d kneaded mud between my fingers; instead of scaling a white pine, I’d practiced scales on my piano, my hands softening into those of a musician—fleshy and sensitive. And I’d gotten glasses, having grown horrifically nearsighted; long nights of dim lighting and thick books had done this. I couldn’t remember the last time I had lain down on a hill, barefaced, and seen the stars without having to squint. Crawling along the edge of the tent, a spider confirmed my transformation—he disgusted me, and I felt an overwhelming urge to squash him. 

Yet, I realized I hadn’t really changed—I had only shifted perspective. I still eagerly explored new worlds, but through poems and prose rather than pastures and puddles. I’d grown to prefer the boom of a bass over that of a bullfrog, learned to coax a different kind of fire from wood, having developed a burn for writing rhymes and scrawling hypotheses. 

That night, I stayed up late with my journal and wrote about the spider I had decided not to kill. I had tolerated him just barely, only shrieking when he jumped—it helped to watch him decorate the corners of the tent with his delicate webs, knowing that he couldn’t start fires, either. When the night grew cold and the embers died, my words still smoked—my hands burned from all that scrawling—and even when I fell asleep, the ideas kept sparking—I was on fire, always on fire.

This student is an excellent writer, which allows a simple story to be outstandingly compelling. The author articulates her points beautifully and creatively through her immense use of details and figurative language. Lines like “a rustic princess, a cradler of spiders and centipedes, who was serenaded by mourning doves and chickadees,” and “rubbed and rubbed until shreds of skin flaked from my fingers,” create vivid images that draw the reader in. 

The flowery and descriptive prose also contributes to the nice juxtaposition between the old Clara and the new Clara. The latter half of the essay contrasts elements of nature with music and writing to demonstrate how natural these interests are for her now. This sentence perfectly encapsulates the contrast she is trying to build: “It had been years since I’d kneaded mud between my fingers; instead of scaling a white pine, I’d practiced scales on my piano, my hands softening into those of a musician—fleshy and sensitive.”

In addition to being well-written, this essay is thematically cohesive. It begins with the simple introduction “Fire!” and ends with the following image: “When the night grew cold and the embers died, my words still smoked—my hands burned from all that scrawling—and even when I fell asleep, the ideas kept sparking—I was on fire, always on fire.” This full-circle approach leaves readers satisfied and impressed.

There is very little this essay should change, however one thing to be cautious about is having an essay that is overly-descriptive. We know from the essay that this student likes to read and write, and depending on other elements of her application, it might make total sense to have such a flowery and ornate writing style. However, your personal statement needs to reflect your voice as well as your personality. If you would never use language like this in conversation or your writing, don’t put it in your personal statement. Make sure there is a balance between eloquence and your personal voice.

Essay Example #6: Dedicating a Track

“Getting beat is one thing – it’s part of competing – but I want no part in losing.” Coach Rob Stark’s motto never fails to remind me of his encouragement on early-morning bus rides to track meets around the state. I’ve always appreciated the phrase, but an experience last June helped me understand its more profound, universal meaning.

Stark, as we affectionately call him, has coached track at my high school for 25 years. His care, dedication, and emphasis on developing good character has left an enduring impact on me and hundreds of other students. Not only did he help me discover my talent and love for running, but he also taught me the importance of commitment and discipline and to approach every endeavor with the passion and intensity that I bring to running. When I learned a neighboring high school had dedicated their track to a longtime coach, I felt that Stark deserved similar honors.

Our school district’s board of education indicated they would only dedicate our track to Stark if I could demonstrate that he was extraordinary. I took charge and mobilized my teammates to distribute petitions, reach out to alumni, and compile statistics on the many team and individual champions Stark had coached over the years. We received astounding support, collecting almost 3,000 signatures and pages of endorsements from across the community. With help from my teammates, I presented this evidence to the board.

They didn’t bite. 

Most members argued that dedicating the track was a low priority. Knowing that we had to act quickly to convince them of its importance, I called a team meeting where we drafted a rebuttal for the next board meeting. To my surprise, they chose me to deliver it. I was far from the best public speaker in the group, and I felt nervous about going before the unsympathetic board again. However, at that second meeting, I discovered that I enjoy articulating and arguing for something that I’m passionate about.

Public speaking resembles a cross country race. Walking to the starting line, you have to trust your training and quell your last minute doubts. When the gun fires, you can’t think too hard about anything; your performance has to be instinctual, natural, even relaxed. At the next board meeting, the podium was my starting line. As I walked up to it, familiar butterflies fluttered in my stomach. Instead of the track stretching out in front of me, I faced the vast audience of teachers, board members, and my teammates. I felt my adrenaline build, and reassured myself: I’ve put in the work, my argument is powerful and sound. As the board president told me to introduce myself, I heard, “runners set” in the back of my mind. She finished speaking, and Bang! The brief silence was the gunshot for me to begin. 

The next few minutes blurred together, but when the dust settled, I knew from the board members’ expressions and the audience’s thunderous approval that I had run quite a race. Unfortunately, it wasn’t enough; the board voted down our proposal. I was disappointed, but proud of myself, my team, and our collaboration off the track. We stood up for a cause we believed in, and I overcame my worries about being a leader. Although I discovered that changing the status quo through an elected body can be a painstakingly difficult process and requires perseverance, I learned that I enjoy the challenges this effort offers. Last month, one of the school board members joked that I had become a “regular” – I now often show up to meetings to advocate for a variety of causes, including better environmental practices in cafeterias and safer equipment for athletes.

Just as Stark taught me, I worked passionately to achieve my goal. I may have been beaten when I appealed to the board, but I certainly didn’t lose, and that would have made Stark proud.

This essay effectively conveys this student’s compassion for others, initiative, and determination—all great qualities to exemplify in a personal statement!

Although they rely on telling us a lot of what happened up until the board meeting, the use of running a race (their passion) as a metaphor for public speaking provides a lot of insight into the fear that this student overcame to work towards something bigger than themself. Comparing a podium to the starting line, the audience to the track, and silence to the gunshot is a nice way of demonstrating this student’s passion for cross country running without making that the focus of the story.

The essay does a nice job of coming full circle at the end by explaining what the quote from the beginning meant to them after this experience. Without explicitly saying “ I now know that what Stark actually meant is…” they rely on the strength of their argument above to make it obvious to the reader what it means to get beat but not lose. 

One of the biggest areas of improvement in the intro, however, is how the essay tells us Stark’s impact rather than showing us: His care, dedication, and emphasis on developing good character has left an enduring impact on me and hundreds of other students. Not only did he help me discover my talent and love for running, but he also taught me the importance of commitment and discipline and to approach every endeavor with the passion and intensity that I bring to running.

The writer could’ve helped us feel a stronger emotional connection to Stark if they had included examples of Stark’s qualities, rather than explicitly stating them. For example, they could’ve written something like: Stark was the kind of person who would give you gas money if you told him your parents couldn’t afford to pick you up from practice. And he actually did that—several times. At track meets, alumni regularly would come talk to him and tell him how he’d changed their lives. Before Stark, I was ambivalent about running and was on the JV team, but his encouragement motivated me to run longer and harder and eventually make varsity. Because of him, I approach every endeavor with the passion and intensity that I bring to running.

Essay Example #7: Body Image and Eating Disorders

I press the “discover” button on my Instagram app, hoping to find enticing pictures to satisfy my boredom. Scrolling through, I see funny videos and mouth-watering pictures of food. However, one image stops me immediately. A fit teenage girl with a “perfect body” relaxes in a bikini on a beach. Beneath it, I see a slew of flattering comments. I shake with disapproval over the image’s unrealistic quality. However, part of me still wants to have a body like hers so that others will make similar comments to me.

I would like to resolve a silent issue that harms many teenagers and adults: negative self image and low self-esteem in a world where social media shapes how people view each other. When people see the façades others wear to create an “ideal” image, they can develop poor thought patterns rooted in negative self-talk. The constant comparisons to “perfect” others make people feel small. In this new digital age, it is hard to distinguish authentic from artificial representations.

When I was 11, I developed anorexia nervosa. Though I was already thin, I wanted to be skinny like the models that I saw on the magazine covers on the grocery store stands. Little did I know that those models probably also suffered from disorders, and that photoshop erased their flaws. I preferred being underweight to being healthy. No matter how little I ate or how thin I was, I always thought that I was too fat. I became obsessed with the number on the scale and would try to eat the least that I could without my parents urging me to take more. Fortunately, I stopped engaging in anorexic behaviors before middle school. However, my underlying mental habits did not change. The images that had provoked my disorder in the first place were still a constant presence in my life.

By age 15, I was in recovery from anorexia, but suffered from depression. While I used to only compare myself to models, the growth of social media meant I also compared myself to my friends and acquaintances. I felt left out when I saw my friends’ excitement about lake trips they had taken without me. As I scrolled past endless photos of my flawless, thin classmates with hundreds of likes and affirming comments, I felt my jealousy spiral. I wanted to be admired and loved by other people too. However, I felt that I could never be enough. I began to hate the way that I looked, and felt nothing in my life was good enough. I wanted to be called “perfect” and “body goals,” so I tried to only post at certain times of day to maximize my “likes.” When that didn’t work, I started to feel too anxious to post anything at all.  

Body image insecurities and social media comparisons affect thousands of people – men, women, children, and adults – every day. I am lucky – after a few months of my destructive social media habits, I came across a video that pointed out the illusory nature of social media; many Instagram posts only show off good things while people hide their flaws. I began going to therapy, and recovered from my depression. To address the problem of self-image and social media, we can all focus on what matters on the inside and not what is on the surface. As an effort to become healthy internally, I started a club at my school to promote clean eating and radiating beauty from within. It has helped me grow in my confidence, and today I’m not afraid to show others my struggles by sharing my experience with eating disorders. Someday, I hope to make this club a national organization to help teenagers and adults across the country. I support the idea of body positivity and embracing difference, not “perfection.” After all, how can we be ourselves if we all look the same?

This essay covers the difficult topics of eating disorders and mental health. If you’re thinking about covering similar topics in your essay, we recommend reading our post Should You Talk About Mental Health in College Essays?

The short answer is that, yes, you can talk about mental health, but it can be risky. If you do go that route, it’s important to focus on what you learned from the experience.

The strength of this essay is the student’s vulnerability, in excerpts such as this: I wanted to be admired and loved by other people too. However, I felt that I could never be enough. I began to hate the way that I looked, and felt nothing in my life was good enough. I wanted to be called “perfect” and “body goals,” so I tried to only post at certain times of day to maximize my “likes.”

The student goes on to share how they recovered from their depression through an eye-opening video and therapy sessions, and they’re now helping others find their self-worth as well. It’s great that this essay looks towards the future and shares the writer’s goals of making their club a national organization; we can see their ambition and compassion.

The main weakness of this essay is that it doesn’t focus enough on their recovery process, which is arguably the most important part. They could’ve told us more about the video they watched or the process of starting their club and the interactions they’ve had with other members. Especially when sharing such a vulnerable topic, there should be vulnerability in the recovery process too. That way, the reader can fully appreciate all that this student has overcome.

Essay Example #8: Becoming a Coach

”Advanced females ages 13 to 14 please proceed to staging with your coaches at this time.” Skittering around the room, eyes wide and pleading, I frantically explained my situation to nearby coaches. The seconds ticked away in my head; every polite refusal increased my desperation.

Despair weighed me down. I sank to my knees as a stream of competitors, coaches, and officials flowed around me. My dojang had no coach, and the tournament rules prohibited me from competing without one.

Although I wanted to remain strong, doubts began to cloud my mind. I could not help wondering: what was the point of perfecting my skills if I would never even compete? The other members of my team, who had found coaches minutes earlier, attempted to comfort me, but I barely heard their words. They couldn’t understand my despair at being left on the outside, and I never wanted them to understand.

Since my first lesson 12 years ago, the members of my dojang have become family. I have watched them grow up, finding my own happiness in theirs. Together, we have honed our kicks, blocks, and strikes. We have pushed one another to aim higher and become better martial artists. Although my dojang had searched for a reliable coach for years, we had not found one. When we attended competitions in the past, my teammates and I had always gotten lucky and found a sympathetic coach. Now, I knew this practice was unsustainable. It would devastate me to see the other members of my dojang in my situation, unable to compete and losing hope as a result. My dojang needed a coach, and I decided it was up to me to find one.

I first approached the adults in the dojang – both instructors and members’ parents. However, these attempts only reacquainted me with polite refusals. Everyone I asked told me they couldn’t devote multiple weekends per year to competitions. I soon realized that I would have become the coach myself.

At first, the inner workings of tournaments were a mystery to me. To prepare myself for success as a coach, I spent the next year as an official and took coaching classes on the side. I learned everything from motivational strategies to technical, behind-the-scenes components of Taekwondo competitions. Though I emerged with new knowledge and confidence in my capabilities, others did not share this faith.

Parents threw me disbelieving looks when they learned that their children’s coach was only a child herself. My self-confidence was my armor, deflecting their surly glances. Every armor is penetrable, however, and as the relentless barrage of doubts pounded my resilience, it began to wear down. I grew unsure of my own abilities.

Despite the attack, I refused to give up. When I saw the shining eyes of the youngest students preparing for their first competition, I knew I couldn’t let them down. To quit would be to set them up to be barred from competing like I was. The knowledge that I could solve my dojang’s longtime problem motivated me to overcome my apprehension.

Now that my dojang flourishes at competitions, the attacks on me have weakened, but not ended. I may never win the approval of every parent; at times, I am still tormented by doubts, but I find solace in the fact that members of my dojang now only worry about competing to the best of their abilities.

Now, as I arrive at a tournament with my students, I close my eyes and remember the past. I visualize the frantic search for a coach and the chaos amongst my teammates as we competed with one another to find coaches before the staging calls for our respective divisions. I open my eyes to the exact opposite scene. Lacking a coach hurt my ability to compete, but I am proud to know that no member of my dojang will have to face that problem again.

This essay begins with an in-the-moment narrative that really illustrates the chaos of looking for a coach last-minute. We feel the writer’s emotions, particularly her dejectedness, at not being able to compete. Starting an essay in media res  is a great way to capture the attention of your readers and build anticipation for what comes next.

Through this essay, we can see how gutsy and determined the student is in deciding to become a coach themselves. She shows us these characteristics through their actions, rather than explicitly telling us: To prepare myself for success as a coach, I spent the next year as an official and took coaching classes on the side.  Also, by discussing the opposition she faced and how it affected her, the student is open and vulnerable about the reality of the situation.

The essay comes full circle as the author recalls the frantic situations in seeking out a coach, but this is no longer a concern for them and their team. Overall, this essay is extremely effective in painting this student as mature, bold, and compassionate.

The biggest thing this essay needs to work on is showing not telling. Throughout the essay, the student tells us that she “emerged with new knowledge and confidence,” she “grew unsure of her own abilities,” and she “refused to give up”. What we really want to know is what this looks like.

Instead of saying she “emerged with new knowledge and confidence” she should have shared how she taught a new move to a fellow team-member without hesitation. Rather than telling us she “grew unsure of her own abilities” she should have shown what that looked like by including her internal dialogue and rhetorical questions that ran through her mind. She could have demonstrated what “refusing to give up” looks like by explaining how she kept learning coaching techniques on her own, turned to a mentor for advice, or devised a plan to win over the trust of parents. 

Essay Example #9: Eritrea

No one knows where Eritrea is.

On the first day of school, for the past nine years, I would pensively stand in front of a class, a teacher, a stranger  waiting for the inevitable question: Where are you from?

I smile politely, my dimples accentuating my ambiguous features. “Eritrea,” I answer promptly and proudly. But I  am always prepared. Before their expression can deepen into confusion, ready to ask “where is that,” I elaborate,  perhaps with a fleeting hint of exasperation, “East Africa, near Ethiopia.”

Sometimes, I single out the key-shaped hermit nation on a map, stunning teachers who have “never had a student  from there!” Grinning, I resist the urge to remark, “You didn’t even know it existed until two minutes ago!”

Eritrea is to the East of Ethiopia, its arid coastline clutches the lucrative Red Sea. Battle scars litter the ancient  streets – the colonial Italian architecture lathered with bullet holes, the mosques mangled with mortar shells.  Originally part of the world’s first Christian kingdom, Eritrea passed through the hands of colonial Italy, Britain, and  Ethiopia for over a century, until a bloody thirty year war of Independence liberated us.

But these are facts that anyone can know with a quick Google search. These are facts that I have memorised and compounded, first from my Grandmother and now from pristine books  borrowed from the library.

No historical narrative, however, can adequately capture what Eritrea is.  No one knows the aroma of bushels of potatoes, tomatoes, and garlic – still covered in dirt – that leads you to the open-air market. No one knows the poignant scent of spices, arranged in orange piles reminiscent of compacted  dunes.  No one knows how to haggle stubborn herders for sheep and roosters for Christmas celebrations as deliberately as my mother. No one can replicate the perfect balance of spices in dorho and tsebhi as well as my grandmother,  her gnarly hands stirring the pot with ancient precision (chastising my clumsy knife work with the potatoes).  It’s impossible to learn when the injera is ready – the exact moment you have to lift the lid of the mogogo. Do it too  early (or too late) and the flatbread becomes mangled and gross. It is a sixth sense passed through matriarchal  lineages.

There are no sources that catalogue the scent of incense that wafts through the sunlit porch on St. Michael’s; no  films that can capture the luminescence of hundreds of flaming bonfires that fluoresce the sidewalks on Kudus  Yohannes, as excited children chant Ge’ez proverbs whose origin has been lost to time.  You cannot learn the familiarity of walking beneath the towering Gothic figure of the Enda Mariam Cathedral, the  crowds undulating to the ringing of the archaic bells.  I have memorized the sound of the rains hounding the metal roof during kiremti , the heat of the sun pounding  against the Toyota’s window as we sped down towards Ghinda , the opulent brilliance of the stars twinkling in a  sky untainted by light pollution, the scent of warm rolls of bani wafting through the streets at precisely 6 o’clock each day…

I fill my flimsy sketchbook with pictures from my memory. My hand remembers the shapes of the hibiscus drifting  in the wind, the outline of my grandmother (affectionately nicknamed a’abaye ) leaning over the garden, the bizarre architecture of the Fiat Tagliero .  I dice the vegetables with movements handed down from generations. My nose remembers the scent of frying garlic, the sourness of the warm tayta , the sharpness of the mit’mt’a …

This knowledge is intrinsic.  “I am Eritrean,” I repeat. “I am proud.”  Within me is an encyclopedia of history, culture, and idealism.

Eritrea is the coffee made from scratch, the spices drying in the sun, the priests and nuns. Eritrea is wise, filled with ambition, and unseen potential.  Eritrea isn’t a place, it’s an identity.

This is an exceptional essay that provides a window into this student’s culture that really makes their love for their country and heritage leap off the page. The sheer level of details and sensory descriptors this student is able to fit in this space makes the essay stand out. From the smells, to the traditions, sounds, and sights, the author encapsulates all the glory of Eritrea for the reader. 

The vivid images this student is able to create for the reader, whether it is having the tedious conversation with every teacher or cooking in their grandmother’s kitchen, transports us into the story and makes us feel like we are there in the moment with the student. This is a prime example of an essay that shows , not tells.

Besides the amazing imagery, the use of shorter paragraphs also contributes to how engaging this essay is. Employing this tactic helps break up the text to make it more readable and it isolates ideas so they stick out more than if they were enveloped in a large paragraph.

Overall, this is a really strong essay that brings to life this student’s heritage through its use of vivid imagery. This essay exemplifies what it means to show not tell in your writing, and it is a great example of how you can write an intimate personal statement without making yourself the primary focus of your essay. 

There is very little this essay should improve upon, but one thing the student might consider would be to inject more personal reflection into their response. Although we can clearly take away their deep love and passion for their homeland and culture, the essay would be a bit more personal if they included the emotions and feelings they associate with the various aspects of Eritrea. For example, the way their heart swells with pride when their grandmother praises their ability to cook a flatbread or the feeling of serenity when they hear the bells ring out from the cathedral. Including personal details as well as sensory ones would create a wonderful balance of imagery and reflection.

Essay Example #10: Journaling

Flipping past dozens of colorful entries in my journal, I arrive at the final blank sheet. I press my pen lightly to the page, barely scratching its surface to create a series of loops stringing together into sentences. Emotions spill out, and with their release, I feel lightness in my chest. The stream of thoughts slows as I reach the bottom of the page, and I gently close the cover of the worn book: another journal finished.

I add the journal to the stack of eleven books on my nightstand. Struck by the bittersweet sensation of closing a chapter of my life, I grab the notebook at the bottom of the pile to reminisce.

“I want to make a flying mushen to fly in space and your in it” – October 2008

Pulling back the cover of my first Tinkerbell-themed diary, the prompt “My Hopes and Dreams” captures my attention. Though “machine” is misspelled in my scribbled response, I see the beginnings of my past obsession with outer space. At the age of five, I tore through novels about the solar system, experimented with rockets built from plastic straws, and rented Space Shuttle films from Blockbuster to satisfy my curiosities. While I chased down answers to questions as limitless as the universe, I fell in love with learning. Eight journals later, the same relentless curiosity brought me to an airplane descending on San Francisco Bay.

“I wish I had infinite sunsets” – July 2019

I reach for the charcoal notepad near the top of the pile and open to the first page: my flight to the Stanford Pre-Collegiate Summer Institutes. While I was excited to explore bioengineering, anxiety twisted in my stomach as I imagined my destination, unsure of whether I could overcome my shyness and connect with others.

With each new conversation, the sweat on my palms became less noticeable, and I met students from 23 different countries. Many of the moments where I challenged myself socially revolved around the third story deck of the Jerry house. A strange medley of English, Arabic, and Mandarin filled the summer air as my friends and I gathered there every evening, and dialogues at sunset soon became moments of bliss. In our conversations about cultural differences, the possibility of an afterlife, and the plausibility of far-fetched conspiracy theories, I learned to voice my opinion. As I was introduced to different viewpoints, these moments challenged my understanding of the world around me. In my final entries from California, I find excitement to learn from others and increased confidence, a tool that would later allow me to impact my community.

“The beauty in a tower of cans” – June 2020

Returning my gaze to the stack of journals, I stretch to take the floral-patterned book sitting on top. I flip through, eventually finding the beginnings of the organization I created during the outbreak of COVID-19. Since then, Door-to-Door Deliveries has woven its way through my entries and into reality, allowing me to aid high-risk populations through free grocery delivery.

With the confidence I gained the summer before, I took action when seeing others in need rather than letting my shyness hold me back. I reached out to local churches and senior centers to spread word of our services and interacted with customers through our website and social media pages. To further expand our impact, we held two food drives, and I mustered the courage to ask for donations door-to-door. In a tower of canned donations, I saw the value of reaching out to help others and realized my own potential to impact the world around me.

I delicately close the journal in my hands, smiling softly as the memories reappear, one after another. Reaching under my bed, I pull out a fresh notebook and open to its first sheet. I lightly press my pen to the page, “And so begins the next chapter…”

The structuring of this essay makes it easy and enjoyable to read. The student effectively organizes their various life experiences around their tower of journals, which centers the reader and makes the different stories easy to follow. Additionally, the student engages quotes from their journals—and unique formatting of the quotes—to signal that they are moving in time and show us which memory we should follow them to.

Thematically, the student uses the idea of shyness to connect the different memories they draw out of their journals. As the student describes their experiences overcoming shyness at the Stanford Pre-Collegiate Summer Institutes and Door-to-Door Deliveries, this essay can be read as an Overcoming Obstacles essay.

At the end of this essay, readers are fully convinced that this student is dedicated (they have committed to journaling every day), thoughtful (journaling is a thoughtful process and, in the essay, the student reflects thoughtfully on the past), and motivated (they flew across the country for a summer program and started a business). These are definitely qualities admissions officers are looking for in applicants!

Although this essay is already exceptionally strong as it’s written, the first journal entry feels out of place compared to the other two entries that discuss the author’s shyness and determination. It works well for the essay to have an entry from when the student was younger to add some humor (with misspelled words) and nostalgia, but if the student had either connected the quote they chose to the idea of overcoming a fear present in the other two anecdotes or if they had picked a different quote all together related to their shyness, it would have made the entire essay feel more cohesive.

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How to Write a Personal Statement (with Tips and Examples)

By Hannah Yang

Table of Contents

What is a personal statement, 6 tips on how to write a personal statement, personal statement examples (for college and university), faqs about writing personal statements, conclusion on how to write a personal statement.

How do you tell someone who you are in just a few hundred words?

It’s certainly no easy task, but it’s one almost every college applicant must do. The personal statement is a crucial part of any college or university application.

So, how do you write a compelling personal statement?

In this article, we’ll give you all the tools, tips, and examples you need to write an effective personal statement.

A personal statement is a short essay that reveals something important about who you are. It can talk about your background, your interests, your values, your goals in life, or all of the above.

Personal statements are required by many college admission offices and scholarship selection committees. They’re a key part of your application, alongside your academic transcript, standardized test scores, and extracurricular activities.

The reason application committees ask you to write a personal statement is so they can get to know who you are. 

Some personal statements have specific prompts, such as “Discuss a period of personal growth in your life” or “Tell us about a challenge or failure you’ve faced.” Others are more open-ended with prompts that essentially boil down to “Tell us about yourself.”

No matter what the prompt is, your goal is the same: to make yourself stand out to the selection committee as a strong candidate for their program.

Here are some things a personal statement can be:

It can be funny. If you have a great sense of humor, your personal statement is a great place to let that shine.  

It can be vulnerable. Don’t be afraid to open up about hardships in your life or failures you’ve experienced. Showing vulnerability can make you sound more like a real person rather than just a collection of application materials.  

It can be creative. Candidates have got into top schools with personal statements that take the form of “a day in the life” descriptions, third-person short stories, and even cooking recipes.

Now we’ve talked about what a personal statement is, let’s quickly look at what a personal statement isn’t:

It isn’t a formal academic paper. You should write the personal statement in your natural voice, using first-person pronouns like “I” and “me,” not in the formal, objective language you would use to write an academic paper.

It isn’t a five-paragraph essay. You should use as many paragraphs as you need to tell your story instead of sticking to the essay structure you learned in school.

It isn’t a resumé. You should try to describe yourself by telling a clear and cohesive story rather than providing a jumbled list of all of your accomplishments and ambitions.

Here are our top six tips for writing a strong personal statement.

Tip 1: Do Some Serious Self-Reflection

The hardest part of writing a personal statement isn’t the actual process of writing it.

Before you start typing, you have to figure out what to write about. And that means taking some time to reflect on who you are and what’s important in your life.

Here are some useful questions you can use to start your self-reflection. You can either answer these on your own by writing down your answers, or you can ask a trusted friend to listen as you talk about them together.

What were the key moments that shaped your life? (e.g. an important friendship, a travel experience, an illness or injury)

What are you proud of? (e.g. you’re a good listener, you always keep your promises, you’re a talented musician)

How do you choose to spend your time? (e.g. reading, practicing soccer, spending time with your friends)

What inspires you? (e.g. your grandmother, a celebrity, your favorite song)

Doing this self-reflection is crucial for figuring out the perfect topics and anecdotes you can use to describe who you are.

Tip 2: Try to Avoid Cliché Topics

College application committees read thousands of personal statements a year. That means there are some personal statement topics they see over and over again.

Here are a few examples of common personal statement topics that have become cliché:

Winning a tournament or sports game

Volunteering in a foreign country

Moving to a new home

Becoming an older sibling

Being an immigrant or having immigrant parents

If you want to make a strong impression in the application process, you need to make your personal statement stand out from the crowd.

But if your chosen personal statement topic falls into one of these categories, that doesn’t necessarily mean you shouldn’t use it. Just make sure to put a unique spin on it so it still delivers something the committee hasn’t seen before.

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Tip 3: Show, Don’t Tell

One common mistake you might make in your personal statement is to simply tell the reader what you want them to know about you, such as by stating “I have a fear of public speaking” or “I love to cook.”

Instead of simply stating these facts, you should show the committee what you’re talking about through a story or scene, which will make your essay much more immersive and memorable.

For example, let’s say you want the committee to know you overcame your fear of public speaking. Instead of writing “I overcame my fear of public speaking,” show them what it was like to be onstage in front of a microphone. Did your palms get clammy? Did you feel light-headed? Did you forget your words?

Or let’s say you want the committee to know you love to cook. Instead of writing “I love to cook,” show them why you love to cook. What’s your favorite dish to cook? What does the air smell like when you’re cooking it? What kitchen appliances do you use to make it?

Tip 4: Connect the Story to Why You’re Applying

Don’t forget that the purpose of your personal statement isn’t simply to tell the admissions committee who you are. That’s an important part of it, of course, but your ultimate goal is to convince them to choose you as a candidate.

That means it’s important to tie your personal story to your reasons for applying to this specific school or scholarship. Finish your essay with a strong thesis.

For example, if your story is about overcoming your fear of public speaking, you might connect that story to your ambition of becoming a politician. You can then tie that to your application by saying, “I want to apply to this school because of its fantastic politics program, which will give me a perfect opportunity to use my voice.”

Tip 5: Write in Your Own Voice

The personal statement isn’t supposed to be written in a formal tone. That’s why they’re called “personal” statements because you have to shape it to fit your own voice and style.

Don’t use complicated or overwrought language. You don’t need to fill your essay with semicolons and big words, unless that’s how you sound in real life.

One way to write in your own voice is by speaking your personal statement out loud. If it doesn’t feel natural, it may need changing. 

Tip 6: Edit, Edit, Edit!

It’s important to revise your personal statement multiple times in order to make sure it’s as close to perfect as possible.

A single typo won’t kill your application, but if your personal statement contains multiple spelling errors or egregious grammar mistakes, you won’t be putting your best foot forward.

ProWritingAid can help you make sure your personal statement is as clean as possible. In addition to catching your grammar errors, typos, and punctuation mistakes, it will also help you improve weaknesses in your writing, such as passive voice, unnecessary repetition, and more.

Let’s look at some of the best personal statements that have worked for successful candidates in the real world. 

Harvard Personal Statement Example

Love. For a word describing such a powerful emotion, it is always in the air. The word “love” has become so pervasive in everyday conversation that it hardly retains its roots in blazing passion and deep adoration. In fact, the word is thrown about so much that it becomes difficult to believe society isn’t just one huge, smitten party, with everyone holding hands and singing “Kumbaya.” In films, it’s the teenage boy’s grudging response to a doting mother. At school, it’s a habitual farewell between friends. But in my Chinese home, it’s never uttered. Watching my grandmother lie unconscious on the hospital bed, waiting for her body to shut down, was excruciatingly painful. Her final quavering breaths formed a discordant rhythm with the steady beep of hospital equipment and the unsympathetic tapping hands of the clock. That evening, I whispered—into unhearing ears—the first, and only, “I love you” I ever said to her, my rankling guilt haunting me relentlessly for weeks after her passing. My warm confession seemed anticlimactic, met with only the coldness of my surroundings—the blank room, impassive doctors, and empty silence. I struggled to understand why the “love” that so easily rolled off my tongue when bantering with friends dissipated from my vocabulary when I spoke to my family. Do Chinese people simply love less than Americans do?

This is an excerpt from a personal statement that got the applicant admitted to Harvard University. The applicant discusses her background as a Chinese-American by musing on the word “love” and what that means within her family.

The writer uses vulnerable details about her relationship with her grandmother to give the reader an understanding of where she comes from and how her family has shaped her.  

You can read the full personal statement on the Harvard Crimson website.

Tufts Personal Statement Example

My first dream job was to be a pickle truck driver. I saw it in my favorite book, Richard Scarry’s “Cars and Trucks and Things That Go,” and for some reason, I was absolutely obsessed with the idea of driving a giant pickle. Much to the discontent of my younger sister, I insisted that my parents read us that book as many nights as possible so we could find goldbug, a small little golden bug, on every page. I would imagine the wonderful life I would have: being a pig driving a giant pickle truck across the country, chasing and finding goldbug. I then moved on to wanting to be a Lego Master. Then an architect. Then a surgeon. Then I discovered a real goldbug: gold nanoparticles that can reprogram macrophages to assist in killing tumors, produce clear images of them without sacrificing the subject, and heat them to obliteration. Suddenly the destination of my pickle was clear. I quickly became enveloped by the world of nanomedicine; I scoured articles about liposomes, polymeric micelles, dendrimers, targeting ligands, and self-assembling nanoparticles, all conquering cancer in some exotic way. Completely absorbed, I set out to find a mentor to dive even deeper into these topics. After several rejections, I was immensely grateful to receive an invitation to work alongside Dr. Sangeeta Ray at Johns Hopkins.

This is the beginning of a personal statement by Renner Kwittken, who was admitted into Tufts University as a pre-medical student.

Renner uses a humorous anecdote about being a pickle truck driver to describe his love for nanomedicine and how he got involved in his field. You can feel his passion for medicine throughout his personal statement.

You can find Renner’s full essay on the Tufts Admissions page.

Law School Personal Statement Essay Example

For most people, the slap on the face that turns their life around is figurative. Mine was literal. Actually, it was a punch delivered by a drill sergeant at Fort Dix, New Jersey, while I was in basic training. That day’s activity, just a few weeks into the program, included instruction in “low-crawling,” a sensible method of moving from one place to another on a battlefield. I felt rather clever for having discovered that, by looking right rather than down, I eliminated my helmet’s unfortunate tendency to dig into the ground and slow my progress. I could thus advance more easily, but I also exposed my unprotected face to hostile fire. Drill sergeants are typically very good at detecting this type of laziness, and mine was an excellent drill sergeant. So, after his repeated suggestions that I correct my performance went unheeded, he drove home his point with a fist to my face. We were both stunned. This was, after all, the New Army, and striking a trainee was a career-ending move for a drill sergeant, as we were both aware. I could have reported him; arguably, I should have. I didn’t. It didn’t seem right for this good sergeant, who had not slept for almost four days, to lose his career for losing his temper with my laziness. Choosing not to report him was the first decision I remember making that made me proud.

These are the first three paragraphs of an anonymous personal statement by a Wheaton College graduate, who used this personal statement to get into a top-25 law school.

This statement describes a time the applicant faced a challenging decision while in the army. He ended up making a decision he was proud of, and as a result, the personal statement gives us a sense of his character.

You can find the full essay on the Wheaton Academics website.

Here are some common questions about how to write a personal statement.

How Long Should a Personal Statement Be?

The length of your personal statement depends on the specific program you’re applying to. The application guidelines usually specify a maximum word count or an ideal word count.  

Most personal statements are between 500–800 words. That’s a good general range to aim for if you don’t have more specific guidelines.  

Should Personal Statements Be Different for Scholarships?

Many scholarship applications will ask for personal statements with similar prompts to those of college applications.

However, the purpose of a personal statement you’d write for a scholarship application is different from the purpose of one you’d write for a college application.

For a scholarship application, your goal is to showcase why you deserve the scholarship. To do that, you need to understand the mission of the organization offering that scholarship.

For example, some scholarships are meant to help first-generation college students get their degree, while others are meant to help women break into STEM.

Consider the following questions:

Why is this organization offering scholarships?

What would their ideal scholarship candidate look like?

How do your experiences and goals overlap with those of their ideal scholarship candidate?

You can use the same personal anecdotes you’d use for any other personal statement, but you’ll have a better chance of winning the scholarship if you tailor your essay to match their specific mission.

How to Start a Personal Statement

You should start your personal statement with a “hook” that pulls the reader in. The sooner you catch the reader’s attention, the more likely they’ll want to read the entire essay.

Here are some examples of hooks you can use:

A story (e.g. When the spotlight hit my face, I tried to remind myself to breathe. )

A setting description (e.g. My bedroom floor is covered with dirty laundry, candy wrappers, and crumpled sheet music. )

A funny anecdote (e.g. When I was a little kid, my friends nicknamed me Mowgli because of my haircut. )

A surprising fact (e.g. I've lived in 37 countries .)

There you have it—our complete guide to writing a personal statement that will make you stand out to the application committee.

Here’s a quick recap: 

A personal statement is a short essay that shows an application committee who you are

Start with a strong hook that pulls the reader in

Tell a story to engage the reader 

Write in your own voice, not in a formal tone

Good luck, and happy writing!

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How To Write a Personal Statement That Stands Out

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Laura Jane Bradbury

A personal statement is a chance to highlight your unique qualities, skills, and experiences, all while showcasing your personality.

But whether you're applying for university, a job, or funding, it can be daunting to write about yourself. To increase your chances of getting accepted, it's important to know how to create an effective personal statement.

In my six years as a copywriter, I’ve written many personal statements that get results. In this article, I’ll guide you through what to include, what to avoid, and how to tailor a personal statement based on your application type.

Key Takeaways

• A personal statement is an opportunity to share your unique qualities, experiences, and skills.
• It should always relate to the course, job, or funding you are applying for.
• Include accomplishments and experiences that demonstrate how suited you are to the position or course you are applying for.
• Use clear and simple language to ensure your points are understood.

Your personal statement should be concise and demonstrate how you fit the position or opportunity you’re applying for. It’s important to keep information relevant, rather than listing all of your skills and accomplishments.

Follow these steps to accurately write and tailor your statement.

Understand your prompt

Before you start, make sure you understand what's expected of you. Are there specific instructions, keywords, or phrases that stand out in your prompt? Read through it thoroughly and note the requirements. You can then brainstorm ideas for each point.

Let's say I'm applying for a university journalism course. I've been asked to write a statement that shares why I'm interested and why I would be a good fit. I can use columns to plan my content:

Putting your ideas together first makes it easier to stay on track. Otherwise, you might lose focus and include irrelevant information. 

Show, don't just tell

Once you’ve listed your experiences, skills, and accomplishments, consider how you can demonstrate them with examples. Take a look at the list you created during the previous exercise and organize your points so you have clear examples and proof.

This technique helps you demonstrate your experiences and how they tie in with your application.

When telling anecdotes, use engaging stories that demonstrate your skills. For instance, a story about how I handled a fast-paced news internship proves I work well under pressure. 

Start strong

Recruiters, application tutors, and funders read lots of personal statements. You can make yours stand out with an engaging introduction.

Examples of a strong opening include:

A meaningful statistic

This draws readers in and increases credibility: 

"Communication is the key to marketing success, according to Business Marketing News. With five years of experience communicating and delivering campaigns to global clients, I have the skills and passion to add value to your team."

A personal story

Anecdotes connect the reader with the author’s real-life experience: 

"My first exposure to microbiology was during my time as a research assistant for a microbiologist. I was fascinated by the complex and intricate processes within cells."

An alarming statement

This piques the reader’s interest by making an issue seem urgent:  

“ The fashion industry churns out clothes at an alarming rate, causing mass production of synthetic fibers and harsh chemicals which have a detrimental impact on the planet. Funding my sustainability initiative is vital to mitigating this environmental impact." 

Avoid cliches such as "From a young age, I have always loved...." and "For as long as I can remember, I have had a passion for..."

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Admission committees and employers appreciate sincerity and authenticity. While it may be tempting, avoid exaggeration. You can better emphasize your skills and personality by being honest. For instance, rather than claiming I read every type of newspaper in my journalism application, I can focus on my dedication to reading The New York Times.

Your writing style should also feel genuine. Instead of trying to impress with complex language and fancy words, keep sentences simple and direct . This makes them more effective because they’re easier to read. 

Address weaknesses

Addressing weaknesses can show your willingness to confront challenges. It also gives you a chance to share efforts you have made for improvement. When explaining a weakness, exclude excuses.

Instead of saying "I didn't achieve my expected grades due to work commitments impacting my studies," try “While I didn't achieve my expected grades, I am now working with a tutor to help me understand my weak areas so I can succeed in your program.”

Wordtune’s Spices feature can help you develop counterarguments to weaknesses. In the Editor, highlight your text, click on Spices, and then Counterargument . Here’s an example:

Using Wordtune’s suggestion, I can highlight my eagerness to learn and provide examples to support my argument.

Highlight achievements

This is your chance to shine! A personal statement should highlight your best qualities — provided they relate to your prompt.

Ask yourself:

• What are your skills and strengths? Identify both academic and non-academic abilities such as critical thinking, problem-solving, and teamwork.
• What challenges have you faced? Reflect on how you have overcome significant challenges and how these experiences have helped you grow. For example, completing a course, learning a new language, or starting a business.
• What are your unique selling points? Consider what sets you apart from other applicants. For example, you may have a unique set of technical skills or experience learning in a different country.
• How have your achievements shaped your goals and aspirations? Sharing your goals shows that you think long-term and have taken the time to make sure you’re applying for the right opportunity.

Connect with the institution or company

Tailor your statement to the specific institution or company you're applying to — this shows you understand their values and have carefully considered where you want to seek opportunities.

To do this, head to the company or institution’s website and look for the About page. Many organizations include a mission statement on this page that conveys its purpose and values.

For example, universities often include their values under “Community” or “Student Life” sections. Here, Princeton University’s “In Service of Humanity” section highlights how they value using education to benefit society. Applicants can engage with this by explaining how they interact with their communities and seek to use their education to help others.

You can also research a company or institution’s social media. Look for similarities — maybe you both prioritize collaboration or think outside the box. Draw upon this in your personal statement. 

End with a strong conclusion

A strong conclusion is clear, concise, and leaves a lasting impression. Use these three steps:

• Summarize the main points of your statement. For example, “My experience volunteering for the school newspaper, along with my communication skills and enthusiasm for writing, make me an ideal student for your university."
• Discuss your future . Share your future ambitions to remind the reader that you’ve carefully considered how the opportunity fits into your plans.
• Include a closing statement. End on a positive note and offer the reader a final explanation for why you would be a great match. For instance, “Thank you for reviewing my statement. I am confident my skills and experience align with the role and your company culture.”

Tip: Learn more about writing an effective conclusion with our handy guide . 

Different types of personal statements

Now you know how to write a personal statement, let’s look at what to focus on depending on your application type.

The length of your personal statement will vary depending on the type. Generally, it should be around 500 words to 650 words . However, a university application is often longer than a statement for a job, so it’s vital to determine what is expected of you from the beginning.

Whatever the length, it’s important to remove and edit content fluff , including any repetition or copy that does not relate to your prompt.

Personal statement checklist

Use this checklist to ensure that your statement includes: 

• An engaging introduction.
• Clear examples of your experiences, skills, and expertise. 
• A commitment to improvement, if required.
• Any applicable achievements. 
• A direct connection to the company or institution’s values.
• A strong conclusion that summarizes information without adding new content.
• Authentic, simple language.

Personal statements are an opportunity to delve deeper and share who you are beyond your grades or resume experience. Demonstrate your ability with anecdotes and examples, address any weaknesses, and remember to use genuine and simple language. This is your place to shine, so follow our tips while displaying your unique personality, and you’ll be sure to stand out from the crowd.

Want to get started and create a powerful introduction? Read our step-by-step guide .

What is the difference between a cover letter and a personal statement?

A cover letter expresses your interest in a position and introduces you to an employer. It’s typically shorter and focuses on your qualifications, skills, and experience for a particular role. A personal statement, however, is common for a job, internship, funding, or university application. It explores your background, goals, and aspirations, as well as your skills and experience.

What is the purpose of a personal statement?

A personal statement is an opportunity to stand out by detailing your background, experiences, and aspirations. It should explain why you are interested in and a good match for the company or institution you are applying to.

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Whether you want to apply to colleges, graduate programs, or competitive jobs, writing a persuasive personal statement will give you a leg up over the other applicants. A personal statement gives you a chance to express your qualifications, motivations, and long-term objectives in a way that gets hiring managers and admissions boards excited to meet you.

No matter why you’re writing a personal statement, we’re here to help you stand out from the crowd.

Key Takeaways:

To write a personal statement, first brainstorm, then narrow down your ideas, and start with an intro that leads into your qualifications.

Make sure to proofread your personal statement before submitting.

Personal statements describe your interests, skills, and goals, with a particular focus on your passion.

Personal statements are typically found in academia, however some professional organizations may also request one.

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A personal statement is a written work that describes your skills, areas of interest, accomplishments, and goals. It is typically included with a college or scholarship application, and sometimes used as part of job applications as well.

Personal statements are a chance for you to show an admissions board or a hiring committee what makes you special outside of your resume . Think of it as an in-depth cover letter where you get to detail not only your skills, but why you’re so passionate about the subject.

Short of an interview, it’s the best way to show your personality in a way that (hopefully) convinces someone to hire or admit you.

When you’re ready to write your statement, there are a few ways you can approach it. We’re going to go over a seven-step process so you can keep your thoughts organized and work through a process. Feel free to switch up the method, so it works for you.

Understand the prompt. Before you put pen to paper, make sure you understand the prompt and what is being asked of you. If there’s a specific set of questions you need to respond to, make sure you frame your thinking that way instead of just choosing a topic.

Brainstorm. Think of some ideas and an outline before you start writing. Consider how you can answer the prompt you’re given and what unique experiences you can bring to the table. The more options you have, the better off you’ll be.

Narrow it down. An excellent way to pick your final approach to draft a statement would be to jot down a few sentences for each idea you had. This helps you tell what topic is easiest to write about or what you feel most confident. No matter how you narrow down your ideas, you need to settle on the strongest one to convey your qualifications.

Start with an intro. Once you’re ready to write, you’ll want to write your opening paragraph first. This is a chance for you to introduce yourself and let people know who you are. Try to keep this paragraph short since it’s just an intro, and you’ll have more space to get into your qualifications in the next paragraph.

Write about your qualifications. When you write about your skills, make sure you align them with the job description or the program’s goals or university.

You can expand this section to a few paragraphs (if word count allows) and be sure to cover your achievements, qualifications, skills, talents, goals, and what you can bring to the program or organization.

One to three body paragraphs should suffice, with scholarship and graduate school personal statements being the longest of the bunch, and job personal statements being the shortest.

Sum up your argument. Your statement is a persuasive argument for why the committee should pick you. It should be a compelling summary of your qualifications, and it should show that you have a clear desire to work for the company.

Proofread. Look for any spelling or grammar errors and check to make sure your writing is clear and concise. Cut out anything that doesn’t fit or help paint a good picture of what kind of student or employee you are. You might want to show your draft to a few people to ensure everything sounds right.

No matter what approach you take to writing your statement, a few things hold. We’ll give you some tips to make your statement stand out from the rest.

Write to your audience. Chances are you have a good idea of who will be reading your application and personal statement, so try to gear your writing toward them. Think of what will persuade or impress them and incorporate that into your writing.

Stay truthful. It might be tempting to exaggerate the truth or smudge a little bit, but make sure you stay truthful. If you claim to have skills or experience that you don’t have and land the job, it might be pretty easy to tell that your writing doesn’t exactly align with your experience.

Tell a story. If you can, try to weave your narrative into a story. Not only will it be more engaging for your reader, but it will also show if you can use your skill to create a story. It doesn’t need to be elaborate, but tying everything together into a narrative will impress your readers.

Use your voice. To make your statement more personal and unique, you should write in your voice. Don’t try to copy examples of statements you find or let your editor drown out what makes you unique. Make sure you keep your personality and qualifications front and center since it’s a personal statement.

Get specific. Instead of generally talking about skills you have, find ways to show your reader when you used those skills. Being specific and giving examples will make your argument more compelling and show your reader that you’re a master.

Use simple language. Since personal statements are so short, it’s not the time for long and complex sentences. Keep it concise and easy to read. You don’t want to risk confusing your reader since committees usually have a few minutes to consider your candidacy, and you don’t want to lose their attention.

Sometimes, especially during the brainstorm process, it can help to ask yourself questions to get your mind focused. These questions can help realize what you want to write in your personal statement.

Some questions you can ask yourself include:

“Why am I interested in this application? What about it makes me want to apply?”

“What are my strengths and weaknesses?”

“What type of work gets me excited and deeply engaged?”

“What is my life story and how does it relate to this application?”

“Where do I want to go?”

“Who do I want to be?”

“What have I learned from my past?”

“How can I explain my past experiences?”

“How would my friends and family describe me to a stranger?”

“What obstacles have I overcome and how does it make me who I am today?”

Asking yourself questions like these will open up your mind to new ideas on how to write your personal statement.

You may need to write a personal statement for a university, scholarship, or job application.

University application. When you’re writing a personal statement for a school application, you’ll usually have a few paragraphs to get your point across. These prompts tend to be more open-ended and give you a chance to explain why you want to attend that school, how you align with their program, and why you are an excellent fit for the school’s culture.

A personal statement for a graduate program needs to be much sharper and more focused. At this point in your education, you’re expected to know precisely where you’d like to turn your academic focus and be able to communicate that efficiently.

Scholarship application. When you need to write a personal statement for a grant or scholarship application, you want to make sure you align your values and purpose with the providers. These can be tricky to write, but they’re like a careful balance between personal statements for school and work.

Job application. For work-related personal statements, you’ll want to focus on your skills and qualifications more than your personality. Employers are more concerned with how you can meet their skill requirements. Professional personal statements tend to be shorter, so there’s less space to talk about anything but your qualifications.

Here are two examples of shorts personal statement for graduate program applications:

From the moment I stepped into the lab, smelled the clean scent of fresh lab coats, and saw the beakers glistening under the light, I felt an excitement to learn that hasn’t left me since. Each time I enter the lab, I feel the same flutter of my heart and a sense of purpose. I want to continue to chase this feeling while contributing to a broader scientific knowledge catalog, which I know the Graduate Biology Program at City University will allow me to do. I want to continue the research I started in college on communicable diseases while gaining a critical education. City University’s program emphasizes in-class and hands-on learning, a perfect combination for my learning style.

As a graduate of State University with a B.S. in Biology, I have the foundation to build my knowledge and experience. While at State University, I worked in a lab researching the efficacy of a new flu vaccine. There, I managed other student researchers, worked as a liaison between the professor running the lab and students and managed the data reports. I am ready to bring my extensive experience to City University classrooms while learning from my peers. I am eager to begin the coursework at City University, and I believe I am uniquely prepared to contribute to the campus culture and research efforts. I look forward to stepping into City University’s lab in the fall and feeling the familiar excitement that drives me to pursue a graduate program and learn more about public health.

If you need to write a professional personal statement, here’s a sample you can model yours after:

As a recent graduate of State University with a B.A. in Communications, I am prepared to take what I have learned in the classroom and bring my work ethic and go-getter attitude to ABC Company. I believe that I have the skills and experience to excel as a Marketing Coordinator from my first day. My classes in Digital Communication, Social Media Marketing, and Business Management and my work as Outreach Chair of the university newspaper have prepared me to take on responsibilities as I learn more about the field. I also believe that my dedication to animal welfare aligns with the ABC Company’s goal of finding loving homes for all of their foster pets and makes me especially interested in this position.

What do I write in a personal statement?

A personal statement should include an introduction, your relevant skills/experiences, and your goals. You want to keep your personal statement relevant for the program or job in question. Make sure to show your passion and indicate what you’d like to do with the degree or opportunity.

How do you start off a personal statement?

Start your personal statement by introducing yourself. Give a brief snapshot of your background that also describes why you’re passionate about this field or area of study in particular. Another powerful way to start off a personal statement is with a significant accomplishment that immediately speaks to your relevant skill set and experience.

What exactly is a personal statement?

A personal statement is a brief statement that sums up your qualifications. A personal statement is a brief written document that university admissions boards, scholarship programs, and sometimes hiring managers require from applicants. A personal statement’s purpose is to show the reader that you are qualified, fully invested in the aims of the program, and have plans for what you would do if granted the opportunity.

How do you write a 500-word personal statement?

To write a 500-word personal statement, start by writing without worrying about the word count. If your personal statement is too long, look for sentences that include skills, experiences, or qualifications that aren’t strictly related to the requirements or aims of the program/job you’re applying for and remove them.

If your personal statement is too short, go back to the program, scholarship, or job description. Make note of the preferred experiences and required skills. For example, if you’ve included a skill in your personal statement without experience to back it up, consider adding a brief story that shows you putting that skill into action.

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Amanda is a writer with experience in various industries, including travel, real estate, and career advice. After taking on internships and entry-level jobs, she is familiar with the job search process and landing that crucial first job. Included in her experience is work at an employer/intern matching startup where she marketed an intern database to employers and supported college interns looking for work experience.

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How to Answer the ‘Tell Me About Yourself’ Job Interview Question (With Examples)

It’s not meant to be a resume review.

The “tell me about yourself” job interview question is not actually a request for you to walk through every item on your resume. Rather, it’s a chance for you to set the stage for the rest of the interview and establish why you’re the right person for the job.

How you respond to the prompt plays a key role in the direction the interview takes. It shapes the interviewer’s perception of your personality, accomplishments and enthusiasm about the position.

3 Steps to Approach the 'Tell Me About Yourself' Question

• Explain why you’re passionate about your specialization or field of study.
• Provide specific examples that illustrate your passion.
• Connect past accomplishments to the potential role.

To give yourself an edge in the interview process, thoughtfully craft a response that’s succinct and yet still provides specific evidence of your qualifications.

Read More 26 Job Interview Tips to Make a Lasting Impression

Why Do Interviewers Ask the ‘Tell Me About Yourself’ Question?

Hiring managers usually ask this question to hear what you’re passionate about and the impact you’ve made in previous positions . While you talk, they’ll be assessing whether your interests and accomplishments are relevant and transferable to the position you’re seeking at their company.

It commonly comes up early in an interview, when hiring managers typically form their first impression of a candidate. Jeremy Schifeling, principal product marketing manager at Khan Academy and former career adviser, said the next 25 minutes of the interview are largely spent “collecting evidence to confirm what I’ve already decided.”

“What seems like a throwaway question to both hiring managers and to job interviewees is actually the exact opposite,” Schifeling said. “It’s probably the most important question in the entire conversation.”

Variations of ‘Tell Me About Yourself’

Sometimes the “tell me about yourself” question will be asked other ways, such as:

• “Tell me about your background.”
• “Walk me through your resume.”
• “Describe yourself.” 
• “I’d love to hear more about your journey/career.” 
• “Tell me something about you that’s not on your resume.” 
• “I have your resume in front of me, but tell me more about yourself.” 

How to Answer ‘Tell Me About Yourself’

To answer “tell me about yourself,” focus on overviewing your present career and passions, highlighting your past experiences and then connecting all of these elements to your future goals. Here’s how to do it step-by-step.  

1. Overview Your Career and Why You’re Passionate About It

When answering this question, begin with a thesis statement that expresses your career holistically and, in particular, why you are passionate about your field or specialization.

2. Highlight Skills and Impact and Provide Examples to Support Them

Next, highlight your skills and the impact you made in your previous roles by providing concrete examples. Use these details to illustrate your career passion and emphasize quantifiable outcomes.

3. Connect Your Career Passion to the Role You’re Applying For

Finally, conclude with a remark that connects your passion and accomplishments to the role you are applying to. Express how your experiences have prepared you to take on a new role, and what you hope to contribute to and gain from it.

How to Structure a Response to ‘Tell Me About Yourself’

The goal is not to ramble, but also not to sound too rehearsed. Instead, devise a brief, purposeful response that offers the interviewer specific examples that relate your passions to the job.

'Tell Me About Yourself' Answer Template

• Open with a brief statement of passion.
• Offer evidence of relevant experience.
• Include concrete details to support your examples.
• Connect examples to the responsibilities of the prospective job.
• Conclude by linking your passion to the company mission and values.

1. Open With a Thesis Statement

Structure the response as a five-paragraph essay — a formula rooted in storytelling, not a regurgitated checklist of resume items.

“I don’t want to give the employer all the messiness of my career,” Schifeling said. “I want to give them a simple story they can grab onto, just like a journalist uses a hook to grab people’s attention.”

The opening sentence operates much like a thesis statement. Here’s what Schifeling might say, were he asked the “tell me about yourself” question in an interview for his current position:

“All my life, I’ve tried to bring two things together: The power of education and technology to help students in need. From the time I was a kindergarten teacher back in Brooklyn, to doing it every day at Khan Academy as a marketer.”

2. Connect Your Passion and Experience to the Job

The passion, evidence and tie back (PET) method is another way to structure a streamlined response to the “tell me about yourself” question.

It’s an interview response technique that begins with a statement of passion, followed by evidence of that passion and a concluding remark that bridges a candidate’s experience with the company’s mission and the duties of the job description. 

PET is similar to the five-paragraph essay, but with the evidence section condensed to emphasize experiences that are highly relevant to the position and that show the candidate’s enthusiasm and energy.

3. Showcase Your Working Style and Values

Jo-Nell Sieren, a career adviser for design, interactive arts and media students at Columbia College in Chicago , coaches candidates to emphasize how their school and professional experiences showcase their individual working styles and values. 

A software engineering or graphic design student who wishes to differentiate themselves might discuss their contributions to a hackathon, game jam or conference panel. A mid-career UX designer seeking to convey their social values might point to a human-centered design project that emphasizes their empathy for end users.

Whatever the case, keep the executive summary of your professional background brief, typically one minute or so.

‘Tell Me About Yourself’ Example Answers

Answering the popular “tell me about yourself” interview question is different for every person, depending on their level of experience, education and desired career. Here are some examples to steer you in the right direction.  

General Example Answer

“When I was studying business in college, I didn’t necessarily see myself working in HR, but I’m grateful my career led me in that direction. Being part of a people management team has given me valuable insight into how to put together an effective support system for employees. I actually spearheaded the effort at my current employer to expand the company’s benefits package. It had been several years since those offerings had been touched, and so I led a project to modernize things, to ensure our employees had access to things like mental health resources and financial support for professional development. I bring a lot of experience and knowledge to the table that I think have thoroughly prepared me for an HR manager job.”

Example Answer for Recent Graduates

“I’m a writer at my core, and my love for storytelling carried from childhood all the way to university. I started studying marketing because I wanted to be able to help craft meaningful brand narratives. In my coursework, I’ve handled dozens of projects focused on content creation, like writing SEO articles and developing video concepts, but I also have real-world experience from my internship. Even though I was the most-junior person on my team, I made some really significant contributions and got to get hands-on with the creative process. Getting that taste of the professional world has me excited to kickstart my career, and I’m hoping your agency will be a good fit for me to continue learning and growing.”

Example Answer for Switching Industries

“I started working in finance straight out of college. I was able to hit the ground running because the hard work I put into my internship as a student luckily paid off and the company that I was with offered me a full-time position. The four years that I’ve spent in this job have helped me hone my analytics and financial forecasting skills. I’ve always been pretty good with numbers, but what’s really given me an edge is taking the time to develop the patience and resourcefulness to communicate what can be incredibly complex information to people who come from all kinds of educational and professional backgrounds. This work has laid the foundation for my career, but I’m ready to branch out and try something new. So I’m looking forward to stepping out of the financial sector and putting those valuable skills to the test in a different kind of industry as a business analyst.”

Example Answer for Experienced Candidates

“I’ve worked in software development for the past decade and have extensive experience in building and deploying mobile apps. In my current position, I led a recent project to launch what has become one of my company’s most successful games on both Android and iOS. Of course it’s been incredibly rewarding to get to participate in software projects that let me stretch my creative muscles, but it’s also felt really great to be growing into my leadership potential. I’ve enjoyed getting to mentor and coach younger developers as I took the reins on guiding some projects to completion. That’s why I’m looking to move into a role with more leadership and management responsibilities.”

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4 Tips for Answering ‘Tell Me About Yourself’

1. don’t just walk through your resume.

The classic misguided advice is to walk hiring managers through your resume. Don’t do it.

“Here’s where I went to school. Here’s what I majored in. Here’s my first job. Here’s my second job,” is a boring way to begin the conversation and comes off cold and like a robot going through the motions, Schifeling said.

2. Ask a Check-In Question to Build Rapport

The “tell me about yourself” question is a great opportunity to ask clarifying questions , Marielle Smith, vice president of people at Narvar , said.

“Did I answer your question? Is there an area you’d like to hear more about? I want to make sure I’m answering your question,” Smith said, suggesting several possible approaches.

Touching base with an interviewer is a good way to tease out which, if any, aspects of your professional story they’re interested in exploring further. It also helps establish rapport, suggesting you are empathetic to their concerns and can communicate efficiently in an office environment.

3. Tell an Anecdote that Hooks the Interviewer

Incorporate a good professional story when answering the “tell me about yourself” question. Consider something with a compelling hook, concrete evidence and a touch of warmth that leaves an indelible impression. 

Hiring managers are more likely to be receptive to a refreshing anecdote that entertains them. Really, the answer is less important than what its delivery conveys about the candidate.

Schifeling and other hiring leaders also advise you to respond succinctly while emphasizing your enthusiasm and value to a potential employer.

4. Own Your Story, Even If You’re a Misfit

Perhaps the key takeaway, Schifeling said, is to own your story. That means being unafraid to put yourself out there, even at the risk of appearing as an outlier for a role.

Schifeling tells the story of an entrepreneur he coached who worked in the online education space, helping photographers grow their businesses. She had an impressive track record as a business owner but initially refrained from sharing it in interviews, for fear her unconventional background would scare off potential employers.

“She was trying to take all this incredible stuff she had done and boil it down to seem safe,” he said. “She was actually ruining all her advantages: Running her own business, managing a [profit and loss] statement. Like, she had been responsible for the success of other people around her but she felt she had to put all that to the side.”

When she reframed her strategy to lead with her experience as a business owner, her luck changed.

“In fact, what she was able to do is not only get a job offer at a super competitive firm in the Denver area, but then go back to her existing employer with that offer, and turn it into a $60,000 promotion,” Schifeling said.

In the end, she chose to tell the interviewer about herself — to own her story — rather than model her response after an imagined “right answer” or a perfect candidate she thought they had in mind. And that’s what made the difference.

Frequently Asked Questions

What is the best answer for "tell me about yourself".

An effective answer for "tell me about yourself" involves:

• Outlining your career and why you're passionate about your field or specialization.
• Using concrete examples to highlight your strengths/skills and the impact you've made in your previous roles.
• Connecting your accomplishments and passions to the role you're applying for now, and emphasizing what you hope to contribute to and gain from the role.

How do I introduce myself in an interview?

When introducing yourself in an interview, do the following:

• Greet your interviewer confidently, introduce yourself with your full name and express that it is nice to meet them.
• Show enthusiasm for discussing the specific role and express gratitude for meeting with your interviewer.
• Briefly go over your current role or degree, background and expertise you can bring to the open role. 

Dawn Kawamoto and Rose Velazquez contributed reporting to this story.

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How to Answer “Tell Me About Yourself” in an Interview (40+ Examples)

It can be daunting to face an interview underprepared, especially when you’re asked the dreaded question, “Tell me about yourself.”

According to experts, there are different ways to answer this question in an interview. 

Here are some excellent examples of how to respond appropriately:

Brian Vander Waal

Employment, Learning and Skills and Careers Information Expert

Approach it as if you’re sharing your personal brand statement or elevator pitch

To answer the question “Tell me About Yourself,” well, it is important to first understand why this question is being asked. A lot of people misunderstand the point of this question .

In part, the interviewer is asking this question to help the interviewee ease into the interview, and so they can ease into the interview themselves. However, it is so much more than that.

The interviewer is asking this question to see if:

• You are qualified for the role ,
• You have the right skills for the role , and
• Whether you will be an asset to the company .

They are also comparing you with other candidates, so you have the opportunity from the beginning of the interview to demonstrate that you are a good match for the role.

The purpose of this question is not :

• To talk about your personal life and interests. If the interviewer does want to know more about this, they will ask a follow-up question.
• To regurgitate your CV, but rather to give a concise summary of your key selling points , which are related to the job role you are applying for. Your response should be between 30 seconds and two minutes long.

When you answer this question, approach it as if you are sharing your personal brand statement, elevator pitch, or infomercial with the interviewer.

However, it should be tailored to the role and should be delivered naturally in a conversational style.

Your answer should concisely highlight:

• Your journey and experience related to the role , talking about your current and previous jobs, and outlining quantifiable achievements in these roles.
• Your USP (two or three unique selling points) related directly to the job role. Your selling points could include skills, strengths, qualifications, and experience.
• Why you are applying for this role and why you want to work for this company. This may include a discussion of your career ambitions.

You should prepare for this question prior to the interview by making a list of the work experiences, soft skills, hard skills, certificates, qualifications, and degrees required for the role.

Then prepare a tailored response to the question highlighting your unique selling points, experience, and interests that relate most closely to the position.

Be aware that, in addition to recruiters asking this question to see if you are a good fit for the role and company, they also ask this question to assess:

• your communication skills ,
• your confidence,
• how well you can think on your feet,
• your self-awareness, and
• authenticity.

“I am a Senior Project Manager with 12 years of experience managing all aspects of Project Management for Fortune 500 companies, including creating project plans, developing resource plans, setting a budget, forming a team, defining goals and performance measures, and anticipating risks.

I started my journey 12 years ago as an Assistant Project Manager and worked my way up the ranks to Project Manager and now Senior Project Manager.

In my current role, I successfully set up seven projects on time, and on budget whilst ensuring I met all project objectives. I was working for a company selling healthcare software in the USA and wanted to break into the international market, starting with the UK.

I was tasked with creating a business and a market for our software in the UK in one of my projects.

During the project, I monitored progress, communication between the teams, risks, and bottlenecks and put in contingency plans as needed.

The result is that 12.2 million in sales were made to the National Healthcare Service (NHS), and 4.2 million in sales were made to private healthcare providers. I graduated from Northwestern University with a Master of Science in Project Management.

Over the past 12 years, I have developed a strong expertise in Critical Thinking, Problem Solving, Risk Management, and Negotiation, which has played a large role in my success on multiple projects. While I love my current position, I am looking for an opportunity to take the next step in my career.

I believe the experience I gained and the success I have achieved on high-level, complex projects make me uniquely qualified to progress into your role as a Director of Program Management.”

Commentary on the example :

This is a strong example of how to respond to this question successfully. The interviewee concisely outlined their journey and experience related to the role, quantifiable achievements in these roles, their USP related to the job role, and why they are applying for this role.

The interviewee did not talk about personal life and interests, recite back their full CV, or discuss problems or issues with their previous employer.

Whitney D. Walter, MBA

Professional Development Expert

Discuss why you’re a good fit for the intended position

First, remember that they likely have your resume in front of them, so you don’t need to regurgitate what is written there or go into any extreme level of detail.

Start by discussing your current role and any skills or responsibilities that make you a good fit for the intended position. Don’t forget to mention relevant achievements or awards.

Summarize while providing a high-level overview of prior experience

Next, provide a high-level overview of prior experience. Again, avoid going into excessive detail. Summarize and be succinct while also providing color around the development of skillsets that will be applicable to the prospective role.

Avoid speaking negatively about prior companies or roles. Doing so will reflect more poorly on you than them.

Showcase your passion for professional development

Finally, transition to your current career aspirations and why you’re excited about the opportunity to discuss the open role. Use this as an opportunity to showcase your passion for professional development and your focus on finding a role that allows you to add value.

Gauge whether incorporating interests outside of work will allow you to be better aligned with the company culture and values. This is a frequently debated topic.

Many say to exclude personal interests completely, but with the rise of the company focus on employee satisfaction, it may be worth briefly mentioning things that align with their current employee benefits or programs.

For example, if you enjoy fitness and the prospective company offers to pay for employees’ gym memberships, mentioning this may help you to appear more aligned with the company’s initiative to increase and maintain employee satisfaction.

Practice your response.

This question (and its many variations) is the most frequently asked question in interviews. Practice your answer until you can say it naturally and without hesitation.

Daniel Cook

Director HR, Mullen and Mullen

Pick a couple of personal experiences that relate to the job role you are applying for

When you are interviewing for a company, the one question you will most likely be asked is, “Tell me about yourself.”

As a recruiter, I have seen some candidates answer this question brilliantly, and they make their case strong from the first answer. I believe you should be structuring your answer instead of telling an entire story about yourself.

When telling the interviewer about yourself, you should begin with giving a personal introduction by summarizing your personal interests and characteristics.

After talking about that briefly, you should give a brief summary of your professional life .

While talking about your professional life is important, you should focus on not going into too many details. Therefore, I would recommend you pick a couple of experiences that relate to the job role you are applying for because that would add to your profile.

Moreover, you should always end the answer with an interesting fact about you that would make the interviewer remember you and differentiate you from other candidates.

Related: How to Come up With Interesting Facts About Yourself

Valerie Fontaine

Legal Search Consultant | Founding Member, SeltzerFontaine LLC

Focus on the clear benefit you provide to a prospective employer

When prospective employers start their interview with “Tell me about yourself,” they really are asking, “Why should we hire you?”

Rather than responding with your life history, this is your opportunity to give your “sales pitch.” You want to communicate who you are, what you do, what differentiates you from the competition, and how you are a better fit than other candidates for the position.

Be prepared with a short statement (not more than two minutes or so), highlighting a few of your strongest skills related to the position you’re seeking, and give specific examples.

The trick is to focus on the clear benefit you provide to a prospective employer.

Get a general idea of the skills and attributes required for the type of position you seek

Think of yourself as a product and the employers as the buyers of your skill set. You’re selling your unique blend of qualifications, talents, expertise, and accomplishments.

Start by reading job listings and descriptions on company websites to get a general idea of the skills and attributes required for the type of position you seek.

Notice the language they use and repeat that terminology when describing what you have to offer a potential employer.

Related: Why Are Job Descriptions Important in the Recruiting Process?

Check if you have any skills or interests that could prove useful

Consider whether you have any tangential skills or interests that could prove useful to the employer in addition to the minimum education and experience required.

If you’re pursuing a second career or taking time out to pursue another occupational direction, such as writing, teaching, or running a business, discuss how honing the skills required to succeed in that endeavor adds value to the job you now seek.

Tell a consistent and easily understood story of your career trajectory

Practice responding with vivid examples of how you used your strengths to achieve business objectives similar to those of the prospective employer.

• Tell a consistent and easily understood story of your career trajectory,
• State only the relevant information, prioritizing your transferrable skills.
• Minimize any non-related information.
• Focus and tailor each presentation for the position you seek.

When responding to “Tell me about yourself,” if you put the puzzle pieces together for your interviewers, you’ll make it easier for them to envision you in the position—and offer you the job.

Managing Director, WebSpero Solutions

Give them reasons why they should prefer you instead of other candidates

I have taken many interviews to hire people for my company . “Tell me about yourself” is the first question asked to every interviewee.

It is a bit tricky question to answer, but some of the suggestions on how to tackle this question will be:

• Don’t start with the things which are already mentioned in your resume . An interviewer can read it himself.
• They want to know something different from the information mentioned in your resume, for instance, why this job is most important for you .
• Give them reasons why they should prefer you instead of other candidates .
• Tell them how you fit the role completely by aligning your qualification , experience , and skills with the job you have applied for.
• When you start talking about yourself, be humble about your achievements and don’t boast about your accomplishments .
• Be honest about yourself, and don’t lie about your hobbies and skills .
• Don’t use superlatives like best , perfect , etc.
• Anxiety before and during an interview is normal . So practice daily for it and be confident when interview day arrives.

Related: How to Not Be Nervous Before and During a Job Interview

“Hi, I am Rahul. I have two years of experience handling sales and marketing projects in [name of the company]. The purpose of switching from the earlier company is that I have learned everything that I could to the best of my ability. So now I want to learn more things and explore the new turfs.”

“Hi, I am Jacob. I have recently completed my Post Graduation in Computer Sciences. Due to my keen interest in this field, I have been able to win many laurels and awards. Thus able to represent my college in many competitions. Now I want to put my knowledge to practice, boost my self-confidence, and make the organization proud I work with.”

Chris Lewandowski

President, Princess Dental Staffing

Give hiring managers an idea of how you can become an asset to them if they hire you

Your “Tell me about yourself” answer can begin with you highlighting how long you’ve been in the industry to quantify your experience. Then, explain your current role and contributions to the company relevant to the new post you’re pursuing.

For example:

• Discuss how you managed to reduce your project’s lead time due to productivity and efficiency or how you secured more clients for the brand.
• Accordingly, it is worth mentioning if you have exceeded KPIs and client expectations in your current workplace.
• Then, highlight the skills you possess that allow you to thrive in your career.

By doing so, you give hiring managers an idea of how your experience and qualifications can become an asset to them if they hire you.

Make the idea personal and unique

Also, to stand out among other candidates, offer a unique detail about yourself . For instance, if you’re a marketer, you may want to discuss successful projects with famous brands or partnerships with well-known public figures.

In addition, it helps if you could share some personal interests , such as advocating for specific causes or learning pottery, but always maintain a professional tone.

Lastly, don’t forget to mention your career goals for the future . Make sure you did your prior research about the prospect company’s mission , vision , and core values to align your goals to that of the business.

Lanny Tuchmayer

Director of Operations, Bergel Law

Choose where you want to begin telling your story about yourself

Allow some time before answering this question to consider where you might begin telling about yourself. You should think that your answer to this question will determine the following question you will be asked.

Emphasize your accomplishments and experience

When responding to this question, strive to emphasize your accomplishments and experience. However, all of this should be done in the context of a dialogue. It will make a favorable impression on the interviewer.

Discuss your current condition and long-term objectives

When you’re about to finish your response, think about your current circumstances and where you envision yourself in the future or what your aim is. It will assist the interviewer in understanding how you intend to achieve your objectives and plan for the future.

“When I’m not working, I enjoy learning new skills and spending the majority of my time reading books. Reading books about human psychology is one of my favorite pastimes. Learning about human psychology aided me in influencing others.

I enjoy meeting new people and consider communication to be one of the most crucial components of working life. When I first started working for my former employer, my duty was to communicate with the company’s clients and assist them in finding answers to their difficulties.

I liked assisting them and resolving their problems. Now I’m seeking more possibilities to broaden my knowledge and skills in interpersonal communication.”

Biron Clark

Former Executive Recruiter | Founder, CareerSidekick

Keep your answer work-related

First, keep your answer work-related. When the interviewer asks this question, they’re looking to learn about you as a professional.

To answer, explain :

• How you got started in your current line of work ,
• What you’ve been focused on throughout your career , and
• Any key accomplishments or significant projects you’ve worked on .

Then, end by explaining what you’re looking to do next in your career . Why are you job searching now, and why did this particular position interest you?

“I began working in software engineering seven years ago after completing my degree in computer science.

I’ve spent most of my time creating back-end systems for processing data and transactions, both for banks and online stores.

I’m now looking for a Senior Developer position to advance my career. I’m happy in my current company but also feel ready for a new challenge, so when I saw this position posted online, I knew I should apply.”

Carol Gee, MA

Owner,  Venus Chronicles  | Author, “ Telling Stories, Sharing Confidences “

Show that you are a well-rounded candidate

All of the jobs I interviewed for were after I had served in the Air Force. I usually led with that when different variations were based on the position.

For example, when I interviewed to become an adjunct faculty at a two-year college , my answer was this:

“I served almost eight years on active duty in the Air Force, and I am married to a career airman. Most recently, I completed my master’s degree in Human Relations and Management.

With an undergrad degree in Sociology and a minor in psychology, I believe I am the right person to teach your Intro to Sociology, and because I am imaginative and crafty and possess good personal communication skills, I think I could do justice to the introduction to Business Comm class.”

One component of the class consisted of teaching public speaking to students.

To ease them into this, I put simple topics on slips of paper, like your favorite food, favorite movie, etc., in a paper bag where they drew a topic and spoke for one minute, two minutes, up to five minutes. Students said this was a great way to introduce them to this.

When I was interviewed for my last university position as an editor at a local business school before retiring, I answered thusly:

“Before applying to this position, I was employed at XYX Nursing School (same campus), where I worked in Development (fundraising), assisting the director with hosting fundraising lunches and dinners. I planned menus and worked with caterers to plan meals for donors, including foundation and corporation heads.

I also scheduled fundraising appointments for the directors to visit donors and processed money received. This job was followed by nearly 13 years at the School of Public Health, where I ran the day-to-day of a department that included supervision of staff and student workers.”

As the job required copyediting research, I mentioned I was a published author and freelance writer and that I also had a master’s degree as this was a business school.

Lastly, I mentioned I had excellent research skills as I did technical research during my 21 years in the military. (I brought samples of published articles to the interview, one of which was a business article in a local magazine.

My goal was to show that I was a well-rounded candidate .

Adina David

Recruiter and Career Coach , Paperjobz

This question asking to describe yourself may seem like an easy enough question, but many people are put off by it because they don’t know where to start or what to say.

In fact, many candidates forget their manners and simply ramble on about themselves, never really giving any answer at all!

When recruiters ask “Tell Me About Yourself,” they are trying to get a sense of what it is that the candidate does and how he will fit into the company. They want to know about your experience and achievement.

It can be difficult to answer this question without sounding like you’re bragging, but there are a few tips to approach it.

Adjust your answers as per the situation

Pay attention to the nature of the job and organization you’re interviewing for and adjust your answers as per the situation.

For example, if you’re interviewing with a software company and they are definitely interested in your strong programming skills.

Focus on strengths and abilities; don’t ever talk about your weaknesses

When you’re talking to the interviewer, concentrate on your strengths and what you can do best.

Don’t ever talk about your weaknesses (unless they ask). You can play it safe by mentioning that you are a self-starter and motivated when it comes to completing tasks.

Related: Best Job Interview List of Strengths and Weaknesses

Highlight your personality and how you’ve done well in previous roles

Be honest, but try not to sound like you’re trying to sell yourself!

This is a good opportunity to talk about your background, how you’ve done well in previous roles, and the skills that you would bring to this role.

Act professionally: This is a great way to have them see you in a different light

Act like you are the best candidate for this job. This is a great way to have someone see you in a different light. So, be confident and approachable.

This is not a magic formula, but it is a great way to give yourself the best chance of getting the job. As long as you just keep practicing, success will come to you.

So there are a lot of ways to answer this question, but here are some of my favorite answers for both freshers as well as experienced professionals.

Example answer for freshers :

“I completed my bachelor’s from XYZ college. I then searched for a job for about six months. This is something that I am very proud of.

During my spare time, I work on my skills and get more experience. After that, I found your company, and I applied for the [Position Name] position. This job is perfect for me, and it will allow me to use the skills gained from my education.

I am looking forward to working with you. I can work hard, learn new things and contribute to the team.”

Example answer for experienced professionals :

“I have experience in [Field Name], and I love using my talent and skills for solving problems and making improvements. I can do so by listening carefully, gathering information, understanding needs, and finding solutions.

I always go the extra mile in my job, even to the point of going above and beyond my responsibilities. I hope to become a part of your team because I am really ready to take my career to the next level.”

Maciek Kubiak

Head of People, PhotoAiD

Give the interviewer a snapshot of who you are professionally and personally

That question is definitely difficult to answer. “Tell me about yourself” is often the first question asked in an interview. It’s a broad question, and your answer should aim to give the interviewer a snapshot of who you are as a person, both professionally and personally.

Your response should tell a story that gives an overview of your professional and educational background, as well as your skills and accomplishments.

The key is to stay focused on giving the interviewer the information they need to decide whether or not you’re the right candidate for the job.

Here are some tips on how to answer “Tell me about yourself” in an interview:

• Start by giving a brief overview of your professional experience, emphasizing any relevant skills or experience that you have.
• Describe how you would qualify yourself in terms of broad professional and personal traits. This includes being flexible , goal-driven , ambitious , and so on.
• Finish by summarizing your goals and objectives and explaining why you are interested in the position you are being interviewed for.

Here is an example :

“I am a strategic planner with five years of experience in market research and brand strategy. I thrive in fast-paced environments and am always looking for new challenges.

I see myself as a problem solver who can think outside the box to come up with creative solutions. And I’m excited about this opportunity because it matches my skill set and the experience I’ve accumulated up to now.”

Catherine van Vonno

President and CEO, 20four7VA

It’s important to have a clear goal in mind when talking about yourself

Telling people about yourself can sometimes be the hardest topic to talk about. Things such as what you are going to tell them or how you will say it can play a big role in how the conversation will flow.

Not to mention, you would need to make your dialogue interesting and insightful for the interviewer.

When talking about yourself, ensure that you can clearly relay the points you want to discuss and elaborate on.

• Eliminate the fluff in your storytelling and emphasize how you can contribute to the company’s well-being.
• When talking about yourself in an interview, you have to be transparent and as confident as you can be.
• Being clear and confident with your life story can help you stay in control of the conversation and show that you can make wise decisions.
• You can start by creating a rough outline of your journey.

Think about the critical milestones in your life and how these events have shaped who you are today. Once you have an idea of what to say, practice it aloud with close friends or family members to make sure that everything is clear and well-articulated.

When speaking about yourself, always be honest and authentic. The interviewer will likely be able to see through any facade you put up, so it is best just to be yourself.

Next, it is important to have a clear goal in mind when talking about yourself . Often, interviewers will ask you about your motivations and long-term goals for the company, so make sure that you have a solid answer lined up.

You can also do some research on the company beforehand to see if you share any common interests.

For example, if you are both passionate about environmental sustainability , you can mention how you would love to help the company achieve its green goals.

Lastly, always remember to end on a positive note . Thank the interviewer for their time and express your excitement for the opportunity. This will leave a good impression and show that you are genuinely interested in the position.

Lee Cristina Beaser, CPRW

Master’s in Career Counseling | Career Coach, The Career Counter

Discuss your most recent experience and how it led you to apply for the position

Candidates tend to ramble and get off-topic. I always stress that the interviewer does not want to know your life story. They want to know what led you to apply for the job.

I’ve got a framework I encourage my clients to use for answering this question.

First, try to keep your answer under two minutes. Start by giving a brief snapshot of the early stages of your career, connecting the skills and experiences you gained that led you toward the job you’re applying for.

Lastly, discuss your most recent experience, what you learned, and how it led you to apply for the position.

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Here’s a sample answer:

“I got my BA degree in Communications, and during my studies, I completed fieldwork that allowed me to build my project management and event coordination skills. After graduation, I worked for four years as an event coordinator for a large corporation.

During that time, I helped plan and execute small to large-scale events with upwards of 50,000 attendees. Most recently, I was promoted to the same company as an event manager.

For the past several years, I’ve overseen events with $1M budgets, as well as an event staff of 20. My passion for managing projects and leading cross-functional teams in executing large-scale events is what led me to apply for the event director role.”

Brett Larkin

Founder & CEO, Uplifted Yoga

Sell yourself beyond specific industry skills or relevant past experiences

Many people who spend their time job-hunting tend to put their entire focus on the actual position they’re vying for, and not how their skills and personality fit that position.

Remember, recruiters are looking for people who can:

• Succeed based on the job requirements, and
• Bring a positive and open energy into the workplace.

Especially since the pandemic, businesses are prioritizing the overall employee experience in an attempt to boost retention. Bringing a new person into the workplace can seriously shift the dynamic and culture, so personality is just as important as skill or talent.

This is why the question, “Tell me about yourself,” is so important. This is your opportunity to sell yourself beyond specific industry skills or relevant past experiences.

Here are some ways to answer that question if you’re feeling stuck:

• Discuss your hobbies

Focus on one specific hobby. We all have hobbies, and if you don’t, you should get one! Hobbies are fantastic representations of our personalities and preferences beyond the business world.

Instead of trying to get as much information out as possible, focus on one specific activity or hobby that makes up a large part of your personal life.

Focusing on a hobby provides perfect segues to talk about your family, educational experience, or even what you were like growing up.

• Honesty is key

Just be honest. Answer the question for face value, and don’t try to twist your answer back to being about the company or the position you’re interviewing for.

Remember, the people who are hiring you actually want to know you .

An honest, real answer will go over way better than something that is overly planned and not related to the actual question.

• Use your cover letter

Don’t be afraid to talk about yourself in your initial cover letter and application. People often write cover letters that are too formal, and they just come across as walls of text and rambling to recruiters, including myself.

When I’m reading a cover letter, I want to get an idea of who this person is beyond them wanting this job. Be more creative with your cover letters. In today’s hyper-competitive business world , a little creativity can go a long way in setting you apart from your competitors.

Related: What Is the Purpose of a Cover Letter When Applying for a Job

David Chen, DDS

Practicing Dentist, Jackson Ave Dental

Every office that I’ve worked at had a monthly production goal plastered to the wall of the break room and that number was the metric for success. Whenever situations arise where we would have to choose between the number or the well-being of an employee, the former would always prevail.

I’ve always believed that it was the people who were the business’s greatest asset but business decisions always made it appear otherwise.

I’ve always wondered why that was the case and why it was done that way.

• Could it be possible to do things differently?
• Can we build a place where we put our staff first and still flourish as a business?

I’ve spent the last 5 years of my life in an attempt to answer that singular question.

How you should answer it should be more akin to writing a personal statement

The vast majority of people are trying to answer this question, when in fact it is not even a question. It is technically a directive statement. How you should answer it should be more akin to writing a personal statement.

If you’ve applied for higher education, they expect you to write a one and a half-page response to two words with no further instructions. Personal statement.

My tip for how to answer it:

Do not rehash what is in your resume because if your interviewer wanted to know that, they would simply read it. What they actually want to know is more about you and at a deeper level.

More precisely, you can rephrase the statement into a question and that would be:

“Who are you? What drives you and what makes you you?”

Alan Ahdoot

Legal Specialist, Adamson Ahdoot LLP

Be a candidate who will readily and eagerly join in their efforts and is in line with their principles

I like to hear responses that speak to a person’s desire to help the less fortunate because that is a big part of our mission. I want the comfort of knowing that their pursuits square up with ours .

We operate in a space in which people can easily prejudge us as ambulance chasers or attorneys who are out to get quick bucks out of insurance companies and other plaintiffs with deep pockets.

We are a reputable firm that seeks to help the underprivileged. We consider it an honor to represent honest-working people who are, in many cases, immigrants seeking a better life.

We look for people who fit in well with our culture, and we expect to hear responses to “Tell Me About Yourself” to be framed in a way that makes us believe we’re talking to a candidate who understands the importance of pursuing justice for the disadvantaged and disenfranchised.

So many of our attorneys and employees are active in the Latino, African-American, Jewish and Middle-Eastern communities. We want candidates who will readily and eagerly join us in those efforts.

It comforts us when we hear responses that are in line with our principles.

AJ Silberman-Moffitt

Senior Editor, Tandem

As an office professional with 25+ years of experience, I have been a part of many interviews—both when I have been the interviewer and when I have been the interviewee.

As with many work-related questions, there isn’t only one right or wrong answer—especially when trying to find the best way to answer “Tell me about yourself” in an interview.

Be honest; don’t say something that isn’t true

You’ve probably repeatedly heard that honesty is the best policy, and there is a reason for that. When answering about yourself, or any question during an interview, it’s best to be honest.

This doesn’t mean that you must go into minute details about everything, but more importantly, don’t say something that isn’t true.

Related: What Not to Say in a Job Interview

Be concise; try to keep your answer to the point

Try to keep your answer short and to the point. If the interviewer needs you to elaborate, they will ask you. There is no need to give extensive details unless you are specifically asked to.

Direct your answer towards your professional accomplishments and abilities

Typically, during most of the interview, the interviewer wants to garner how much knowledge you have about the role they are trying to fill.

This means that your answer should probably be directed more towards your professional accomplishments and abilities rather than your personal life.

If, however, it’s the end of the interview, this would be an appropriate time to elaborate about the softball team that you are on or the crafting that you do on the weekends.

Be courteous; do not interrupt the interviewer while you’re being questioned

Do your best not to interrupt the interviewer while you are being questioned. If the interviewer happens to accidentally talk over you while you are answering, let them interject and answer appropriately.

Remember, first impressions are lasting impressions, and, in addition to your skills, your attitude will also go a long way in landing you the perfect job.

Entrepreneur | CEO, Champion Leadership Group LLC

Managers would like to hear an overview of your professional background

First of all, don’t go into great detail about your profession or personal life with them.

It could seem logical to commence from the beginning and guide the recruiter through your professional experience, but this is not something I encourage.

Managers aren’t interested in hearing about your personal history, and they aren’t fascinated by every job you’ve ever had.

They really would like to hear an overview of your professional background.

Stressing any particular career transitions which need explanation, concentrating on some of the most significant or recent responsibilities, essential abilities that you have gained, as well as every notable accomplishment that is a tribute to the excellent work that you have accomplished.

 Mark Valderrama

CEO and Founder, Aquarium Store Depot

Correctly structure your response

I would say that you should begin by summarising your current or most recent experience.

Explain the many chapters or major positions in your career, focusing on the recent five to ten years, for the ‘past’ component of the formula.

Concentrate on what you’ve learned that applies to the position you’re applying for.

• What was the purpose of this position?
• What were the primary responsibilities? What were your greatest accomplishments?
• Why then did you move on to the next critical phase or role?

Additionally, you might quickly explain any unexpected career choices or employment changes that may not be immediately apparent.

This is critical for prospective employers, especially if the employment was brief. Then proceed to the future.

Justify your next move by describing what you’re seeking and why the role they’re offering is such a wonderful fit for your talents and experience. Additionally, highlight how the company’s ideals connect with your own.

Sales Director,  VEM Tooling

Work experience should account for around 80% of your response

Work should account for around 80% of your response. It would be best to concentrate on your previous experience and accomplishments here, while the next 10-15% of your answer should be about your academic background. Finally, the last 5-10% should focus on you while remaining relevant to the company.

A possible response from a seasoned professional may be:

“Sure, I’d be delighted to. For the past eight years, I’ve worked as a tech-focused project manager. I earned a bachelor’s degree in business administration with a minor in computer science from University B. Following that, I began working in the sector as an executive assistant at Company D.

I offered business support services by assisting with interdepartmental communication, scheduling, and maintaining the digital filing system.

After that, I spent roughly five years as a project manager for Company A, a cloud computing solutions provider. There, I was in charge of four software project teams and ensured that everything ran smoothly regarding business objectives, timelines, budget, and other factors.

I like to read about robotics, AI, and technology. I figured I’d apply because you guys do all three.”

Kavin Patel

Founder and CEO , Convrrt

Make sure you explain why you want this particular job

I believe the ideal technique to answer, “Tell me about yourself” is to make sure you explain why you want this particular job and how you’re qualified for it in a brief and clear manner.

Spend some time reading through the job description in the recruitment ad for the position and researching the organization before you start constructing your selling points.

Then you’ll know exactly what qualifications the hiring manager is seeking in terms of education and work experience.

A short script outlining your relevant abilities , strengths , and areas of knowledge should next be written. If you’re interested in advancing your career or taking on new responsibilities, talk about why you seek the position in your cover letter.

Finish with a sentence or two describing why you want to work for this particular organization.

Owner and CEO, First Day

Don’t dread the interview

When you’re asked “Tell me about yourself” in an interview, it’s natural to dread answering it correctly, but only if you don’t know what’s the right way to respond.

Truth is there’s no single best answer to this open-ended question that the interviewer asks to get to know what kind of a person you are and to break the ice as well before delving into detail-oriented questions.

Tailor your answer and practice it

Depending upon where you are in your professional journey, you have to tailor your answer in a way that actually meets the employer’s needs .

You could be a student about to graduate, a mother who took a break from a career, or a mid-level professional who has a decade of experience or more. So in each scenario, your answer will have to be different.

Following is a comprehensive example on how to answer this question the right way:

If you are a student about to graduate , you can say:

“I graduated with a degree in XYZ recently and the reason I chose this field is because I was interested in __ _ and since childhood.

Some people told me that this field could lead to great career opportunities and one of my accomplishments is that I am really proud of this project dealing with ___ during my internship at ___.

I also got to speak about it at a conference last week which was an amazing experience as well. I just got done with this internship so I am now looking for full-time opportunities.”

As you can see from this answer, it’s clear and concise . There are no ramblings. The answer addresses every aspect an interviewer might be interested in and it follows the past present future format that’s easy to follow.

Designer | Founder, Everwallpaper

Job interview questions such as “Tell me about yourself” are very sure to come up in most job screenings, regardless of your profession, your levels of expertise, or the nature of the job.

Because it is often the first question asked during an interview, it is your best opportunity to create an excellent first impression .

Now that you know what to expect, here’s how to nail your first significant interview question.

Related: How to Nail a Job Interview

Make a positive first impression when you engage

Your first paragraph should act as a foundation for who you are as a professional, a summary declaration highlighting your accomplishments while also providing a glimpse into your personality.

Sell your knowledge and experience

You’re mistaken if you think the interviewer has thoroughly studied your résumé and understands your credentials. Use your impromptu speech to quickly emphasize at least two to four things that distinguish and separate you from the competition.

Provide a clear statement of your goals with the company

Finally, explain why you are the perfect candidate for the role and how they can benefit from your expertise.

Content Marketing Specialist,  Drive Research

Practice out loud what you’ll say

It’s totally normal to feel a little uneasy answering this question. However, if you prep for this question—even just a little bit—before your interview, you’ll be far less stressed.

Here are a couple of tips to follow to prepare for this question:

• Even though you obviously know who you are, it’s easy to blank out on basic info.
• Jot down where you’re from, a brief educational and professional background, and maybe even a hobby you enjoy.
• You want to make sure you don’t answer for too long or short of time.

Consider this checklist when utilizing the above tips:

• Where did you go to school?
• What key skills did you gain from your courses?
• What did you learn in your job and/or internship experiences?
• What are certain hobbies you like to do outside of school/work?

Samantha Odo

Licensed Real Estate Expert, Precondo

Talk about your interests and hobbies; these can explain a lot about your characteristics

The statement “Tell me about yourself” can ask for many different things depending on who is asking them. A new acquaintance might want to know your general likes and dislikes, but an employer would want to gauge why you would be the perfect fit for the job they have to offer.

You do not need to talk about your academic and career achievements to prove something. Instead, you would be talking about your interests and hobbies.

Whether you like reading in your free time or if solving puzzles is your favorite past-time. Do you take an interest in volunteer work?

Things like these explain a lot about your characteristics .

• Having a habit of reading books can lead to the inference that you are open to looking at things from a different viewpoint.
• Having an interest in volunteering can show that you are interested in contributing to the welfare of others, something that will be required in a lot of jobs.
• Being a puzzle enthusiast means you are good at brainstorming and can develop out-of-the-box solutions.

Related: Why Are Books Important?

Usually, recruiters would try to test if you are speaking the truth.

Maybe, they would ask you about your favorite book or which social cause you are most drawn to. Or, maybe, they would give you a real-life problem to provide a solution for in minutes.

It is, therefore, important to be truthful with your answer. And your selection depends on the positive habits you instill in yourself, which takes years.

An example can be:

“I like to go out on a walk with my dog, Jerry, when I am done with my work. Often, there are lots of dog-lovers who enthusiastically come to talk to me and coo at Jerry.

It is always fascinating to see how many directions conversations arise from my dog can take. I believe these experiences have been helpful to my profession, which has always required me to have impeccable communication skills.”

Nathan Hughes

Marketing Director, Diggity Marketing

It’s advisable to speak about how you view your career goals

Recruiters wish to know details about your life that are not a part of your resume.

These details border your personal life, but the twist is that they must be helpful to understand your capabilities. However, it is often daunting to choose which aspect to speak on.

Under such circumstances, it is advisable to speak about how you view your career goals .

It is a more direct approach to the question, and it also provides the recruiters with what they need about you.

• You can talk about where you are in your career now and which of your personal interests have led you to choose the career you have.
• You can brief the recruiter on which of your past experiences have hugely impacted your career.
• It is a good idea to end such a description with where you see yourself in the future.
• It is important to make sure that anything you answer aligns with the job you are applying for.

Recruiters often follow up your replies with much deeper questions.

For example, if you talk about how your interest in coding led to you wanting to become a data scientist, the recruiter might naturally ask you why data science was a choice and not any other coding-related profession.

It is necessary for applicants to consider such follow-up questions and keep answers ready beforehand. Being genuine about the answers would make the process a lot easier.

“In my younger days, how consumers chose one brand over other similar ones was an interesting concept to me. There was never a size-one-fit-all approach by brands, but it needed them to experiment with different strategies.

Only a few of those strategies would work the best for them, and it was fascinating to understand the reason behind them.

Working as a marketing team leader for (name of a brand working for which was impactful) was a huge milestone, teaching me more than just marketing strategies and consumer behavior, but team management.

Such an experience built a goal that I wish to fulfill soon- becoming an efficient marketing manager in a reputed organization such as (the name of the company you are interviewing at).”

Craig Miller

Co-Founder, Academia Labs LLC

Highlight your academic and career achievements

When answering a “Tell Me About Yourself” question during an interview, do not start telling the interview panel details from your elementary days.

Instead, highlight your academic and career achievements. This will give more emphasis on why you are perfect for the job.

Here’s an example:

“I am (Name). I finished my tertiary education in (University or College Name) and completed my internship at (Company name).

I also have worked in (Previous company) for (number) years. During my stay there, I have demonstrated a great deal of leadership and resourcefulness in completing my tasks.

I have spearheaded several projects, such as (Project name), which produced great results (You can describe the project in detail here). During my free time, I enjoy (hobbies).”

Adelle Archer

Co-Founder and CEO, Eterneva

Develop an elevator pitch telling how others perceive you and your track record as an employee

Although it seems like a straightforward question, the “Tell me about yourself” interview query is really a test to see how organized and clear thinking you are, which is why your first consideration should be succinctness.

No one expects you to cover the full scope of your life or even your career in a single interview, but they do want to see how personable and informative you can be in a short period of time.

You must develop an elevator pitch that tells what you have been doing, how others perceive you, your career goals and interests, strengths, and your track record as an employee .

By creating a concise elevator pitch in which you can cover all the bases, quickly, clearly, and in a positive manner, you will be demonstrating your abilities to cover the task and do so economically and professionally .

Yauhen Zaremba

Director of Demand Generation, Pandadoc

Be conversational: It’s a good way to keep things light

Don’t answer it as if it’s scripted and don’t focus solely on things related to business and the work you do. Instead, create a conversation and chat with the interviewer .

Talk about relevant things that they know about or can relate to; give them a chance to respond to what you’re saying, and don’t script anything .

Being able to converse with the interviewer and keeping things relaxed are good ways to keep things light. Answering “Tell me about yourself” with some nice conversation is a great way to open the interview and get in the interviewer’s good graces!

Frequently Asked Questions

How can i use the star method to respond to the “tell me about yourself” question.

The STAR method is a great way to structure your response to the “Tell me about yourself” question. Learn how to use it here:

Situation:  Start by giving a brief overview of your current position and the company you work for. This sets the stage for your work experience and helps the interviewer understand your current situation.

Task:  Next, explain what your tasks are and what you’re responsible for. This will give the interviewer a clear picture of your skills and experience.

Action:  Give concrete examples of how you have used your skills to achieve specific goals or complete tasks. Be sure to use “I” statements to show your direct involvement.

Result:  Conclude by explaining what the result of your actions was. Remember to highlight successes and accomplishments and explain how they benefited the company.

Here is an example of how you might use the STAR method to answer the “Tell me about yourself” question:

Situation: “I’m currently a software engineer at XYZ Company, where I’ve worked for the past three years.”

Task: “My main responsibilities include developing and testing software applications, collaborating with other team members on coding projects, and ensuring that our software is high quality and meets customer needs.”

Action: “Recently, I led a team in the development of a new software application that streamlined our client onboarding process. I was responsible for coordinating with other team members to ensure the application was delivered on time and met all of our quality standards. I also worked closely with the product manager to ensure the application met our customers’ needs.”

Result: “Thanks to our work, we were able to reduce the time it takes to onboard new clients by 50%, which positively impacted our revenue and customer satisfaction. I look forward to continuing to develop new software solutions and drive innovation in my next role.”

Using the STAR method, you can provide a clear and structured response to the “Tell me about yourself” question highlighting your skills and successes.

What Are Some Common Variations of “Tell Me About Yourself” That I May Hear in an Interview?

“Tell me about yourself” is a common interview question, but you might hear many variations of this question. Here are a few examples:

“Walk me through your resume”: This is a more specific version of the “Tell me about yourself” question, which asks you to go through your work experience chronologically.

“What led you to apply for this job?”: This question asks you to explain why you’re interested in the job you’re applying for and what attracts you to the company.

“What are your strengths and weaknesses?”: This is a variation of the “Tell me about yourself” question, where you should focus specifically on your strengths and weaknesses.

“How would your colleagues describe you?”: This question asks you to think about how others perceive you professionally.

“What are your long-term career goals?”: This question asks you to explain how you envision your professional future and your goals.

Although the wording of these questions varies, they all allow you to showcase your professional self and why you’re a good fit for the job. Preparing and practicing your answers to these variations of the “Tell me about yourself” question can help you feel more confident and prepared for your interview.

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How to Write Your Personal Statement | Strategies & Examples

Published on February 12, 2019 by Shona McCombes . Revised on July 3, 2023.

A personal statement is a short essay of around 500–1,000 words, in which you tell a compelling story about who you are, what drives you, and why you’re applying.

To write a successful personal statement for a graduate school application , don’t just summarize your experience; instead, craft a focused narrative in your own voice. Aim to demonstrate three things:

• Your personality: what are your interests, values, and motivations?
• Your talents: what can you bring to the program?
• Your goals: what do you hope the program will do for you?

This article guides you through some winning strategies to build a strong, well-structured personal statement for a master’s or PhD application. You can download the full examples below.

Urban Planning Psychology History

Table of contents

Getting started with your personal statement, the introduction: start with an attention-grabbing opening, the main body: craft your narrative, the conclusion: look ahead, revising, editing, and proofreading your personal statement, frequently asked questions, other interesting articles.

Before you start writing, the first step is to understand exactly what’s expected of you. If the application gives you a question or prompt for your personal statement, the most important thing is to respond to it directly.

For example, you might be asked to focus on the development of your personal identity; challenges you have faced in your life; or your career motivations. This will shape your focus and emphasis—but you still need to find your own unique approach to answering it.

There’s no universal template for a personal statement; it’s your chance to be creative and let your own voice shine through. But there are strategies you can use to build a compelling, well-structured story.

The first paragraph of your personal statement should set the tone and lead smoothly into the story you want to tell.

Strategy 1: Open with a concrete scene

An effective way to catch the reader’s attention is to set up a scene that illustrates something about your character and interests. If you’re stuck, try thinking about:

• A personal experience that changed your perspective
• A story from your family’s history
• A memorable teacher or learning experience
• An unusual or unexpected encounter

To write an effective scene, try to go beyond straightforward description; start with an intriguing sentence that pulls the reader in, and give concrete details to create a convincing atmosphere.

Strategy 2: Open with your motivations

To emphasize your enthusiasm and commitment, you can start by explaining your interest in the subject you want to study or the career path you want to follow.

Just stating that it interests you isn’t enough: first, you need to figure out why you’re interested in this field:

• Is it a longstanding passion or a recent discovery?
• Does it come naturally or have you had to work hard at it?
• How does it fit into the rest of your life?
• What do you think it contributes to society?

Tips for the introduction

• Don’t start on a cliche: avoid phrases like “Ever since I was a child…” or “For as long as I can remember…”
• Do save the introduction for last. If you’re struggling to come up with a strong opening, leave it aside, and note down any interesting ideas that occur to you as you write the rest of the personal statement.

Once you’ve set up the main themes of your personal statement, you’ll delve into more detail about your experiences and motivations.

To structure the body of your personal statement, there are various strategies you can use.

Strategy 1: Describe your development over time

One of the simplest strategies is to give a chronological overview of key experiences that have led you to apply for graduate school.

• What first sparked your interest in the field?
• Which classes, assignments, classmates, internships, or other activities helped you develop your knowledge and skills?
• Where do you want to go next? How does this program fit into your future plans?

Don’t try to include absolutely everything you’ve done—pick out highlights that are relevant to your application. Aim to craft a compelling narrative that shows how you’ve changed and actively developed yourself.

My interest in psychology was first sparked early in my high school career. Though somewhat scientifically inclined, I found that what interested me most was not the equations we learned about in physics and chemistry, but the motivations and perceptions of my fellow students, and the subtle social dynamics that I observed inside and outside the classroom. I wanted to learn how our identities, beliefs, and behaviours are shaped through our interactions with others, so I decided to major in Social Psychology. My undergraduate studies deepened my understanding of, and fascination with, the interplay between an individual mind and its social context.During my studies, I acquired a solid foundation of knowledge about concepts like social influence and group dynamics, but I also took classes on various topics not strictly related to my major. I was particularly interested in how other fields intersect with psychology—the classes I took on media studies, biology, and literature all enhanced my understanding of psychological concepts by providing different lenses through which to look at the issues involved.

Strategy 2: Own your challenges and obstacles

If your path to graduate school hasn’t been easy or straightforward, you can turn this into a strength, and structure your personal statement as a story of overcoming obstacles.

• Is your social, cultural or economic background underrepresented in the field? Show how your experiences will contribute a unique perspective.
• Do you have gaps in your resume or lower-than-ideal grades? Explain the challenges you faced and how you dealt with them.

Don’t focus too heavily on negatives, but use them to highlight your positive qualities. Resilience, resourcefulness and perseverance make you a promising graduate school candidate.

Growing up working class, urban decay becomes depressingly familiar. The sight of a row of abandoned houses does not surprise me, but it continues to bother me. Since high school, I have been determined to pursue a career in urban planning. While people of my background experience the consequences of urban planning decisions first-hand, we are underrepresented in the field itself. Ironically, given my motivation, my economic background has made my studies challenging. I was fortunate enough to be awarded a scholarship for my undergraduate studies, but after graduation I took jobs in unrelated fields to help support my parents. In the three years since, I have not lost my ambition. Now I am keen to resume my studies, and I believe I can bring an invaluable perspective to the table: that of the people most impacted by the decisions of urban planners.

Strategy 3: Demonstrate your knowledge of the field

Especially if you’re applying for a PhD or another research-focused program, it’s a good idea to show your familiarity with the subject and the department. Your personal statement can focus on the area you want to specialize in and reflect on why it matters to you.

• Reflect on the topics or themes that you’ve focused on in your studies. What draws you to them?
• Discuss any academic achievements, influential teachers, or other highlights of your education.
• Talk about the questions you’d like to explore in your research and why you think they’re important.

The personal statement isn’t a research proposal , so don’t go overboard on detail—but it’s a great opportunity to show your enthusiasm for the field and your capacity for original thinking.

In applying for this research program, my intention is to build on the multidisciplinary approach I have taken in my studies so far, combining knowledge from disparate fields of study to better understand psychological concepts and issues. The Media Psychology program stands out to me as the perfect environment for this kind of research, given its researchers’ openness to collaboration across diverse fields. I am impressed by the department’s innovative interdisciplinary projects that focus on the shifting landscape of media and technology, and I hope that my own work can follow a similarly trailblazing approach. More specifically, I want to develop my understanding of the intersection of psychology and media studies, and explore how media psychology theories and methods might be applied to neurodivergent minds. I am interested not only in media psychology but also in psychological disorders, and how the two interact. This is something I touched on during my undergraduate studies and that I’m excited to delve into further.

Strategy 4: Discuss your professional ambitions

Especially if you’re applying for a more professionally-oriented program (such as an MBA), it’s a good idea to focus on concrete goals and how the program will help you achieve them.

• If your career is just getting started, show how your character is suited to the field, and explain how graduate school will help you develop your talents.
• If you have already worked in the profession, show what you’ve achieved so far, and explain how the program will allow you to take the next step.
• If you are planning a career change, explain what has driven this decision and how your existing experience will help you succeed.

Don’t just state the position you want to achieve. You should demonstrate that you’ve put plenty of thought into your career plans and show why you’re well-suited to this profession.

One thing that fascinated me about the field during my undergraduate studies was the sheer number of different elements whose interactions constitute a person’s experience of an urban environment. Any number of factors could transform the scene I described at the beginning: What if there were no bus route? Better community outreach in the neighborhood? Worse law enforcement? More or fewer jobs available in the area? Some of these factors are out of the hands of an urban planner, but without taking them all into consideration, the planner has an incomplete picture of their task. Through further study I hope to develop my understanding of how these disparate elements combine and interact to create the urban environment. I am interested in the social, psychological and political effects our surroundings have on our lives. My studies will allow me to work on projects directly affecting the kinds of working-class urban communities I know well. I believe I can bring my own experiences, as well as my education, to bear upon the problem of improving infrastructure and quality of life in these communities.

Tips for the main body

• Don’t rehash your resume by trying to summarize everything you’ve done so far; the personal statement isn’t about listing your academic or professional experience, but about reflecting, evaluating, and relating it to broader themes.
• Do make your statements into stories: Instead of saying you’re hard-working and self-motivated, write about your internship where you took the initiative to start a new project. Instead of saying you’ve always loved reading, reflect on a novel or poem that changed your perspective.

Your conclusion should bring the focus back to the program and what you hope to get out of it, whether that’s developing practical skills, exploring intellectual questions, or both.

Emphasize the fit with your specific interests, showing why this program would be the best way to achieve your aims.

Strategy 1: What do you want to know?

If you’re applying for a more academic or research-focused program, end on a note of curiosity: what do you hope to learn, and why do you think this is the best place to learn it?

If there are specific classes or faculty members that you’re excited to learn from, this is the place to express your enthusiasm.

Strategy 2: What do you want to do?

If you’re applying for a program that focuses more on professional training, your conclusion can look to your career aspirations: what role do you want to play in society, and why is this program the best choice to help you get there?

Tips for the conclusion

• Don’t summarize what you’ve already said. You have limited space in a personal statement, so use it wisely!
• Do think bigger than yourself: try to express how your individual aspirations relate to your local community, your academic field, or society more broadly. It’s not just about what you’ll get out of graduate school, but about what you’ll be able to give back.

You’ll be expected to do a lot of writing in graduate school, so make a good first impression: leave yourself plenty of time to revise and polish the text.

Your style doesn’t have to be as formal as other kinds of academic writing, but it should be clear, direct and coherent. Make sure that each paragraph flows smoothly from the last, using topic sentences and transitions to create clear connections between each part.

Don’t be afraid to rewrite and restructure as much as necessary. Since you have a lot of freedom in the structure of a personal statement, you can experiment and move information around to see what works best.

Finally, it’s essential to carefully proofread your personal statement and fix any language errors. Before you submit your application, consider investing in professional personal statement editing . For $150, you have the peace of mind that your personal statement is grammatically correct, strong in term of your arguments, and free of awkward mistakes.

A statement of purpose is usually more formal, focusing on your academic or professional goals. It shouldn’t include anything that isn’t directly relevant to the application.

A personal statement can often be more creative. It might tell a story that isn’t directly related to the application, but that shows something about your personality, values, and motivations.

However, both types of document have the same overall goal: to demonstrate your potential as a graduate student and s how why you’re a great match for the program.

The typical length of a personal statement for graduate school applications is between 500 and 1,000 words.

Different programs have different requirements, so always check if there’s a minimum or maximum length and stick to the guidelines. If there is no recommended word count, aim for no more than 1-2 pages.

If you’re applying to multiple graduate school programs, you should tailor your personal statement to each application.

Some applications provide a prompt or question. In this case, you might have to write a new personal statement from scratch: the most important task is to respond to what you have been asked.

If there’s no prompt or guidelines, you can re-use the same idea for your personal statement – but change the details wherever relevant, making sure to emphasize why you’re applying to this specific program.

If the application also includes other essays, such as a statement of purpose , you might have to revise your personal statement to avoid repeating the same information.

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Personal Statement Sentence Starters: Expert Advice

Good personal statement openings are crucial when it comes to engaging admissions tutors.

But in the process of writing your personal statement, you might realise that you’re repeating the words you use in your opening sentences and paragraphs.

This lack of variety can lead to a sense of monotony in tone and content, alienating the reader.

But don’t worry!

There are several sentence starters you can use that won’t leave your personal statement sounding stilted or unnatural and that will help your personal statement stand out.

Here’s an expert guide to using effective sentence starters to improve your personal statement…  

Personal statement sentence starters fall into three specific categories. Introductions, comparisons and conclusions are effective ways to start paragraphs. Use connections, additions and relationships when developing content.  Starters relating to the presentation of ideas work well throughout.

From sixth-form personal statement sentence starters to postgraduate applications, you’ll discover specific examples of each of these personal statement sentence starter categories in the sections below…

Introduction, Comparison and Conclusion Starters

Having a practical understanding of personal statement sentence starters in this category is extremely valuable if you want to achieve greater variety and originality in your writing.

Introducing a new point or topic can become repetitive quickly; how many times have you written “I also” or “as a result”?

Avoiding these common phrases can add depth to your statement, but also encourage the reader to view you as an informed and versatile candidate.

As Mary Curnock Cook, a former UCAS Chief Executive states:

“The personal statement is supposed to be personal. Learning to write about yourself in a compelling way is a vital skill when applying for jobs; using hackneyed phrases is not the best way to stand out.” Mary Curnock Cook

Have you ever felt the need to write the kind of overused opening sentences that start with “At a young age..?”

If so, here are some introductory personal statement openings that will add to the compelling quality of your writing, without making it sound as though you’ve plucked words from a dictionary:

If you can make good use of comparative sentence starters , your writing will be increasingly concise, your points will be made with greater precision and you will be more likely to meet the word or character limit.

Here are some effective examples:

What follows are some excellent ways in which to start a concluding sentence or paragraph.

Remember that your aim is not to repeat previous content, but to use the opportunity to lead into the next paragraph or topic:

Connection, Addition and Relationship Starters

Once you’ve begun writing about a specific point or topic, you’ll find you need to connect one idea with another in order to make a concise or compelling point.

This connection can be challenging, as very quickly you might start to use a limited range of vocabulary such as “also” or “along with” or “as well as”.

These are the kinds of words that applicants use frequently, and they can indicate a lack of breadth, vocabulary or research in the mind of an admissions tutor.

Unoriginal vocabulary can also lead to your personal statement being rejected, or even to your entire application being refused, in the case of plagiarism.

According to Carly Minsky at timeshighereducation.com these are some of the most overused phrases featured in UCAS personal statements , so do make sure you don’t repeat them.

Below are some excellent suggestions for connecting or adding phrases, concepts or ideas in your personal statement:

It can be vitally important to effectively illustrate the relationship between an experience or piece of knowledge that you hold and the demands of the course or role that you are applying for.

The focus of the reader needs to be on the content itself , not the words you use to compare or contrast it, and these personal statement sentence starters will help you achieve this, every time:

Now you’re feeling more confident about your vocabulary, you should get to grips with the right structure to use for your personal statement.

My Personal Statement Template eBook gives you 10 original templates to follow when you’re writing a personal statement, meaning you’re guaranteed to find the right structure for your application.

It’s packed full of useful advice and shows you exactly what content to include. You’ll also discover how many words or characters to use for each paragraph for maximum effect!

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Sentence Starters for Presenting New Ideas

An important aspect of your personal statement is the presentation of new ideas and concepts that illustrate your understanding of the course topic.

You should also show that you can synthesise aspects of your prior experience and knowledge.

This can be a complex process to write about, so having dynamic and effective vocabulary to work with can be extremely valuable.

The table below gives you a selection of examples of the kinds of sentence starters you could use to introduce a new concept in a personal statement opening sentence:

It’s worth noting that, generally speaking, new ideas and concepts should be contained within a specific paragraph. If you’re looking for advice on how to structure the paragraphs in your personal statement, check out my article here.

You may have noticed that I haven’t included a section in this post devoted to the kinds of sentence starters you shouldn’t use in your personal statement.

That’s because each personal statement is unique, and good sentence openers need to focus on different aspects of your experiences and ambitions. Try not to think about avoiding specific words or phrases and focus more on including content that best represents your ambitions!

If you really want some pointers on what not to include, Amy Davies has a great article on words you should never use in your personal statement over at whatuni.com . 

If you want to focus on writing an amazing opening paragraph, then check out my post that tells you exactly how great first paragraphs are created!

If you’re just starting out, then this is the post for you…

Good luck with your personal statement, and don’t forget to contact me if you’d like some 1-1 support.

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Your personal statement is central to your uni application. It's your chance to talk directly to the universities you've selected; to tell them what you want to study there and why. So, yep,  pressure . This is an important document and – worse still – you've got to fill it with a hefty 47 lines of information about yourself.  For some people, that's an exercise in deciding what to cut out, but for many of us it presents the challenge of thinking up enough worthwhile stuff to include. But you can do it. You just need to think about your experience and your aims in the right way. Visit the  personal statement forum  and the  university applications forum  on our sister site The Student Room to see what other students are saying about applying to uni. 

Is it the right course?

Start from the top. Are you definitely aiming for the right course? If you're struggling to explain why you love a certain subject, maybe there's a reason for that. "If someone can't write a paragraph or two about why the subject they want to study interests them, then perhaps they should reconsider whether the course is for them," says The Student Room 's personal statement adviser SlowlorisIncognito.  You're still at the application stage here, you've got every opportunity to rethink the course you'll apply for. Going to uni is a big step; take the time to think about it clearly.  Once you've picked a course that you feel genuinely enthusiastic about, that whole 'why I want to study this subject' part of your personal statement is going to become a whole lot easier to tackle.

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So you've picked a course you love, now you need to make your enthusiasm clear.  Admissions staff aren't expecting to read a 47-line love letter to computer science, but you do need to show you're not just planning to turn up for the jollies. "Make sure you really get across your reasoning for wanting to study the course," says Phil O’Neil, UK recruitment officer at Staffordshire University. "Yes it’s a  personal  statement, and you’re writing about yourself, but expressing your desire for the course is essential – why do you want to study it?"

Need some help? Root around for relevant stuff online. For instance, TED talks cover a range of subjects in bite-sized lectures – ideal for digging out a quick talking point.  Or how about starting a blog about your subject? You won't want to include long extracts and links, but writing a bit about the topics you've covered is a great way to show your interest. Offline, you could look at joining a club or society at college or school. It's never too late to join and you'll quickly get some useful experience for your statement. Or check whether local universities are running open lectures. A quick line about the last lecture you attended and what it taught you would be perfect for showing your excitement about learning beyond A-level.

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Don't be afraid to talk about yourself

"It’s an odd thing to talk about yourself," says Naomi Mackrill, outreach officer, University of Gloucestershire. "But don’t make assumptions about what an admissions tutor knows about you.  "Those things that make you different are what they need to know. They make you who you are, so tell us about them." This is  your  personal statement, it's not an essay on why you think physics/English/geography is great. What you want to do is make yourself stand out as someone who is genuinely interested in your subject and who will be a good fit at your chosen university.  Sound challenging? Start with a blank sheet of paper and make a list. Write down everything that you can think of about yourself: your hobbies, your interests, things you've done, lessons you've particularly enjoyed, books you've read...all that stuff.  Don't filter anything at this stage – just write it all down whether it seems immediately relevant or not. Once you've got a page full of notes about yourself, pick out a handful of the best. Three or four things will do. You can now weave these into your statement to elevate it from the generic to the truly personal. Ali Cooper, admissions manager at Bucks New University, suggests a similar technique. "Draw a mind map with ‘About Me’ in the centre and then list everything around it," she says. "Turn these facts into sentences, so volunteering or shop work taught you how to be punctual, to listen to customers and be organised – all of which you can relate to university."

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You don't have to send off the very first thing you write. In fact, you definitely shouldn't.  Give yourself plenty of time to write your personal statement so that, once you do have a first draft, you can show it to your teacher or tutor. By doing this, you get to tap into all of their experience; they'll probably have helped hundreds of students like you through the uni application process in the past. Their feedback will give you a roadmap of what you need to do with your personal statement; where you need to expand something, where you need to take something out. Maybe your conclusion is amazing, but your opening paragraph is rubbish. Who would you rather have work that out: your teacher, or the admissions tutor at your favourite university?

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The best statements tend to be genuine and specific from the very start. You'll be on the right track if you show your enthusiasm for the subject or course, your understanding of it, and what you want to achieve.

Admissions tutors – the people who read and score your personal statement – say don’t get stressed about trying to think of a ‘killer opening’. Discover the advice below and take your time to think about how best to introduce yourself.

Liz Bryan: HE Coordinator and Careers Advisor, Queen Elizabeth Sixth Form College

Preparing to write your personal statement.

Start by making some notes . The personal statement allows admissions tutors to form a picture of who you are. So, for the opener, think about writing down things, such as:

• why you’re a good candidate
• your motivations
• what brings you to this course

If you’re applying for multiple courses , think about how your skills, academic interests, and the way you think are relevant to all the courses you've chosen.

Top tips on how to write your statement opener

We spoke to admissions tutors at unis and colleges – read on for their tips.

1. Don't begin with the overkill opening

Try not to overthink the opening sentence. You need to engage the reader with your relevant thoughts and ideas, but not go overboard .

Tutors said: ‘The opening is your chance to introduce yourself, to explain your motivation for studying the course and to demonstrate your understanding of it. The best personal statements get to the point quickly. Go straight in. What excites you about the course and why do you want to learn about it more?’

Be succinct and draw the reader in, but not with a gimmick. This isn't the X Factor. Admissions tutor

2. Write about why you want to study that course

Think about why you want to study the course and how you can demonstrate this in your written statement :

’Your interest in the course is the biggest thing. Start with a short sentence that captures the reason why you’re interested in studying the area you’re applying for and that communicates your enthusiasm for it. Don't waffle or say you want to study something just because it's interesting. Explain what you find interesting about it.’

It's much better to engage us with something interesting, relevant, specific and current in your opening line… Start with what's inspiring you now, not what inspired you when you were six. Admissions tutor

3. Avoid cliches

Try to avoid cliches and the most obvious opening sentences so you stand out from the very first line . UCAS publishes a list of common opening lines each year. Here are just some overused phrases to avoid using in your personal statement:

• From a young age…      
• For as long as I can remember…
• I am applying for this course because…
• I have always been interested in…
• Throughout my life I have always enjoyed…

And try not to use quotes . Quotations are top of the list of admissions tutors' pet hates.

4. Maybe don't begin at the start?

’Concentrate on the main content of your statement and write the introduction last. I think the opening line is the hardest one to write, so I often say leave it until the end and just try and get something down on paper.’

It may be easier to get on with writing the main content of your statement and coming back to the introduction afterwards –that way you will also know what you’re introducing.

I often advise applicants to start with paragraph two, where you get into why you want to study the course. That's what we're really interested in. Admissions tutor

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• Do talk about you and your enthusiasm for the subject from the very start.
• Do be specific. Explain what you want to study and why in the first two sentences.
• Do come back to the opening sentences if you can’t think what to write straightaway.
• Don’t waste time trying to think of a catchy opening.
• Don't waffle – simply explain what you find interesting about the subject and show that you know what you are applying for.
• Don't rely on someone else's words. It's your statement after all – they want to know what you think.

One final thought

Think about making a link between your opening sentence and closing paragraph – a technique sometimes called the 'necklace approach’.

You can reinforce what you said at the start or add an extra dimension. For example, if you started with an interesting line about what’s currently motivating you to study your chosen degree course, you could link back to it at the end, perhaps with something about why you’d love to study this further at uni.

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I was recently struggling with a big decision and talking about it with a friend. It’s a risky decision and honestly, it’s unnecessary. My life would continue beautifully as is if I were to say no but could improve exponentially if I were to say yes. As we considered the pros and cons of my choices, I realized that it all came down to my belief in myself. If I said yes, I’d be diving into the deep end of the uncertainty pool and swimming or sinking would all depend on me. No one else. And if I said no, my life would remain the same (for the time being) and I wouldn’t experience any waves, or even ripples really, in the pool.

I really wanted to say yes and as it became clearer that this decision was really about my self-belief and nothing else, my friend said, “I will always bet on myself.”

Her words stopped me. I needed to sit with them for a moment to really consider what that meant for me.

What It Means to Bet on Ourselves

When we bet on ourselves, we’re showing self-confidence and a belief in our own abilities, decisions, and potential for success. We believe that we have the necessary skills (or at the very least, that we can acquire them) to do the risky thing. We believe that we make good decisions overall and will do so here again. And we truly believe in our potential, that we will be successful no matter what. This last one is a little tricky because we also must be willing to believe that if the risk doesn’t work out, we’ll still be successful. That we’ll learn and grow from the outcome no matter what.

When we bet on ourselves, we trust ourselves to navigate challenges and are willing to take risks because we believe in our capacity to achieve our goals . We know that we’ve been through hard things before and have been able to navigate each of them. We have resilience . We know that this resilience is a part of our very being and trust that we can figure things out as they arise. We also believe that we know how to achieve big things, and even if we’re not where we want to be right now, we can expand our capacity to make it happen.

Betting on us conveys self-reliance, determination, and a positive self-image . When we take the risk, we’re demonstrating that we have power. I’m not talking about external power here, I’m talking about internal. The type of power that no one can take away from you, the kind that follows you from thing to thing, the power that lives and breathes deep inside you and always shows up when you need it most. Betting on us pulls at that power and brings it to the surface.

How to Know When It’s Time to Bet on Yourself

It can be tricky to figure out whether you should bet on yourself, especially if you don’t have much experience doing so (or if you’ve been unsuccessful most times you’ve done it in the past).

Here are some questions that helped me. I encourage you to grab a journal and take some time to reflect on each question. Write down whatever comes to mind and don’t worry about grammar, punctuation, or editing.

• When was the last time you bet on yourself? Write about the situation, the risk you took, why you made the decision, and the outcome (including any lessons or growth that occurred).
• Do you usually bet on yourself, or do you play it safe? Think of patterns and see if there are times or situations when you tend to bet on yourself versus times or situations when you don’t. What do you notice about your patterns? What do they tell you about your belief in yourself?
• If you were to bet on yourself most of time, what would your life look like? Let your imagination run wild here and write about this life full of risky bets.
• What happens when you don’t bet on yourself? Write about how you feel, how you behave, how you think, and how your life looks.
• If there’s a current situation where you’re trying to decide whether or not to bet on yourself, take time to examine your responses to the previous questions. What do you notice? What do they tell you about betting on yourself now?

Future Betting

I personally want to be like my friend and to be able to loudly and confidently declare: I will always bet on myself.

Her words caused such a shift in my mindset and emotions that I began to act. I took the first steps necessary for this bold move and did it with the belief that I can achieve my goals and navigate any difficulties along the way. And I know this because I’ve always done this. I’ve always figured things out and I’ve always found ways to grow, evolve, and be successful.

What about you? Are you ready to join me in this declaration?

Melanie McNally, Psy.D., is a clinical psychologist, brain coach, and author of The Emotionally Intelligent Teen and Helping Your Unmotivated Teen.

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Republican vice presidential nominee and Ohio Sen. J.D. Vance sought to negatively frame the 24-year military career of newly minted Democratic vice presidential candidate Tim Walz, Minnesota’s current governor.

“When the United States Marine Corps, when the United States of America, asked me to go to Iraq to serve my country, I did it,” Vance  said  Aug. 7 at the Shelby, Michigan, police department. Vance  served  as a combat correspondent for the U.S. Marine Corps from 2003 to 2007 and deployed to Iraq for six months in 2005 but  did not experience combat .

Vance continued, “When Tim Walz was asked by his country to go to Iraq, do you know what he did? He dropped out of the Army and allowed his unit to go without him. … I think it’s shameful.” At a different event, Vance used the phrase “ stolen valor ” to describe his accusations against Walz.

On X, Rep. Ronny Jackson, R-Texas, made a  claim similar to Vance’s,  writing, “Tim Walz TURNED HIS BACK on the soldiers in his unit because he was TOO afraid to deploy to Iraq!!”

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Walz retired from the Minnesota National Guard in May 2005. He had submitted retirement paperwork five to seven months beforehand, Fox News  reported , citing the Minnesota National Guard.

In March 2005, Walz’s battalion had been notified about a possible deployment to Iraq within two years, Walz’s congressional campaign said in a  news release  that month, citing the National Guard Public Affairs Office. The Minnesota National Guard said the battalion then received an official order about mobilizing for deployment to Iraq in July 2005, after Walz retired.

Vance’s statement misleads by distorting the timeline. Walz had not been “asked by his country to go to Iraq,” as Vance said. He had been given a two-year window for a potential, not definite, deployment. And the official deployment notice came after Walz’s retirement.

Walz has said since before his Army retirement that he left to run for Congress. He filed his candidacy paperwork in February 2005, before the March 2005 notification about the potential deployment.

This is not a new line of attack. When Walz ran for a second term as Minnesota governor in 2022, his Republican opponent, who did not serve in the U.S. military,  criticized  Walz for leaving the National Guard before his unit deployed to Iraq.

Two retired Minnesota National Guard command sergeant majors also  penned a paid letter  to a Minnesota newspaper in 2018 claiming Walz “embellished and selectively omitted facts” about his military service. This letter resurfaced on X after Vice President Kamala Harris tapped Walz as her running mate. Other  guard   members  who served with Walz have defended him.

Walz’s spokesperson in the Minnesota governor’s office did not respond to a request for comment, and the Harris-Walz campaign declined to comment.

When reached by  The New York Times , a Harris-Walz campaign spokesperson didn’t provide new details about Walz’s retirement timeline and instead highlighted Walz’s record advocating for veterans and their families.

When contacted for comment, Vance’s campaign spokesperson sent links to the 2005 Walz campaign news release about the potential deployment and several news stories that quote former members of Walz’s battalion who were upset with him for not deploying to Iraq.

Walz’s military timeline

Walz enlisted in the Nebraska National Guard on April 8, 1981, two days after his 17th birthday. In 1996, Walz transferred to the Minnesota National Guard, where he served in the 1st Battalion, 125th Field Artillery until he retired May 16, 2005, Army Lt. Col. Kristen Augé, Minnesota National Guard’s state public affairs officer, told PolitiFact in a statement.

During his service, Walz responded to floods and tornadoes, specialized in heavy artillery and was recognized for his proficiency in sharpshooting and hand grenades, Minnesota Public Radio  reported .

On Aug. 3, 2003, Walz and his battalion were deployed to Italy to support U.S. operations in Afghanistan under Operation Enduring Freedom. Walz returned to Minnesota in April 2004, Augé said.

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In May 2005, Walz, then 41, officially retired from the Minnesota National Guard to campaign for Minnesota’s 1st Congressional District. He  filed  his statement of candidacy paperwork with the Federal Election Commission on Feb. 10, 2005. Walz was elected to Congress in November 2006.

Al Bonnifield, who served with Walz in the Minnesota National Guard, told  Minnesota Public Radio  in 2018 that Walz weighed his retirement from the guard and congressional run “very heavy.” Bonnifield reiterated this to  The Washington Post  on Aug. 7.

“Would the soldier look down on him because he didn’t go with us? Would the common soldier say, ‘Hey, he didn’t go with us, he’s trying to skip out on a deployment?’ And he wasn’t,” Bonnifield said in 2018.

Doug Julin, who served as a more senior command sergeant major in Walz’s battalion, said Walz went over his head to get retirement approval before the unit’s deployment was official, because Julin would have “analyzed it and challenged him,” the  New York Post  reported Aug. 8.

Others who served in Walz’s battalion have said he “ditched” them and his actions were “dishonorable,” Fox News  reported .

Battalion’s deployment to Iraq

Walz’s unit received an “alert order” for mobilization to Iraq on July 14, 2005, Army Lt. Col. Ryan Rossman, Minnesota National Guard’s director of operations, told PolitiFact in a statement.

The unit received the official Department of the Army mobilization order Aug. 14, 2005, and mobilized Oct. 12, 2005, Rossman said.

The unit deployed to Iraq in March 2006 and was deployed for 19 months, according to an October 2007  congressional resolution .

The two retired Minnesota National Guard command sergeant majors who wrote the 2018 letter said the battalion received a “warning order” in early 2005 “to prepare to be mobilized for active duty for a deployment to Iraq.” They did not specify the warning letter’s date. Augé of the Minnesota National Guard told PolitiFact the agency doesn’t have information about any unofficial orders that might have been sent to the battalion.

An  archived March 20, 2005, press release  from Walz’s congressional campaign website said the National Guard Public Affairs Office announced March 17, 2005, “a possible partial mobilization of roughly 2,000 troops from the Minnesota National Guard.” The announcement said a portion of Walz’s battalion could be mobilized to serve in Iraq within the next two years.

Walz said in his campaign’s press release, “As Command Sergeant Major I have a responsibility not only to ready my battalion for Iraq, but also to serve if called on. I am dedicated to serving my country to the best of my ability, whether that is in Washington, D.C., or in Iraq. I don’t want to speculate on what shape my campaign will take if I am deployed, but I have no plans to drop out of the race.”

Although Walz had been  promoted  in 2004 to command sergeant major, he retired in 2005 as a master sergeant,  one rank below  command sergeant major, “for benefit purposes because he did not complete additional coursework at the U.S. Army Sergeants Major Academy,” Augé said.

Joseph Eustice, a 32-year military veteran who served in and led the same guard unit as Walz, told  The New York Times  and  NewsNation  in Aug. 7 interviews that when Walz decided to retire in May 2005, their unit had heard rumors of a potential deployment to Iraq, but had not received official orders.

Vance said, “When Tim Walz was asked by his country to go to Iraq, do you know what he did? He dropped out of the Army and allowed his unit to go without him.”

Vance’s statement ignores that Walz’s unit was not officially ordered to go to Iraq until July 2005, two months after Walz officially retired.

After 24 years of military service, Walz said he retired from the Minnesota National Guard in May 2005 to run for Congress. He had submitted retirement paperwork five to seven months beforehand. He filed candidacy paperwork in February 2005.

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There’s an element of truth in Vance’s statement because in March 2005, before Walz officially retired, his battalion was notified of possible deployment to Iraq within two years. Walz was aware at the time of his retirement that deployment could be possible and one of his fellow guard members described Walz’s retirement decision as “very heavy.”

But the March 2005 notification gave a time frame of two years for a possible — not definite — deployment that would not occur immediately, which is the way Vance’s statement framed it.

At PolitiFact, the burden of proof is on the speaker, Vance, who did not provide details to support his statement. We rate it Mostly False.

PolitiFact Researcher Caryn Baird contributed to this report.

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Millions of Americans may have had sensitive information leaked

The company whose data breach may have jeopardized every American’s Social Security number and left them vulnerable to identity theft recently made two public admissions about the incident.

The first was an acknowledgment the data theft actually happened, something National Public Data, a Florida-based company that collects personal information for background checks, resisted doing for months.

The company posted a “Security Incident” notice on its site to report “potential leaks of certain data in April 2024 and summer 2024.” The company said the breach appeared to involve a third party “that was trying to hack into data in late December 2023.”

National Public Data also recognized that more personal data may have been released than was previously reported, leaving those affected at graver risk of potential fraud.

What happened?

The hacking group USDoD claimed in April to have stolen personal records of 2.9 billion people from National Public Data, according to a class-action lawsuit filed in U.S. District Court in Fort Lauderdale, Fla.

Posting in a forum popular among hackers, the group offered to sell the data for $3.5 million , a cybersecurity expert said in a post on X.

A purported member of USDoD said last week they were offering “ the full NPD database ,” according to a screenshot taken by BleepingComputer.

The information consists of about 2.7 billion records. Each includes a person’s full name, address, date of birth, Social Security number and phone number, along with alternate names and birth dates, the member claimed.

What’s new?

National Public Data acknowledged the breach also included email addresses — a crucial piece for identity thieves and fraudsters.

Having a person’s email address makes it easier to target them with phishing attacks, which try to dupe people into revealing passwords to financial accounts or downloading malware that can extract sensitive personal information from devices.

In addition, because many people use their email address to log into online accounts, it could be used to try to hijack those accounts through password resets.

Finding out who was hacked

A free tool from the cybersecurity company Pentester found that other personal data purportedly exposed by the breach, including Social Security numbers, were on the dark web.

National Public Data said on its website that it will notify individuals if there are “further significant developments” applicable to them.

At this point, it appears that the only notice provided by National Public Data is the page on its website, which states, “We are notifying you so that you can take action which will assist to minimize or eliminate potential harm. We strongly advise you to take preventive measures to help prevent and detect any misuse of your information.”

How to protect yourself

The steps recommended by National Public Data include checking your financial accounts for unauthorized activity and placing a free fraud alert on your accounts at the three major credit bureaus, Equifax , Experian and TransUnion .

Once you’ve placed a fraud alert on your accounts, the company advised, ask for a free credit report, then check it for accounts and inquiries that you don’t recognize. “These can be signs of identity theft.”

Security experts also advise putting a freeze on your credit files at the three major credit bureaus. You can do so for free, and it will prevent criminals from taking out loans, signing up for credit cards and opening financial accounts under your name.

The catch is that you’ll need to remember to lift the freeze temporarily if you are obtaining or applying for something that requires a credit check.

In the meantime, security experts say, make sure all of your online accounts use two-factor authentication to make them harder to hijack.

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Hackers Just Leaked a Bunch of Social Security Numbers. Here's What To Know

Initial reports said hackers stole over 2.9 billion data entries., published aug. 16, 2024.

On April 8, 2024 , a group of hackers known as "USDoD" posted to a hacking forum claims that they had access to over 2.9 billion records stolen from a background checking company known as National Public Data. According to the post, the data contained names, addresses and social security numbers of people located in the U.S. The group wanted to sell the data for $3.5 million. 

On Aug. 2, 2024, Bloomberg Law reported on a class action lawsuit filed against National Public Data. The lawsuit alleged that the company had collected its data from non-public sources, meaning that people did not knowingly provide their information to the company. The lawsuit accused National Public Data of " negligence, unjust enrichment, and breaches of fiduciary duty and third-party beneficiary contract," according to the Bloomberg Law report.

Just four days later, on Aug. 6, 2024, the information stolen in the data breach was posted to the same hacking forum. This time, however, it was available for free. According to a report from BleepingComputer , an online publication focused on technology and cybersecurity, the files contained nearly 2.7 billion entries, a bit less than the 2.9 billion figure originally claimed in April. Some entries contained more information than others, including phone numbers, birthdates and aliases, but all entries contained a social security number, an address and a name. In the following week, major publications like The Los Angeles Times and The New York Times reported on the data breach.

Snopes independently investigated the data breach and found that many of the entries were legitimate, although not without some typos and errors. We were able to confirm that not everyone's information was leaked, although many people's were.

National Public Data posted the following statement to its webpage addressing the data breach:

There appears to have been a data security incident that may have involved some of your personal information. The incident is believed to have involved a third-party bad actor that was trying to hack into data in late December 2023, with potential leaks of certain data in April 2024 and summer 2024. We conducted an investigation and subsequent information has come to light. What Information Was Involved? The information that was suspected of being breached contained name, email address, phone number, social security number, and mailing address(es).

However, the lawsuit claims that National Public Data did not alert individuals who were affected by the breach.

The cybersecurity company Pentester released a free tool that allows users to search the leaked database for their information. A Pentester spokesperson told Snopes via email that the company sourced the information from the hacking forum and then altered the database to redact the social security numbers to protect people's identity. The spokesperson recommended that users concerned about their information being publicly available should request a free credit freeze from the three credit bureaus, Equifax , Experian and TransUnion , and monitor their credit situation closely.

While individuals don't have control over a company getting hacked and revealing their information, they can still take steps to help limit how compromised they would be. 

On the technology side, ensure that you are not reusing passwords and turn on two-factor authentication. On the more personal side, stay skeptical of any phone calls, emails or text messages you receive that claim to be from your bank or another service provider you work with, and never send money or give out information like usernames and passwords to these people. If you're concerned that the messages could be legitimate, separately search for the supposed company's customer service line or fraud department to ask for help.

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Donald Trump mocks Kamala Harris's voice and appearance in rally speech laden with insults

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Republican presidential nominee Donald Trump meandered between economic remarks and personal insults at a rally in Pennsylvania. ( AP: Carolyn Kaster )

Donald Trump has insulted how Kamala Harris looks and speaks in a speech to a Pennsylvania rally where he was billed to talk about Republican policies.

The former president also claimed she "will be easier to beat" than Joe Biden would have been in the upcoming US election.

What's next?

Democrats will kick off their four-day national convention on Monday, which will mark the party's welcoming of Ms Harris as their nominee.

Donald Trump used a presidential campaign rally to launch personal attacks on his political adversaries, including declaring three times he was better looking than Vice-President Kamala Harris.

Addressing a rally in Pennsylvania's Wilkes-Barre on Saturday, Mr Trump wound back and forth between hitting his points on economic policy and delivering a smattering of insults and impressions of President Joe Biden and French President Emmanuel Macron.

The former president has seemed to struggle to adjust to Ms Harris, his new opponent, after the Democrats nominated her as their presidential candidate. 

"You don't mind if I go off teleprompter for a second, do you? Joe Biden hates her," Mr Trump told his crowd of supporters, after attacking the Democrats for inflation at the top of his speech.

In multiple campaign appearances over the past week, he has diverged from policies he was billed to speak about and brought into play a rotation of familiar attack lines and insults.

Joseph Costello, a spokesperson for the Harris campaign, responded to Mr Trump in a statement, saying, "Another rally, same old show" and that Trump "resorts to lies, name-calling, and confused rants", because he can't sell his agenda.

"The more Americans hear Trump speak, the clearer the choice this November: Vice-President Harris is unifying voters with her positive vision to protect our freedoms, build up the middle class, and move America forward — and Donald Trump is trying to take us backwards."

Portraying Harris as far left 

Vice-President Kamala Harris will be officially welcomed as the Democrats' nominee at their national convention starting Monday. ( AP: LM Otero )

Mr Trump's remarks came as Democrats prepare for their four-day national convention kicking off on Monday in Chicago, which will mark the party's welcoming of Ms Harris as their nominee. 

Her replacement of Mr Biden less than four months before the November election has reinvigorated Democrats and their coalition, and presented a new challenge for the Republicans.

Mr Trump hammered Ms Harris on the economy, associating her with the Biden administration's inflation woes and likening her latest proposal against price gouging to measures in communist nations. 

He has said previously a federal ban on price gouging for groceries would lead to food shortages, rationing and hunger. 

On Saturday, asked why she hadn't worked to solve prices when she and Biden were sworn into office in 2021, Mr Trump said: "Day one for Kamala was three and a half years ago. So why didn't she do it then? So this is day 1,305."

To address high prices, Mr Trump said he would sign an executive order on his first day sworn in as president "directing every cabinet secretary and agency head to use every power we have to drive prices down, but we're going to drive them down in a capitalist way, not in a communist way".

He predicted financial ruin for the country, and said Pennsylvania in particular would be "ruined" if Ms Harris wins, citing her past opposition to fracking, an oil and gas extraction process commonly used in the state. 

Ms Harris's campaign has tried to soften her stance on the practice, saying she would not ban it, although that was her position when she was seeking the 2020 presidential nomination.

Attack on personal terms

Mr Trump has a long history of belittling his opponents with jibes. ( AP: Laurence Kesterson )

Mr Trump laced in attacks on Ms Harris's laugh and said she was "not a very good wordsmith" and mocked the names of the CNN anchors who moderated the debate he had with Mr Biden in June.

Musing on her recent image on the cover of Time magazine, he took issue with a Wall Street Journal columnist remarking earlier this month on Ms Harris's beauty.

"I am much better looking than her," Mr Trump said, drawing laughs from the crowd. 

"I'm a better looking person than Kamala."

He also took issue with the way his style is typically portrayed in news reports.

"They will say he's rambling. I don't ramble. I'm a really smart guy."

In a meandering speech of more than 100 minutes, Mr Trump repeated his false claim that he lost the 2020 election due to fraud, dismissed the threat of climate change and said his plan to impose across-the-board tariffs on foreign goods would not act as a tax on US consumers, an assertion that most economists contest.

Battleground states

Pennsylvania was one of three Rust Belt states, along with Wisconsin and Michigan, that helped power Mr Trump's upset victory in 2016. 

The Saturday rally was his fifth at the arena in Wilkes-Barre, the largest city in Luzerne County, where he has had victories in the past two elections owing to support from its white, non-college-educated voter base.

Mr Biden, who grew up in Scranton, Pennsylvania, flipped the state back to the Democrats in 2020.

With 19 electoral votes out of the 270 needed to secure the White House, compared with 15 in Michigan and 10 in Wisconsin, Pennsylvania may be the biggest prize in this year's election and potentially tip the balance for either candidate.

Ms Harris's entry into the race last month has up-ended the contest, erasing the lead Mr Trump built in the final weeks of Mr Biden's campaign. She is leading Mr Trump by more than two percentage points in Pennsylvania, according to the poll tracking website FiveThirtyEight.

"I believe she will be easier to beat than him," Mr Trump said, referring to the two Democrats, branding Ms Harris a "radical" and a "lunatic".

On Sunday, Ms Harris plans a bus tour starting in Pittsburgh, with a stop in Rochester, a small town to the north. Mr Trump has scheduled a visit on Monday to a plant that manufactures nuclear fuel containers in York. Mr Trump's running mate JD Vance is expected to be in Philadelphia that day.

The battleground states — seen as critical for winning the election — also include Arizona, North Carolina, Nevada and Georgia.